阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and incorrect grammar. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly. Keep it under five sentences.

示例: No, I don't enjoy reading very much. I often feel confused by complex texts and struggle to recognize some Japanese kanji, which makes reading tiring. Because of this, I usually avoid long books and prefer listening to audiobooks instead.

建议: Answer directly and correct grammar and word choice. Use one linking phrase to give a clear reason and a brief consequence. Mention a specific example to make it more concrete.

示例: I prefer to read on paper because screens give off blue light that strains my eyes. For example, after reading on my phone for 30 minutes my eyes feel tired, so I find paper books much more comfortable.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and explain with specific situations. Avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'when' and 'so' properly and keep supporting details relevant (e.g., what type of documents and why help is needed).

示例: I need to read carefully when I prepare important documents, such as school reports or official forms, because mistakes can cause problems. For less important things like short messages or social media posts I skim, and if a document is difficult I ask a teacher or parent for help.

建议: Start with a clear preference sentence, then give precise reasons and an example. Avoid repeating 'because' twice and correct grammar. Mention what kinds of texts you scan and when you would read in detail.

示例: I prefer scanning because detailed reading can be tiring and time-consuming for me. For example, I usually skim news articles for the main points, but I read in detail when studying for exams or checking important instructions.

× I really hate reading because I feel uncomfortable and confused when I read some books and also I cannot read some kanji in Japanese so I am suffering from reading.

✓ I really hate reading because I feel uncomfortable and confused when I read some books, and I cannot read some kanji in Japanese, so I suffer when reading.

The original sentence repeats pronouns and uses awkward phrasing 'I am suffering from reading.' Replace with 'I suffer when reading' for natural English. Also add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: keep subject 'I' but avoid unnecessary auxiliaries and use simple present tense to express general feelings.

× I prefer to lead on paper because on the screen I feel I'm pressure because screen has so many blue light and my eyes become more uncomfortable and hurt.

✓ I prefer to read on paper because I feel pressured when I use a screen; screens emit a lot of blue light and make my eyes feel uncomfortable and hurt.

Multiple errors: 'lead' should be 'read' (word choice). 'I feel I'm pressure' is incorrect; use 'I feel pressured' (adjective) or 'I feel pressure' (noun). 'Screen has so many blue light' should be pluralized and use 'emit' instead of 'has'. Use present simple to state preferences. Improve word order and verb forms for clarity.

× I need to read carefully when I make some document or some necessary import crucial document. So I I was helped by my parents or my teacher.

✓ I need to read carefully when I write documents or other important papers. I was helped by my parents or my teacher.

Original has awkward word order and incorrect word choice: 'make some document' should be 'write documents' and 'necessary import crucial document' is redundant and ungrammatical; use 'important' or 'crucial'. Also repeated 'I I'. Keep past tense 'I was helped' if referring to past assistance. Use plural 'documents' for general cases.

× I prefer to scanning reading because detail reading is hard for me to read because I really hate reading so I just know about grammar or some.

✓ I prefer scanning rather than detailed reading because detailed reading is hard for me; I really hate reading, so I only understand grammar and a few other things.

Incorrect use of gerunds: 'to scanning reading' mixes infinitive and gerund forms; use 'prefer scanning' or 'prefer to scan'. 'Detail reading' should be 'detailed reading'. Improve sentence cohesion and clarity. Use semicolons or conjunctions to separate ideas and correct articles and quantifiers ('a few other things').