阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 「adult books」は「大人向けの本」という意味になり、mangaを説明する表現としては不自然です。「books such as manga」または具体的な漫画のジャンルを使いましょう。また、質問に直接答えた後、読む場所や頻度などの具体的な情報を追加すると、より自然で効果的な回答になります。

示例: Yes, I do. I usually read books such as manga at the library because it is quiet and comfortable. I especially enjoy adventure stories.

建议: 理由をつなぐ際に「and because」を重ねず、「because」を使って一文に整理しましょう。「watching screen」は不自然なので、「looking at a screen for too long」または「spending too much time looking at screens」と言います。また、「my book」より一般的な「books」が適切です。

示例: I prefer reading on paper because looking at a screen for too long can strain my eyes. I also find it easier to concentrate when I read a printed book.

建议: 冒頭の「And」は不要です。質問は「注意深く読む場合」と「そうでない場合」の両方を尋ねているため、まずそれぞれを明確に答えましょう。「write some sentences through reading the books」は「write a summary」などに、「when we did the book generally」は「when we read for pleasure」などに言い換えると自然です。

示例: I need to read carefully when I am studying or writing a summary because I have to understand the details. However, when I read for pleasure, I usually read more quickly and do not focus on every word.

建议: 「a detailed reading」ではなく「detailed reading」または「reading in detail」と言います。同じ表現を繰り返さず、「because it helps me understand the plot and characters」のように具体的な理由を述べましょう。最後の部分は意味が不明確なので、読書が知識や想像力に与える効果を簡潔に説明するとよいです。

示例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me understand the plot and the characters more clearly. It also allows me to notice important details and learn new vocabulary.

× I prefer to read on paper and because when I have too much watching screen will have a bad effect on my eyes so I want to read my book on paper.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because watching screens too much has a bad effect on my eyes, so I want to read my books on paper.

The subject of the verb is the gerund phrase watching screens too much, which is singular. Therefore, use has instead of will have when stating a general fact. The present tense is appropriate because the student is describing a usual preference and a general effect.

× I prefer to read on paper and because when I have too much watching screen will have a bad effect on my eyes so I want to read my book on paper.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because watching screens too much has a bad effect on my eyes, so I want to read my books on paper.

When referring to screens in general, use the plural form screens. Also, books is more natural when referring to books generally rather than one specific book.

× I prefer to read on paper and because when I have too much watching screen will have a bad effect on my eyes so I want to read my book on paper.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because watching screens too much has a bad effect on my eyes, so I want to read my books on paper.

The original sentence combines and, because, when, and so in an unclear structure. Use because to introduce the reason and so to introduce the result. Avoid beginning the reason with the incomplete phrase and because when.

× And if we need to write some sentences through reading the books, we need to read carefully under And when we did the book generally, we don't need to read carefully.

✓ If we need to write sentences based on what we read, we need to read carefully. However, when we generally read books, we do not need to read carefully.

The original contains two ideas joined together without a clear sentence boundary. Divide the ideas into two sentences and use However to show the contrast between careful reading and general reading.

× And if we need to write some sentences through reading the books, we need to read carefully under And when we did the book generally, we don't need to read carefully.

✓ If we need to write sentences based on what we read, we need to read carefully. However, when we generally read books, we do not need to read carefully.

And is incorrectly repeated in the middle of the sentence, and under cannot connect these ideas. Use However as a conjunction-like transition to introduce the contrasting situation.

× And if we need to write some sentences through reading the books, we need to read carefully under And when we did the book generally, we don't need to read carefully.

✓ If we need to write sentences based on what we read, we need to read carefully. However, when we generally read books, we do not need to read carefully.

Use books without the definite article when talking about books in general. The books would suggest specific books that have already been identified.

× I prefer a detailed reading because by using a detailed reading I can understand the story of the book Bay Matt which you had a good effect on my now led.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because, by reading in detail, I can understand the story of the book better, which has a good effect on my knowledge.

The original sentence has an unclear clause after the phrase the story of the book and contains several incomplete or incorrectly connected expressions. Use by reading in detail to express the method clearly, and use which has a good effect on my knowledge to form a complete relative clause.

× I prefer a detailed reading because by using a detailed reading I can understand the story of the book Bay Matt which you had a good effect on my now led.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because, by reading in detail, I can understand the story of the book better, which has a good effect on my knowledge.

The sentence describes a general effect of detailed reading, so use the present tense has rather than the past tense had. The relative clause refers to the effect of detailed reading in general.

× I prefer a detailed reading because by using a detailed reading I can understand the story of the book Bay Matt which you had a good effect on my now led.

✓ I prefer detailed reading because, by reading in detail, I can understand the story of the book better, which has a good effect on my knowledge.

Better is an adverb that correctly modifies understand. The phrase now led is not an appropriate English expression in this context; knowledge is the suitable noun for the meaning intended.