爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Clarifiez la structure de la phrase et corrigez la grammaire. Commencez par une phrase thème claire, puis ajoutez un ou deux détails pertinents en utilisant des mots de liaison simples (for example, and, because). Évitez les répétitions et les erreurs de mot (par ex. « I have a hobby is » → « My hobby is »).

示例: My hobby is playing football. I play as a forward for a local club and I wear number ten. I enjoy it because it keeps me fit and I like helping my team score goals.

建议: Utilisez le temps et la prononciation corrects pour parler du passé. Commencez par une phrase simple au passé, puis expliquez brièvement quel type de jeux et pourquoi vous les aimiez. Évitez les répétitions et organisez les idées avec un lien comme « especially » ou « because ».

示例: Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed playing video games. I especially liked football games such as FIFA on the computer because they were fun and helped me learn about teams.

建议: Structurez la réponse: donnez d'abord la réponse directe puis des détails spécifiques. Corrigez les temps (present perfect for since childhood) et évitez les hésitations. Utilisez des connecteurs (for example, sometimes, because) et précisez les raisons et lieux (stadium, street).

示例: Yes, I have played football since I was a child. I often play with my friends in the stadium and sometimes in the street; I also enjoy playing with my father because it brings us closer and helps me improve my skills.

建议: Répondez directement puis ajoutez un exemple concret. Utilisez des phrases claires et évitez la redondance. Donnez un détail précis (par exemple: how often you play together, or a memory) et employez un lien logique comme « so » ou « for example ».

示例: Yes, my family and I share the same hobby: football. My three brothers, my father and I often play matches together, and we sometimes train and compete for the same local club on weekends.

× Yes, I have a hobby is play football and famous football and and I in our region in bed. Now I play in the in the attack. I'm I, I get the number 10 in my club.

✓ Yes, my hobby is playing football. I am a well-known player in our region. Now I play as a forward. I wear number 10 for my club.

The original contains multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect clause combination, redundant words, and wrong word order. Use 'my hobby is doing' or 'my hobby is + gerund' to name activities (Verb + -ing). Replace 'famous football' with 'well-known player' to match meaning. 'In the attack' should be 'as a forward' to describe position. 'I'm I, I get the number 10' is ungrammatical; use 'I wear number 10' or 'I wear the number 10' for clarity. Suggestion: break ideas into short clear sentences, use gerund after 'is' for activities, and use correct noun phrases for roles.

× Yes, when I am a young I I I like I did like it they played played played the video games especially on on computer like FIFA or PS.

✓ Yes, when I was young I liked playing video games, especially on the computer like FIFA or PlayStation.

The original mixes present and past forms. For past habits use past tense 'was' and 'liked'. Use gerund 'playing' after 'liked'. Remove repeated words. Use 'on the computer' and 'PlayStation' for clarity. Suggestion: use simple past for childhood habits and gerund after 'like/liked'.

× Yes, of course it's uh, play football when I'm tired. I love to play football and with my friends in the stadium and sometimes you play football in the street, umm, and uh, I like to play the play the sport with my father 'cause it's big.

✓ Yes, of course I play football when I'm tired. I love playing football with my friends in the stadium, and sometimes we play in the street. I also enjoy playing the sport with my father because he is big.

Mixed and incorrect verb forms: use 'I play' for habitual present. Use gerund 'playing' after 'love'. Replace 'you play' with 'we play' to match speaker. 'I like to play the play the sport' has repetition; use 'I enjoy playing the sport'. Clarify 'because he's big' to 'because he is big' or better explain why size matters. Suggestion: keep consistent present tense for current habits and use gerunds after verbs like 'love' and 'enjoy'.

× It's possible to say that it's true because my three brothers and I and my father, all of them play football. So sometimes we play a match and we play in the the same club.

✓ You could say that it's true because my three brothers, my father and I all play football. Sometimes we play matches and we play for the same club.

Original has awkward subject list and extra words. Order subjects naturally and ensure verb agrees with plural subject 'all play'. Use 'matches' plural for repeated events and 'play for the same club' is the usual collocation. Remove duplicate 'the the'. Suggestion: list subjects clearly, use plural nouns for repeated activities, and use correct preposition 'for' with 'play (for) a club'.