阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and use present tense; start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words. For example, say you enjoy reading, name specific genres and briefly explain why, using connectives like "because" or "especially".

示例: I enjoy reading, especially manga, fantasy novels and light fiction. For example, I like manga because the artwork and fast-paced plots are relaxing and easy to follow, while fantasy novels let me escape into imaginative worlds.

建议: Give a direct preference sentence, then give two concise, specific reasons using linking words. Reduce hesitations and correct minor grammar (e.g., "I prefer reading on a screen").

示例: I prefer reading on a screen because it's more convenient and allows me to carry many books on my phone. Also, I often read comics and manga on my mobile, which makes digital reading my usual choice.

建议: Open with a clear contrast using a linking word (e.g., "whereas"), then give specific examples and a brief reason for each case. Avoid redundant phrases like "due diligence" without context.

示例: I don't need to read carefully when I'm reading manga or comics because they are mainly for entertainment. Conversely, I read very carefully when studying for exams or doing assignments, because I need to understand details and remember facts.

建议: Start by answering directly ("I prefer detailed reading") and then explain briefly why, using accurate vocabulary and correct grammar (e.g., "the narrator" -> "the author" or "the text"). Avoid vague phrases and fix grammar ("so it helps me identify errors").

示例: I prefer detailed reading because it helps me fully understand the text and notice important details. For instance, when I read a complex article I take time to analyze each paragraph so I don't miss key points or mistakes.

× I liked reading a lot but I have a genre of reading.

✓ I like reading a lot, but I have a preferred genre.

The student mixed past tense 'liked' with present context. Use present simple 'like' to describe current preferences. Also 'a genre of reading' is unnatural; 'preferred genre' is clearer.

× Like for example, I like reading manga's, novels, fantasy books, other stuff like this, but I don't enjoy things that are more subjective of specialized knowledge.

✓ For example, I like reading manga, novels, fantasy books and other similar things, but I don't enjoy subjects that require specialized knowledge.

Plural of 'manga' does not take an apostrophe; remove the apostrophe. 'Other stuff like this' is informal—use 'other similar things.' 'Subjective of specialized knowledge' is incorrect collocation; 'subjects that require specialized knowledge' is appropriate.

× Uh, I'll I'll try to do something that is more relaxing.

✓ I'll try to do something more relaxing.

Repeated 'I'll' is a hesitancy filler; remove duplication. 'Try to do something that is more relaxing' is wordy—'do something more relaxing' is concise and grammatical.

× I like to prefer reading on a screen because nowadays we are used to using screen through mobile phone laptops whether we are at work or we are having fun just watching mobile phone.

✓ I prefer reading on a screen because nowadays we are used to using screens on mobile phones and laptops, whether at work or for entertainment.

'Like to prefer' is redundant—use 'prefer'. 'Using screen through mobile phone laptops' is ungrammatical; correct to 'using screens on mobile phones and laptops'. Simplify 'having fun just watching mobile phone' to 'for entertainment'.

× So I prefer doing it through screen because I also read uh many comic book through mobile only.

✓ So I prefer doing it on a screen because I also read many comic books on my mobile.

Use 'on a screen' rather than 'through screen'. 'Comic book' should be plural 'comic books'. Add possessive 'my mobile' or 'my mobile device' for clarity. Remove filler 'uh'.

× So I usually don't need to be very careful when I'm reading comic books or manga series, but I have to be very careful when I am trying to study for exams or whether it's about assignments and about learning new language.

✓ I usually don't need to be very careful when I'm reading comic books or manga series, but I have to be very careful when I study for exams, work on assignments, or learn a new language.

'When I am trying to study' can be simplified to 'when I study'. 'Whether it's about assignments and about learning new language' is awkward; list parallel activities and use 'a new language'.

× I have to do my due diligence in that.

✓ I have to do my due diligence for that.

Preposition 'in' is less natural here; 'for' or 'with' is better. Alternatively say 'I need to study carefully' for clarity.

× To be honest I'm not sure how scanning works so I would say I would love to do it detail reading.

✓ To be honest, I'm not sure how scanning works, so I would say I would prefer to do detailed reading.

Missing commas for clarity. 'Do it detail reading' is ungrammatical; use 'prefer to do detailed reading' or 'do detailed reading'.

× This also gives us a full idea of what is narrator is trying to say and missing any error that might come up in the readings so it's helps us identify.

✓ This also gives us a full idea of what the narrator is trying to say and helps us identify any errors that might appear in the reading.

Missing article 'the' before 'narrator'. 'What is narrator is trying' is ungrammatical—remove extra 'is'. 'Missing any error' should be 'helps us identify any errors'. 'Readings' can be singular 'the reading' or 'readings' depending on context; use 'the reading' here. Remove contraction mismatch 'so it's helps' -> 'and helps'.