爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and avoid hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details (e.g., level played, how often you play now) using linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I enjoy playing badminton. I played at district level when I was a child, and now I play twice a week to stay fit and improve my skills.

建议: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler words. Give specific examples of childhood hobbies and explain briefly how your mother encouraged you, using linking words like 'for example' or 'because'.

示例: Yes, I had several hobbies as a child. For example, my mother encouraged me to try painting and music by enrolling me in classes, so I practiced them regularly and developed new skills.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence and use one or two concrete details about how long you've pursued painting and what you do now. Reduce repetition and use linking words such as 'because' or 'since' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I have painted since childhood. My mother enrolled me in painting classes when I was young, so I developed a keen interest and still paint regularly to relax and improve my technique.

建议: Give a clear short answer then add a specific reason or example to support it. Avoid repetition and use linking words like 'because' or 'however' to make the response coherent.

示例: No, I don't share the same hobbies as my family. For example, they prefer outdoor activities like walking, whereas I enjoy painting, so I usually spend my free time drawing alone.

× Yes, one of my favorite hobbies is, uh, playing badminton. I was a district level player when I was, uh, I was a district level player, uh, when I was a child. Uh, So yeah, it's badminton is my favorite hobby.

✓ Yes, one of my favorite hobbies is playing badminton. I was a district-level player when I was a child, so badminton is my favorite hobby.

The original contains repetition and awkward structure ('I was a district level player' repeated) and an incorrect phrase 'it's badminton is my favorite hobby' (redundant 'it's'). Suggest removing repetitions and redundant words and hyphenating 'district-level'. The corrected sentence flows clearly and matches past reference to childhood. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Uh, yes, when I was a child, I had many hobbies. Uh, my mother used to encourage me, encouraged me. My mother used to encourage me to do new things, try new skills and, and, uh, and used to, uh, and use them on daily basis. Uh, so one of the hobbies I like one of the key.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had many hobbies. My mother used to encourage me to try new things and learn new skills, and I used them on a daily basis. One of the hobbies I liked most was ...

The original repeats phrases (encourage/encouraged) and mixes verb forms. Use 'used to' consistently for past habitual actions. 'Use them on daily basis' needs article: 'on a daily basis'. The final fragment is incomplete; provide a complete phrase such as 'One of the hobbies I liked most was ...'. Grammar problem type ID:5

× The one hobby I had since childhood is painting, for example my mother. For example, my mother joined me into a painting class when I was a child and I was I had a keen interest in doing painting or drawing, so I usually do painting.

✓ The one hobby I have had since childhood is painting. For example, my mother enrolled me in a painting class when I was a child, and I had a keen interest in painting and drawing, so I usually paint.

Use present perfect 'have had' to show a hobby continuing from childhood to present. 'Joined me into a painting class' is incorrect; say 'enrolled me in' or 'took me to'. 'Doing painting or drawing' is awkward; use 'painting and drawing' or 'paint'. 'I usually do painting' should be 'I usually paint'. Grammar problem type ID:6

× No, I do not have the same hobbies as my family members and no one in my family likes likes painting or drawing as much as I do, so I don't don't have the same hobbies as them.

✓ No, I do not have the same hobbies as my family members. No one in my family likes painting or drawing as much as I do, so I do not share their hobbies.

The original has repeated words ('likes likes', 'don't don't') and a slightly awkward ending 'have the same hobbies as them.' Separate into two sentences for clarity and avoid repetition. 'Share their hobbies' is a natural alternative. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'no one...likes' is correct but remove duplication. Grammar problem type ID:27