爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Keep answers concise and directly state your hobbies first, then give one or two specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and grammatical errors (e.g., say “in my spare time” not “on my spare time”).

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies, including crafting, shopping and playing casual sports. For example, I enjoy making handmade cards on weekends, and I usually go shopping every Saturday to look for bargains.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use past tense consistently and give specific details about activities and who you played with. Use linking words (for example, especially, and) to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I did. As a child I loved playing with toys, especially Play-Doh and Barbie dolls. I often played with my parents and siblings, and we would create small scenes together, which helped me be creative.

建议: Be precise and use natural structures: say when you started and why you continue. Avoid vague statements about feelings and religious references unless relevant; instead give a concrete reason and one specific example of what you enjoy about shopping.

示例: Yes, I have enjoyed shopping since childhood because I like finding good deals and choosing items that suit my style. For instance, I enjoy visiting local markets to discover unique clothes and gifts, which makes me feel satisfied and confident.

建议: Answer directly and use clearer phrasing (e.g., “Yes, I share hobbies with my mother”). Give one or two specific examples of shared activities and use linking words to show frequency and reasons.

示例: Yes, I share a hobby with my mother: we both love shopping. For example, we go shopping together every weekend, often doing window-shopping first and then buying items on sale when we find good discounts.

× Talking about hobbies, yes I do have some hobbies such as crafting, shopping and playing.

✓ Talking about hobbies, yes I have some hobbies such as crafting, shopping, and playing.

The auxiliary 'do' is unnecessary in affirmative present-tense statements with 'have' when 'have' expresses possession. Use 'I have' rather than 'I do have' for natural speech. Also add a comma before the final item in a list for clarity. Suggestion: Say 'I have some hobbies such as crafting, shopping, and playing.'

× All of them are my hobbies that I do on my spare time so I can enjoy more relaxing time better than I don't do anything.

✓ All of them are my hobbies that I do in my spare time so I can relax more than if I do nothing.

Use the preposition 'in' with 'spare time' (not 'on'). The original comparative phrase 'more relaxing time better than I don't do anything' is ungrammatical; it should compare relaxing to doing nothing, e.g. 'I can relax more than if I do nothing.' Also simplify 'enjoy more relaxing time' to 'relax more.' Suggestion: Use 'in my spare time' and a clear comparative clause 'than if I do nothing.'

× Yes I did. I have some hobbies uh when I was child.

✓ Yes I did. I had some hobbies when I was a child.

The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'had' rather than present 'have.' Also include the article 'a' before 'child' ('a child'). Suggestion: Use 'I had some hobbies when I was a child.'

× One of them is playing a toys when I was a child.

✓ One of them was playing with toys when I was a child.

'A toys' mixes singular article with plural noun; use plural 'toys' without 'a.' Also the activity occurred in the past, so use 'was' and 'was a child.' Include the preposition 'with' to indicate the action 'playing with toys.' Suggestion: 'One of them was playing with toys when I was a child.'

× I have a lot of toys such as play DoH dolls, Barbie and many others and mostly I play with my parents.

✓ I had a lot of toys such as Play-Doh dolls, Barbies, and many others, and I mostly played with my parents.

Match past tense 'had' and 'played' to the time frame. Brand/name capitalization: 'Play-Doh' and pluralize 'Barbie' to 'Barbies' when referring to many dolls. Use commas to separate list items and add 'I' before 'mostly played' for clarity. Suggestion: Use past tense and correct noun forms: 'I had a lot of toys such as Play-Doh dolls, Barbies, and many others, and I mostly played with my parents.'

× Yeah, I have a hobby since I was childhood.

✓ Yeah, I've had a hobby since I was a child.

When describing a hobby that started in the past and continues to the present, use present perfect 'have had' (I've had). Also include the article 'a' before 'child' ('a child'). Suggestion: Use present perfect for actions continuing to present: 'I've had a hobby since I was a child.'

× It is shopping.

✓ It's shopping.

This sentence is acceptable but contracting 'It is' to 'It's' is more natural in spoken English. No tense change required. Suggestion: Use 'It's shopping' for conversational tone.

× I love shopping very much.

✓ I love shopping very much.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Keep for emphasis. Suggestion: None.

× It keeps me more happy and enjoy my life.

✓ It makes me happier and helps me enjoy my life.

'Keeps me more happy' is unnatural; use comparative 'happier' with 'makes me.' Also need parallel structure: 'makes me happier and helps me enjoy my life.' Use 'helps me enjoy' rather than bare 'enjoy.' Suggestion: Say 'It makes me happier and helps me enjoy my life.'

× Also feeling grateful from God that I got everything I need.

✓ I also feel grateful to God that I have everything I need.

Use proper verb 'feel' instead of 'feeling' to make a full sentence and present tense 'have' for current possession. Use preposition 'to' with 'grateful' ('grateful to God') rather than 'from.' Also use 'that I have' not 'that I got' for standard present meaning. Suggestion: 'I also feel grateful to God that I have everything I need.'

× Yeah, I have seen hobbies as my mom because my mom also loves shopping very much.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobbies as my mom because my mom also loves shopping very much.

'Have seen hobbies' is incorrect. Use 'have the same hobbies as' to express similarity. 'Yeah' → 'Yes' for formality in speaking tests is optional. Maintain present tense 'have.' Suggestion: 'Yes, I have the same hobbies as my mom because she also loves shopping very much.'

× Moreover, we often go shopping at least once a week, every weekend.

✓ Moreover, we often go shopping at least once a week, usually on the weekend.

'At least once a week, every weekend' is redundant. Use 'at least once a week' or 'usually on the weekend.' Combine for clarity: 'at least once a week, usually on the weekend.' Suggestion: 'We often go shopping at least once a week, usually on the weekend.'

× Also, we love doing window shopping and buying some stuff from the discount offers.

✓ Also, we love window shopping and buying items on discount.

'Doing window shopping' is awkward; use 'window shopping.' 'Some stuff' is informal; use 'items' or 'things.' 'From the discount offers' is awkward; 'on discount' or 'on sale' is more natural. Suggestion: 'We love window shopping and buying items on discount (or on sale).'}]}} бошибка? Apologies.