爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 句子有重复和语法问题，回答可更简洁、有条理。注意单复数（a hobby / hobbies）、时态和连词的使用。开头先给出主题句，随后用一到两个支持细节（例如何时、与谁、成就）并用连接词承接，控制在最多五句内。

示例: I enjoy several hobbies, but my favorite is playing badminton with friends. I was on the National Chengchi University badminton team, and once my partner and I won a university competition, which was an unforgettable experience. Because of badminton I stay fit and keep close friendships, so I play regularly on weekends.

建议: 回答较啰嗦并存在语法与衔接问题（例如 fragmented sentences，时态一致性）。应先给主题句，再用一到两个具体细节（做什么、和谁、为什么难忘），用适当连词连接句子，避免重复表达。

示例: Yes, as a child I loved playing with Lego blocks. After school my friends and I would build castles and act out stories, which improved our imagination and gave me many happy memories. Even now I sometimes think back on those creative afternoons.

建议: 存在时态和语法错误（won't need → didn't need；keep us us → keeps us），句子冗长且重复。建议先回答直接（Yes, badminton is one I've had since childhood），然后给出具体细节（何时开始、现在如何坚持、带来什么好处），并使用连接词使逻辑清楚。

示例: Yes, badminton is a hobby I've had since childhood. I joined my elementary school team and we trained regularly; even now my friends and I still play on weekends. Playing badminton has helped me stay fit and keep in touch with friends.

建议: 表达存在词汇错误（templator? 应为 player or coach）和语法问题（have several same hobbies → share hobbies；As I grow up → As I grew up）。建议简单明了地说明谁与自己有相同爱好、具体例子（一起做什么、频率）、以及这带来的影响。

示例: Yes, I share badminton as a hobby with my parents. When I was young they often took me to weekend training camps because a family member was a national-level player, and now we still play together occasionally. This shared hobby helps us stay close and healthy.

× I have several hobbies and one of my favorite hobby is to play badminton with my friends.

✓ I have several hobbies and one of my favorite hobbies is playing badminton with my friends.

句子中“one of my favorite hobby”錯誤：one of + 名詞需用複數，且習慣用名詞或動名詞表示愛好。建議改為“one of my favorite hobbies is playing…” 或 “one of my favorite hobbies is to play…”；使用動名詞能讓句子更自然。

× I was a member of school badminton team in National Chengchi University.

✓ I was a member of the school badminton team at National Chengchi University.

原句缺少定冠詞和介詞，且語境為過去簡單時需要正確表達地點。建議在“school badminton team”前加“the”，並用“at”表示在某校。此處時態本身無誤。

× My friend and I once participated in a competition and finally.

✓ My friend and I once participated in a competition, and in the end,

原句在“and finally.”處句子未完成，導致結構不完整。需要把“finally”與後續結果連接，如“and in the end,”或直接把結果接上。

× We won the championship.

✓ We won the championship.

句子本身語法正確；上句不完整時與此句連接才完整。此處保留原句為完整陳述。

× That was really a wonderful memory in my life, so I really enjoy this hobby.

✓ That was really a wonderful memory in my life, so I really enjoy this hobby.

語句時態一致，表達合理。唯一建議是把“enjoy”改為現在時以表達持續興趣，原句已為現在時，故無需修改。

× When I was a kid, my friend and I enjoyed playing Lego blocks after we finished our class at current school, we built castles and had role-playing.

✓ When I was a kid, my friend and I enjoyed playing with Lego blocks after we finished our classes at our school; we built castles and role-played.

問題包括時態一致性和詞語使用：應用過去式“enjoyed”與“finished”一致；“Lego blocks”前加“with”更自然；“class”應為複數“classes”或改為“school”；“role-playing”名詞改為動詞過去式“role-played”以與句子平行。

× Even now I still remember.

✓ Even now, I still remember many of those moments.

“Even now I still remember.”獨立句過於模糊且結構不完整，建議補充賓語以明確記憶內容，如“many of those moments”。

× Many funny and wonderful stories that we had played, so playing Lego blocks really create many wonderful memories during my childhood.

✓ There were many funny and wonderful stories from when we played, so playing with Lego blocks really created many wonderful memories during my childhood.

原句詞序和時態混亂：應先表存在（There were...）或用“stories from when we played”；“create”需改為過去式“created”與“during my childhood”一致；“playing Lego blocks”前加“with”更自然。

× Yes, I have several hobbies since I was a child.

✓ Yes, I have had several hobbies since I was a child.

使用“since”表示從過去持續到現在，需用現在完成式“have had”，而非現在簡單“have”。

× When I was in elementary school, I was a member of school badminton team.

✓ When I was in elementary school, I was a member of the school badminton team.

同樣需要定冠詞“the”來修飾具體的團隊：the school badminton team。時態使用過去式正確。

× My friends and I really enjoyed the time that we won't need to attend the class and could play badminton all the day.

✓ My friends and I really enjoyed the times when we didn't need to attend class and could play badminton all day.

原句混合了過去與未來（won't），應用過去式“didn't need”表達當時的情況；“time”改為複數“times”更自然；“attend the class”改為“attend class”；“all the day”改為固定搭配“all day”。

× Even now, we still play badminton in the weekends.

✓ Even now, we still play badminton on weekends.

英文中習慣用“on weekends”或“at the weekend”(英式)；“in the weekends”不標準。時態現在簡單適合表示習慣。

× Badminton really keep us us in touch and can makes us in a good body shape.

✓ Badminton really keeps us in touch and can help keep us in good shape.

主謂一致：“Badminton”作為單數主語，動詞應為“keeps”；原句有重複“us us”；“can makes”應為“can make”或更自然表達為“can help keep”；“in a good body shape”改為更地道的“in good shape”。

× Yes, my parents and I have several same hobbies.

✓ Yes, my parents and I have several hobbies in common.

“several same hobbies”不自然，應用固定搭配“hobbies in common”或“the same hobbies”。

× When I was in elementary school, my parents always took me to the stadium to attend the badminton training camp because one of my family member is national badminton templator.

✓ When I was in elementary school, my parents always took me to the stadium to attend badminton training camps because one of my family members is a national badminton player/coacher.

問題包括單複數和詞彙：one of my family member應為one of my family members（複數）；“templator”不是正確詞，根據語境改為“player”或“coach”；“training camp”根據頻率改為複數“training camps”。

× As I grow up, I still attend the badminton camp during the weekend.

✓ As I grew up, I still attended badminton camps during the weekends. / As I grew up, I still attended the badminton camp on weekends.

句首“As I grow up”與後文時態不一致。若談過去習慣，應用過去式“grew up”與“attended”；若想表達現在仍然參加，應改為“as I grew up, I have continued to attend”或“now I still attend”。建議根據實際時間一致使用時態。

× This hobby really keeps us in touch and maintain our body shape.

✓ This hobby really keeps us in touch and helps maintain our body shape.

並列動詞需要一致：主語“It/This hobby”是單數，應用“keeps”和第二個動詞也應與之搭配，建議用“helps maintain”或“and helps us maintain”使結構平行且自然。