爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), and use correct phrasing. Give one brief reason for each hobby using linking words (for example, because/so). Aim for 2–4 sentences total.

示例: Yes. I have three hobbies: singing, drawing and practicing English. I sing because it helps me relax, I draw to express my creativity, and I study English daily to improve my skills and stay motivated.

建议: Correct grammar and organize into two clear sentences: one about past hobby and one about current hobby. Use past tense for childhood activities and avoid unclear phrases like 'scratching animals' and 'know it so the best.' Provide a specific detail about what you drew and a clear goal for studying English.

示例: Yes. As a child I enjoyed drawing cartoons and animals because it was relaxing and let me be creative. Now I practice English every day to improve my speaking and I hope to become fluent in the future.

建议: Use a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Use correct tenses (past for childhood) and simpler adjectives (e.g., 'exciting' or 'inspiring' rather than 'breathtaking'). Avoid repetition and correct awkward phrases like 'creating some animals with natures.'

示例: Yes. I've loved drawing since childhood, especially cartoons and animals inspired by nature. It felt exciting when I was young, and I still enjoy drawing because it helps me relax and think creatively.

建议: Be concise and avoid irrelevant or unclear personal details (e.g., 'my mom was single' is unnecessary). Start with a direct answer, then briefly explain family influence with linking words (for example, because/so). Use correct past tense forms and clearer phrasing.

示例: Yes. I share some hobbies with my family because my father was an art teacher, so I learned to draw from him. My mother also encouraged music, so I enjoy singing, and now I am learning English to develop a new skill.

× Umm yes I have like 3 hobbies it's singing, drawing and practicing English to my opinion.

✓ Umm yes, I have three hobbies: singing, drawing, and practicing English in my opinion.

Use plural/singular correctly and clear list punctuation. '3' should be written as 'three' in formal speech; separate items with commas and a colon before listing. 'to my opinion' is incorrect preposition; should be 'in my opinion' (preposition error but listed here because plural/number formatting and list punctuation were primary).

× I also think that uh it's also can be hobby because when you want to learn something you will do it because you have some motivation.

✓ I also think that it can also be a hobby, because when you want to learn something you will do it if you have some motivation.

Word order and article use: 'can be hobby' needs the indefinite article 'a'. 'It's also can be' has incorrect auxiliary order; correct is 'it can also be'. Use 'if' for condition rather than repetitive 'because'.

× Yes, when I was child I enjoyed drawing, I like scratching animals and cartoons because it was relaxing and creative.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I enjoyed drawing; I liked sketching animals and cartoons because it was relaxing and creative.

Missing article 'a' before 'child' (there be/article issue). Tense inconsistency: switch to past 'liked' to match 'was'. 'Scratching' is wrong word; 'sketching' or 'drawing' fits. Use semicolon or split into two sentences to avoid comma splice.

× Now I have a new hobby, practicing English, because I want to improve my skills and I study a little every day and I hope that in the future I will know it so the best.

✓ Now I have a new hobby, practicing English, because I want to improve my skills. I study a little every day, and I hope that in the future I will be very skilled.

Awkward phrasing 'I will know it so the best' is incorrect. Use 'be very skilled' or 'be the best' depending on meaning. Break into sentences for clarity, and maintain present simple for habitual action 'I study a little every day' is fine.

× Yes, just like I said I had I enjoyed drawing cartoons, creating some animals with natures.

✓ Yes, just like I said, I enjoyed drawing cartoons and creating animals from nature.

Remove extraneous 'I had'. Use past tense 'enjoyed' consistently. 'Creating some animals with natures' is ungrammatical; use 'creating animals from nature' or 'drawing animals inspired by nature'.

× It was really breathtaking for me when I was young and now I'm enjoying I still enjoying to thinking and drawing.

✓ It was really breathtaking for me when I was young, and now I still enjoy thinking and drawing.

Use base verb 'enjoy' with object, not 'enjoying' after auxiliary 'I'm' in this context. Correct structure 'I still enjoy thinking and drawing.' Remove unnecessary 'to' before 'thinking'.

× Of course I do and I want to tell you interesting story 'cause my mom was single and my dad was art teacher.

✓ Of course I do, and I want to tell you an interesting story because my mom was single and my dad was an art teacher.

Missing indefinite article 'an' before 'interesting story' and 'art teacher'. 'Cause' is informal; use 'because' in tests. Also add commas for clarity.

× So when I was born I take 2 talents from them and now I can sing and I can draw and now I'm learning English and improving my skills.

✓ So when I was born I got two talents from them, and now I can sing and draw, and I'm learning English and improving my skills.

Tense error: 'when I was born I take' should be past 'I took' or more naturally 'I got'. Use 'two' instead of '2' in speech. Combine verbs for conciseness: 'can sing and draw'.