阅读— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be careful with pronouns and small mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add concise specific supporting details (types of books, why you enjoy them). Avoid redundancy and keep it within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words like “also” or “for example.”

示例: Yes, I enjoy reading in my free time. For example, I often read crime thrillers because I like suspense, and I also read regional history books to learn more about local culture.

建议: Correct grammar and avoid repetition. Begin with a direct preference sentence, then give one clear reason and a brief qualifying clause. Remove repeated words and fix small grammar errors (e.g. “my eyes” and “screens”).

示例: I prefer reading on paper rather than on a screen because my eyes become irritated after long screen use. I only read on screens when there is no printed copy available.

建议: Good content and clear focus on terms and conditions. Make sentences shorter and avoid repeating the same idea. Use linking words like “therefore” or “because” to connect reason and consequence, and include a brief example of what you check for.

示例: I need to read carefully when I sign documents, such as contracts or terms and conditions, because they contain important obligations. Therefore I check details like fees, cancellation terms and the duration before I agree.

建议: Good structure and relevant example. Improve grammar (e.g. “fastly” → “quickly”), remove awkward phrases, and use linking words (“however”, “when”). Keep it concise and give one clear contrast between scanning and detailed reading.

示例: It depends on the purpose. For instance, I quickly skim newspaper headlines when I just want an overview; however, if a story matters to me, I read it carefully to understand the facts and implications.

× I love crime thriller novels as well as books based on his history in my regional language.

✓ I love crime thriller novels as well as books based on history in my regional language.

The pronoun 'his' is incorrect because there is no male antecedent; it should be removed to refer generally to history. Use 'history' without a pronoun to convey the intended meaning.

× I always prefer hard copies rather than seeing it on a screen.

✓ I always prefer hard copies rather than looking at them on a screen.

Use the preposition 'at' with 'look' (look at something). Also 'hard copies' is plural so the pronoun should be 'them' not 'it'. Replace 'seeing' with 'looking at' for natural collocation.

× I my eyes get irritated if I watch screen screens for a long time.

✓ My eyes get irritated if I look at screens for a long time.

The original has an extra 'I' and a word duplication 'screen screens'. Use 'look at' for viewing screens and 'screens' plural. Start sentence with 'My eyes' as the subject.

× Therefore I completely avoid using it unless until it is the only option I have.

✓ Therefore I completely avoid using it unless it is the only option I have.

The phrase 'unless until' is redundant; use either 'unless' or 'until'. In this context 'unless' fits. The sentence otherwise is fine.

× I always give more attention whenever I read the terms and conditions before I sign anything on a paper because those are all crucial things listed out before we completely agree to it.

✓ I always pay close attention when I read the terms and conditions before I sign any document because those are crucial things listed before we agree to them.

Use 'pay attention' rather than 'give attention'. 'Whenever' is unnecessary; 'when' is clearer. Use 'sign any document' rather than 'sign anything on a paper'. 'Those' refers to 'things' so plural pronoun 'them' is needed. 'Listed out' is wordy; use 'listed'. Adjust tense and number agreement.

× So I am always cautious while reading the terms and conditions or the agreements.

✓ So I am always cautious when reading the terms and conditions or agreements.

Use 'when' rather than 'while' for this habitual action; 'agreements' does not need the definite article 'the' here. Keep phrasing concise.

× It depends upon the content what I read.

✓ It depends on the content I am reading.

The original word order is awkward. Use 'depends on' rather than 'depends upon', and place the clause 'I am reading' after 'content' for natural structure and correct tense.

× For example, when I read a newspaper, if I don't need much details about that news, I fastly skim it.

✓ For example, when I read a newspaper, if I don't need many details about a story, I quickly skim it.

'Fastly' is not a standard adverb; use 'quickly'. 'Much details' is incorrect; use 'many details' or 'much' with uncountable nouns. 'That news' is awkward; 'a story' or 'a news item' is better.

× But if I want to know it in more detail, then I spend extra time and detailing by reading it very carefully and understand what message it really conveys.

✓ But if I want to know more details, I spend extra time reading it carefully to understand the message it conveys.

'Spend extra time and detailing' is ungrammatical; remove 'detailing' and use 'reading it carefully'. Use 'to understand' to show purpose and correct verb form 'conveys'. Keep consistent tense and concise phrasing.