爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer directly and list your hobbies with clearer grammar and punctuation. Use “playing the cello and guitar” and “playing sports such as...” rather than repeating “many.” Add one specific reason or detail about your favorite hobby to make the answer more developed. Use “and” before the final item in the list.

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies, including playing the cello and guitar and doing sports such as basketball, badminton, and soccer. I especially enjoy playing the cello because it helps me relax and express my feelings.

建议: The answer is difficult to understand because some words appear to be inaccurate or incomplete, such as “tap Thai snacks,” “muke,” and “doesn't enjoy.” Organize the response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use “bake” or “make baked goods,” not “do bakery stuff,” and explain the allergy or preference accurately. Check subject–verb agreement and avoid adding an unclear reason.

示例: Yes, I had several hobbies when I was a child. I especially enjoyed baking and making Thai snacks with my family. I liked it because I could try different recipes and share the food with everyone.

建议: The key hobby is unclear, probably because “cello” or another word was transcribed inaccurately as “shallow” and “shadow.” State the hobby clearly, use “I started it when I was ten,” and explain why you have continued it. “Which is pretty slow” is not appropriate here; say “which was quite young” or give the length of time instead. Avoid informal fillers such as “But yeah” in a test answer.

示例: Yes, I have played the cello since I was ten. I’m sixteen now, so I’ve been playing it for about six years. I’ve continued because I enjoy performing music and I’ve improved a lot through regular practice.

建议: The answer is relevant and includes useful specific details, but the sentence structure is confusing. Use simple parallel patterns, such as “I play..., one sister plays..., and the other plays....” Add articles and plurals: “the piano,” “the violin,” “the viola,” and “the drums.” Avoid repeating “played” if these are your family members’ current hobbies; use “plays” instead.

示例: Yes, my sisters and I have similar musical interests. I play the cello and guitar, while my sister PJ plays the piano, violin, and viola. My other sister, PP, plays the piano and drums, so we sometimes practice music together.

× I do have many hobbies including playing cello guitar and many sports like basketball, badminton soccer.

✓ I do have many hobbies, including playing the cello and the guitar and playing many sports, like basketball, badminton, and soccer.

Singular musical instruments usually take the definite article the after play. The list also needs parallel structure: playing the cello, playing the guitar, and playing sports.

× I used to have many hobbies like baking I did a lot of bakery stuff and also tap Thai snacks because I'm allergic to muke and Thai snacks doesn't enjoy.

✓ I used to have many hobbies, like baking. I did a lot of bakery-related activities and also ate Thai snacks because I was allergic to milk and did not enjoy them.

The original contains several independent ideas joined without proper sentence boundaries. Divide the ideas into complete sentences and use a clear subject and verb in the final clause.

× I used to have many hobbies like baking I did a lot of bakery stuff and also tap Thai snacks because I'm allergic to muke and Thai snacks doesn't enjoy.

✓ I used to have many hobbies, like baking. I did a lot of bakery-related activities and also ate Thai snacks because I was allergic to milk and did not enjoy them.

The answer describes childhood hobbies, so the past-tense forms ate, was, and did not enjoy are more consistent with the past-time context.

× Thai snacks doesn't enjoy.

✓ I did not enjoy Thai snacks.

The original clause does not have the correct subject. If the intended meaning is that the student did not enjoy the snacks, I must be the subject, followed by the verb phrase did not enjoy.

× I think we have a similar interest in hobbies.

✓ I think we have similar interests in hobbies.

The answer refers to the interests of multiple family members, so the plural noun interests is appropriate.

× We all play music like I played the cello and guitar, PJ, she played piano, violin viola and PP she played the piano and drum.

✓ We all play musical instruments. I play the cello and the guitar, PJ plays the piano, violin, and viola, and PP plays the piano and the drums.

The original is a run-on sentence with several clauses joined incorrectly. Use complete clauses and coordinate them with and to make the relationships between the subjects and their instruments clear.

× We all play music like I played the cello and guitar, PJ, she played piano, violin viola and PP she played the piano and drum.

✓ We all play musical instruments. I play the cello and the guitar, PJ plays the piano, violin, and viola, and PP plays the piano and the drums.

The question asks about current shared hobbies, so the present-tense forms play and plays should be used instead of the past-tense form played.

× PJ, she played piano, violin viola and PP she played the piano and drum.

✓ PJ plays the piano, violin, and viola, and PP plays the piano and the drums.

PJ and PP are third-person singular subjects. In the present simple, the verb play must take the -s form, plays, with these subjects.

× PP she played the piano and drum.

✓ PP plays the piano and the drums.

The instruments should be named with their standard plural form in this expression: play the drums. The sentence also uses the plural subject PP, so the verb is corrected to plays for third-person singular agreement.