爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ phù hợp; trả lời trực tiếp, dùng 2–3 câu hỗ trợ rõ ràng với chi tiết cụ thể. Ví dụ: nói khi nào chơi, với ai và lợi ích cụ thể. Chú ý động từ chia đúng (ví dụ: ‘helps’ với ‘it’, ‘play with my family’ không ‘families’), thay ‘replace’ bằng ‘do’ hoặc ‘play’.

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies, and one of my favourites is playing video games. I usually play with my friends and family in the evenings after studying because it helps me relax and bond with them.

建议: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (thường chia động từ sai: 'go' not 'goes'); tránh lặp 'usually' nhiều lần; thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: nơi đi, tần suất, kỷ niệm) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc. Nên trả lời ngắn gọn: khẳng định + lý do + ví dụ cụ thể.

示例: Yes, I used to enjoy cycling as a child because it helped me stay fit. For example, I often cycled around our neighborhood with my cousins at weekends, which also taught me basic navigation and gave me great memories.

建议: Giữ câu gọn và tránh ngập ngừng ('Umm'); chỉnh ngữ pháp và cấu trúc: mở bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng, theo sau là lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh tục từ không chính thức như 'kinda'; dùng từ phù hợp như 'enjoy' hoặc 'be into'.

示例: Yes, I have played computer games since I was a child because they are fun and help me stay connected with my friends. For instance, we often play online co-op games on weekends, which strengthens our teamwork and friendship.

建议: Cải thiện sự tự nhiên: nói 'watching TV' (không 'the TV'); tránh cụm từ sai 'share same connected' — dùng 'feel connected' hoặc 'bond'. Nên nêu ví dụ cụ thể (thể loại phim, khi nào xem) và dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, my mother and I both enjoy watching TV, especially movies and documentaries. We usually watch films together on Sunday evenings, which helps us relax and feel closer to each other.

× I find it's really fascinating to play with my friends and my families.

✓ I find it really fascinating to play with my friends and my family.

Use singular 'my family' when referring to a family as a group; 'families' implies multiple different families. Also avoid the contraction 'it's' where meaning is 'it is' — here 'it' is fine but 'my families' is incorrect. Suggestion: Use 'my family' for your own family as a unit.

× I usually replace it after studying so it can helps me relax after a long day.

✓ I usually play it after studying so it can help me relax after a long day.

The verb 'replace' is wrong in this context; likely meant 'play (games)'. 'Helps' is incorrect because after 'can' the base form 'help' must follow. Suggestion: Use base verb after modal verbs and choose correct verb for the intended meaning.

× When I was a child, I usually goes cycling because it is a good way to improve my physical health.

✓ When I was a child, I usually went cycling because it was a good way to improve my physical health.

The time frame 'When I was a child' requires past tense. 'Usually goes' is present and wrong; 'went' is past. Also 'is' should be 'was' to match past context. Suggestion: Keep verb tense consistent with past time markers.

× To be more specific, I usually go cycling with my cousins because I want to learn how to travel.

✓ To be more specific, I usually went cycling with my cousins because I wanted to learn how to travel.

Again, 'usually' with 'When I was a child' needs past tense: 'went' and 'wanted' instead of present forms. Maintain past tense for habitual actions in the past.

× Umm the hobby that I have had since childhood it is playing computer games because I said before I really kinda into the playing video games with my friends so it is good way to maintain my relationship.

✓ The hobby I have had since childhood is playing computer games because, as I said before, I am really into playing video games with my friends, so it is a good way to maintain my relationships.

Original has redundant subject 'the hobby... it is' and mixed tenses and informal fillers. Use 'The hobby I have had since childhood is...' Remove 'kinda' and use 'am really into playing'. 'Maintain my relationship' is unclear; use plural 'relationships' or specify 'friendships'. Suggestion: Remove redundancies, correct present perfect 'have had' is acceptable, use 'am' for present state, and pluralize 'relationships' if referring to multiple friendships.

× Yes I do, I share the same hobbies with my mother. It is watching the TV.

✓ Yes I do. I share the same hobby with my mother. It is watching TV.

'Hobbies' should be singular 'hobby' because only one hobby is referenced. 'The TV' is unnatural here; say 'watching TV' without 'the'. Suggestion: Use singular or plural consistently and omit unnecessary articles before activities like 'watching TV'.

× This is because we usually spend our time to watch some movies and films that we like.

✓ This is because we usually spend our time watching movies and films that we like.

Use 'spend time doing something', not 'spend time to do something'. Also 'some' is unnecessary; 'movies and films' is redundant—use one. Suggestion: Use the gerund after 'spend time' and choose one noun ('movies').

× So it is a good way to share same connected.

✓ So it is a good way to stay connected.

Original phrase 'share same connected' is ungrammatical. Use 'stay connected' or 'share a connection'. Suggestion: Use idiomatic expression 'stay connected' to express maintaining relationships.