爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Reduce grammatical errors, avoid redundancy, and use clearer linking. Start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., “it gives me refreshment and a break,” “traveling enhances my knowledge of other cultures”).

示例: I enjoy travelling. It gives me a refreshing break from my busy routine, and it helps me learn about other cultures and perspectives, which I find fascinating.

建议: Use past tense correctly and make sentences more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific activities and a simple feeling or result. Fix tense and subject-verb agreement (e.g., “I used to water my garden”).

示例: Yes, I loved gardening as a child. After school I would water my plants and try planting new varieties, and I felt very happy whenever my flowers bloomed.

建议: Be more concise and correct repetition/word choice. Give a direct topic sentence, then briefly explain how your interests changed with a specific reason or example. Avoid double words and awkward phrases (e.g., “as as,” “hobbies in taste”).

示例: No, I don’t have a hobby I’ve kept since childhood. My interests changed as I grew older, and now I prefer travelling because I enjoy learning about different cultures.

建议: Answer directly, use correct plurals and articles, and provide one clear example with a linking word. Avoid repetition (e.g., “totally different” twice) and correct grammar (e.g., “family members have different hobbies,” “collect stamps”).

示例: No, my hobbies differ from my family’s. For example, my father collects stamps, while I prefer travelling to explore new places and cultures.

× Yes I do, travelling is my favorite hobby, it give me a refreshment on also a break from my daily busy schedule.

✓ Yes, I do. Travelling is my favorite hobby; it gives me refreshment and also a break from my busy daily schedule.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'it give' is incorrect because singular subject 'it' requires third-person singular verb 'gives' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 6). Also sentence run-on: use punctuation and clearer word order. Suggestion: use 'gives me refreshment and a break' and place adjectives before 'daily schedule'.

× Also traveling enhance my knowledge about the culture, their perspective so I admire it very much.

✓ Also, travelling enhances my knowledge about cultures and their perspectives, so I admire it very much.

Verb form and noun number: 'traveling enhance' needs third-person singular 'enhances' because subject 'travelling' is singular (ID 2). 'the culture' and 'their perspective' mismatch: use plural 'cultures' and 'perspectives' to match general meaning (ID 1 and 11). Also add commas for clarity.

× Yes, in my childhood I used to like gardening a lot.

✓ Yes, in my childhood I used to enjoy gardening a lot.

Style and verb choice: 'like' is not incorrect tense-wise but 'used to enjoy' is a more natural collocation for habitual past (ID 5). This keeps the past habitual meaning and improves fluency.

× After my school break I used to watered my garden and try to plant new varieties of trees.

✓ After my school break I used to water my garden and try to plant new varieties of trees.

Verb form: after 'used to' the base form should be used, not past tense. 'used to watered' is wrong; use 'used to water' (ID 5). Maintain parallel structure: 'used to water' and 'try to plant' should both use base forms.

× Also, my heart become so happy when I see my flowers are blooming.

✓ Also, my heart becomes very happy when I see my flowers blooming.

Subject-verb agreement and tense: 'my heart become' should be 'my heart becomes' for third-person singular present (ID 2 and 6). 'when I see my flowers are blooming' is awkward; use 'when I see my flowers blooming' or 'when my flowers are blooming' for correct participle usage (ID 10). Replace 'so happy' with 'very happy' for natural adverb use (ID 13).

× There is no particular hobby that I possess since childhood as as I grew old my hobbies in taste started to change.

✓ There is no particular hobby that I have had since childhood, because as I grew older my tastes in hobbies started to change.

Tense and structure: 'possess since childhood' mixes present possession with a time period; use present perfect 'have had' for something from past to present (ID 3 and 6). Duplicate 'as' is an error. 'grew old' should be 'grew older' and 'hobbies in taste' should be 'tastes in hobbies' or 'my tastes' (ID 26 and 18). Use 'because' for clearer conjunction (ID 16).

× Now I like to prefer travelling more and know about other cultures.

✓ Now I prefer travelling more and like to learn about other cultures.

Word choice and tense: 'like to prefer' is redundant; use 'prefer' or 'like to' (ID 26). 'know about' is unnatural here; use 'learn about' or 'get to know' (ID 13). Maintain present simple for current preferences (ID 6).

× No, basically not. My family member have different hobby and mine is totally different from them.

✓ No, basically not. My family members have different hobbies and mine is completely different from theirs.

Number agreement: 'family member' should be plural 'family members' and 'have different hobby' should be 'have different hobbies' to agree in number (ID 1). Pronoun and possessive: 'from them' should be 'from theirs' to compare possessions (ID 12 and 19). Use 'completely' instead of 'totally' for formality if desired.

× As for example my father likes to collect stamp and I am totally different from him.

✓ For example, my father likes to collect stamps, and I am completely different from him.

Article and plural: 'collect stamp' should be 'collect stamps' (plural noun) or 'collect stamps' with no article (ID 22 and 1). Add comma after 'For example' and use 'completely' for style.

× I like to travel new places, try to explore new cultures.

✓ I like to travel to new places and try to explore new cultures.

Preposition and verb patterns: 'travel new places' needs 'travel to new places' (ID 11). Combine coordinated verbs with 'and' and keep infinitive 'to travel' or use gerund consistently: 'I like travelling to new places and exploring new cultures' is an alternative (ID 8).