爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I enjoy architectural drawing.”). Then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g. “I also want to learn professional design software like AutoCAD and Revit.”). Avoid repetition and keep it to 2–3 short sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy architectural drawing. I am also keen to learn professional design software such as AutoCAD and Revit to improve my skills.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence in past tense and follow with specific details linked logically. Use past tense consistently and avoid fillers. For example, say what you did, how often, and why you liked it. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: When I was a child, I liked playing video games and watching cartoons on Cartoon Network. I often played games after school because they were fun and helped me relax.

建议: Answer directly and use correct tense and structure. Use a clear topic sentence and, if needed, add a brief reason or frequency with a linking word. Remove hesitations like “maybe.”

示例: Yes, I have enjoyed playing video games since childhood. I used to play them almost every weekend, which is why it remained my main hobby.

建议: Provide a clear, concise response and add a specific supporting example. Use correct word order and avoid redundancy. Use a linking word to contrast if needed (e.g. “however”).

示例: No, my family and I have different hobbies. For example, my sister enjoys gardening while I prefer architectural drawing.

× Yes, my hobby is a drawing the architecture plan and sometime I want to learning about more, more software about architecture professional, Yeah.

✓ Yes, my hobby is drawing architectural plans, and sometimes I want to learn more about professional architecture software.

Errors: unnecessary article 'a' before 'drawing' and incorrect noun form 'architecture plan' -> 'architectural plans'; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'I want to learning' uses incorrect verb form after 'want' (should be base form 'learn'); word order and repetition 'about more, more' is redundant; 'architecture professional' should be 'professional architecture' or 'architecture software'. Suggestion: remove the article before gerund, use plural where appropriate, use base verb after 'want', and choose correct adjective-noun order. Grammar problem type ID:22

× Oh, about that. Hobbies. When I was a child, I like to play video game and sometime I like to watch TV. The I mean the cartoon. Yeah, the Cartoon Network.

✓ Oh, about that. Hobbies. When I was a child, I liked to play video games and sometimes I liked to watch TV, I mean cartoons, like Cartoon Network.

Errors: tense mismatch — the context is past ('When I was a child') so verbs should be past simple ('liked' not 'like'); 'video game' should be plural 'video games' for general habit; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'The I mean the cartoon' is ungrammatical and should be 'I mean cartoons'. Suggestion: use past tense for past habits and pluralize countable nouns for general activities. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I think the only hobby I had had since childhood is play video game maybe?

✓ I think the only hobby I have had since childhood is playing video games, maybe.

Errors: double past 'had had' is incorrect here — use present perfect 'have had' to indicate a hobby continuing from past to present; after 'is' use gerund 'playing' not base verb 'play'; 'video game' should be plural 'video games'; question mark is unnecessary. Suggestion: use present perfect for actions continuing to present and gerund after linking verb 'is'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× No, I don't have the same hobby as out as my family member because everybody in our family, we have different hobbies.

✓ No, I don't have the same hobbies as my family members because everyone in our family has different hobbies.

Errors: 'as out as' is incorrect — correct phrase is 'the same ... as'; 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' to match context; 'family member' should be plural 'family members'; 'everybody in our family, we have' is redundant and has subject mismatch — use 'everyone ... has'. Suggestion: use correct comparative structure 'the same ... as', match singular/plural consistently, and avoid redundant subjects; use 'everyone' with singular verb 'has'. Grammar problem type ID:11