爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer more directly and avoid listing too many hobbies or repeating the word “things.” Use the correct phrases “listening to music,” “inner peace,” and “enjoy dancing.” Organize your response with a clear main idea, followed by one or two specific reasons or examples. Also, “my favorite hobby” is more natural than “the most loved one hobby of mine.”

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies, such as listening to music, travelling, and learning new things. However, dancing is my favorite because it helps me relax and gives me a sense of inner peace. I usually dance at home in the evening or whenever I have some free time.

建议: Use the past tense consistently because the question asks about childhood: “I had” and “dancing gave me.” Avoid repeating the same idea about happiness and being close to your heart. Give a specific childhood detail, such as when you danced or what kind of dancing you enjoyed. Use a linking word such as “because” or “for example” to connect your reason and detail.

示例: Yes, I had a hobby when I was a child, and it was dancing. I started dancing at school because it made me feel happy and energetic. For example, I often performed in school events and practised at home with my friends.

建议: Begin with a concise direct answer and avoid repeating “dancing” and “whole heart.” The sentence structure is difficult to follow, so separate your ideas into two or three shorter sentences. Explain how the hobby has continued over time and provide a current example of how you practise it. Use natural expressions such as “I have been interested in dancing since childhood” and “it is very meaningful to me.”

示例: Yes, I have enjoyed dancing since I was a child. It is still an important hobby because it helps me express myself and reduce stress. These days, I practise at home and sometimes watch online videos to learn new movements.

建议: Make the comparison clearer and use more natural grammar. Say “My family members don’t enjoy dancing” rather than “don’t have the dancing hobby,” and replace “they’re doing busy” with “they are busy with their work.” Explain what hobbies your family members actually have, if possible, and use “whereas” or “while” to show the contrast.

示例: No, my family members and I have different hobbies. I enjoy dancing because I have loved it since childhood, whereas my family members are usually busy with work and prefer quieter activities. For example, my father likes watching sports, while my mother enjoys gardening.

× Yes, I do have so many hobbies but like listening music, travelling, learning new things, exploring new things, but the most loved one hobby of mine is dancing because it gives me an inner piece I can say and I love to enjoy to do dance.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, such as listening to music, travelling, learning new things, and exploring new places, but my favorite hobby is dancing because it gives me inner peace, and I love dancing.

The original sentence contains several incomplete and incorrectly connected clauses. Use such as to introduce examples and connect the ideas with clear conjunctions. Also, inner peace is the correct expression, not inner piece.

× listening music

✓ listening to music

The verb listen is followed by the preposition to before the object. The correct phrase is listening to music.

× I love to enjoy to do dance.

✓ I love dancing.

After love, a gerund form is natural when referring to an activity. The expression enjoy to do dance is incorrect; enjoy must be followed by a gerund, as in enjoy dancing.

× Yes, I do have hobbies whenever I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a hobby when I was a child.

The question asks about the past, so use the past form had. Use when, not whenever, to refer to the time when you were a child.

× That hobby was dancing because dancing give me inner peace.

✓ That hobby was dancing because dancing gave me inner peace.

Dancing is a singular subject, so the present form would be gives. However, because the answer refers to childhood, the past form gave is more appropriate.

× That hobby was dancing because dancing give me inner peace and that makes me so happy.

✓ That hobby was dancing because dancing gave me inner peace and made me so happy.

The answer describes a past period, so the verbs should be in the past tense: gave and made.

× Dancing is something that is so much mean to me that is so much close to my heart.

✓ Dancing is something that means so much to me and is very close to my heart.

Mean is used incorrectly in the phrase so much mean. The correct expression is means so much to me. Use very, rather than so much, before the adjective close.

× So dancing gives me so many things I cannot imagine.

✓ So dancing gives me more than I can imagine.

The intended meaning is that dancing provides an unexpectedly large number of benefits. The comparison should be more than I can imagine.

× Yes, the hobby that I have had since childhood till now that is dancing dancing has my whole heart because it is the hobby of my childhood that makes me so happy it gives me the feeling that that that is closest to my heart so dancing something that can my heart has whole heart.

✓ Yes, the hobby I have had since childhood is dancing. Dancing has my whole heart because it makes me very happy and is close to my heart.

The original is a run-on sentence with repeated words and missing verbs. Divide it into complete sentences and remove the repeated that and dancing. The relative clause can also be shortened to make the structure clear.

× It is the hobby of my childhood.

✓ It is a hobby from my childhood.

From is the appropriate preposition when referring to something that began during a period of your life. Also, use the indefinite article a because this is one hobby among possible hobbies.

× It gives me the feeling that that that is closest to my heart.

✓ It gives me the feeling that it is close to my heart.

The pronoun it is needed as the subject of the clause. The repeated that is unnecessary and makes the sentence difficult to understand.

× So dancing something that can my heart has whole heart.

✓ So dancing is something that has my whole heart.

The original sentence is missing the linking verb is. A complete sentence needs a subject, a verb, and a complement.

× So dancing something that can my heart has whole heart.

✓ So dancing is something that has my whole heart.

The modal can is used incorrectly and does not fit the intended meaning. The phrase has my whole heart correctly expresses strong affection.

× No, my family members don't have the dancing hobby.

✓ No, my family members do not have a hobby related to dancing.

Use the indefinite article a when referring to one type of hobby in general. The phrase the dancing hobby incorrectly suggests that both speakers already know about one specific hobby.

× I don't know why but I have because I have since childhood I love dancing and started that hobby.

✓ I do not know why, but I have loved dancing since childhood and started this hobby then.

The original contains several clauses without clear connections. Reorganize the clauses so that the subject and verbs are easy to identify.

× I don't know why but I have because I have since childhood I love dancing and started that hobby.

✓ I do not know why, but I have loved dancing since childhood and started this hobby then.

Started refers to the time when the hobby began, so the past form started is correct. The expression since childhood also works naturally with the present perfect have loved.

× It is not related with my family members.

✓ It is not related to my family members.

The adjective related is followed by the preposition to, not with.

× My family members mostly are doing busy and they're doing their work.

✓ My family members are mostly busy with their work.

Busy is an adjective, so use are busy, not are doing busy. The adverb mostly is placed before busy, and busy is followed by with when describing a person's work or activities.

× My family members mostly are doing busy and they're doing their work.

✓ My family members are mostly busy with their work.

The natural collocation is busy with their work. The preposition with is needed to connect busy to the activity.