爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp, rõ ràng và tự nhiên. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng sai (ví dụ “failed hobby”, chia động từ, thiếu từ). Giữ câu ngắn gọn (không quá 5 câu), dùng liên từ hợp lý để nối ý (because, so, and). Bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể về loại chương trình, tần suất và lí do để làm câu thuyết phục hơn.

示例: Yes, I have a few hobbies. I often watch TV, especially documentaries and comedy shows, because they help me relax after studying and teach me new things. I also enjoy shopping with my friends at the weekend, where we usually browse for new clothes and try different styles for fun.

建议: Cần trả lời rõ ràng và dùng thì quá khứ đúng (was → phrasing incorrect). Tránh câu không hợp lý và nghĩa mơ hồ ("when it was twice"). Nên nêu một chủ đề chính, sau đó mở rộng với chi tiết cụ thể (mấy tuổi, tần suất, ai tham gia, nơi chơi). Dùng liên từ để liên kết ý và kiểm soát số câu.

示例: Yes, I did. As a child I often stayed at home and watched cartoons at the weekend, especially on Saturday mornings. I also played hide-and-seek with my cousins in the garden, which was exciting because we loved hiding in tricky spots behind trees and bushes.

建议: Cần dùng cấu trúc đúng cho hành động kéo dài từ quá khứ đến nay (have had / have + since). Sửa lỗi từ vựng và ngữ pháp (rest book? spot my curiosity?). Nên nêu tên thể loại sách, tần suất đọc, và một ví dụ cụ thể về cuốn sách hoặc điều học được. Giữ tối đa 5 câu và dùng liên từ phù hợp.

示例: Yes, I have enjoyed reading since I was a child. I read every day because books broaden my knowledge and arouse my curiosity. I especially enjoy detective novels, for example a book called Wake Up, which I find relaxing and mentally stimulating.

建议: Câu trả lời rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và chia thì (spend → spent; it's was → it was). Có thể thêm chi tiết cụ thể (khoảng cách, hoạt động làm gì ở công viên, cảm xúc) để tăng tính thuyết phục. Giữ cấu trúc: câu chủ đề + 1-2 câu hỗ trợ, dùng liên từ để nối ý.

示例: Yes, we do. My family and I enjoy outdoor activities like walking and cycling, so we often go on weekend trips together. For example, last month we spent a whole day hiking in a nearby national park, enjoying the views and having a picnic, which was a lot of fun.

× Yes, definitely I have a failed hobby.

✓ Yes, I definitely have a favorite hobby.

The original sentence has a word choice and sentence structure problem: 'failed hobby' is incorrect in this context and the adverb placement is awkward. Use 'I definitely have a favorite hobby' to convey certainty. Place the adverb 'definitely' after the subject 'I' for natural English word order.

× I often watch TV, mostly documentaries and comedy show because they help me relax after studying and learn about new topic.

✓ I often watch TV, mostly documentaries and comedy shows, because they help me relax after studying and learn about new topics.

Errors: 'comedy show' should be plural 'comedy shows' to match 'documentaries' and generalize; 'learn about new topic' needs plural 'topics'. Also add a comma before 'because' for clarity. Use plural when speaking about things in general.

× I also enjoy shopping with my friend at the weekend because browsing new clothes allow me to enjoy and.

✓ I also enjoy shopping with my friend at the weekend because browsing new clothes allows me to relax.

Problems: subject-verb agreement and incomplete sentence. 'Browsing new clothes' is a singular gerund phrase so it requires 'allows' not 'allow'. The original ends abruptly with 'and.' Replace with a complete idea such as 'relax.' Also in many varieties of English, 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' is regional; 'at the weekend' is British and acceptable.

× Yes, when it was twice.

✓ Yes, when I was young.

'When it was twice' is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended meaning is 'when I was a child' or 'when I was young.' Replace with a correct temporal phrase.

× I often stay at home and watch cartoon, especially at the weekend.

✓ I often stayed at home and watched cartoons, especially on the weekend.

Context asks about hobbies as a child, so past tense must be used: 'stayed' and 'watched.' 'Cartoon' should be plural 'cartoons.' Use 'on the weekend' or 'at the weekend' depending on dialect; 'on the weekend' is acceptable in American English.

× Sometime I play hide and seek with my cousin which was really exciting because we love hiking in tricky place.

✓ Sometimes I played hide-and-seek with my cousins, which was really exciting because we loved hiding in tricky places.

Multiple issues: use 'Sometimes' (adverb) and past tense 'played.' 'Hide and seek' is commonly hyphenated 'hide-and-seek.' 'Cousin' should be plural if more than one or keep singular if one; made plural for generality. 'Which' clause refers back to the activity; match past tense 'was' to 'was exciting' or use 'was' with singular—here 'was really exciting' is okay but better 'was' -> 'was really exciting' retained; changed 'we love hiking in tricky place' to 'we loved hiding in tricky places' to reflect intended meaning and correct plural and verb choice.

× I have rest book since I was a child.

✓ I have a collection of books since I was a child.

Original is ungrammatical: 'rest book' is incorrect. Depending on intended meaning, you can say 'I have enjoyed reading since I was a child' or 'I have had books since I was a child.' For grammaticality and clarity, 'I have enjoyed reading since I was a child' (present perfect) or 'I have had a collection of books since I was a child.' Ensure article usage and noun choice are correct.

× I read every day because it broadened my knowledge and spot my curiosity.

✓ I read every day because it broadens my knowledge and sparks my curiosity.

Tense consistency: if speaking about a habit continuing to present, use present simple 'read' (pronounced 'reed') and present 'broadens' and 'sparks.' 'Spot my curiosity' is incorrect collocation; use 'spark my curiosity.' Match subject-verb agreement.

× I especially enjoyed detective book Wake Up about relaxing and help me learn new things.

✓ I especially enjoyed the detective book Wake Up because it was relaxing and helped me learn new things.

Errors: need definite article 'the' before 'detective book' if referring to a specific book; verb tense 'help' should be 'helped' to match past 'enjoyed.' Add 'because it was' to link clauses. 'Relaxing' describes the book, not 'about relaxing.'

× Yes we do. We all enjoy outdoor activities, especially walking and cycling, so we often go on weekend trip together.

✓ Yes, we do. We all enjoy outdoor activities, especially walking and cycling, so we often go on weekend trips together.

Punctuation: add comma after 'Yes.' 'On weekend trip' should be plural 'on weekend trips' for habitual actions. Also 'go on weekend trips together' is natural collocation.

× For example, last month we spend a day walking in the nearby National Park and it's was a lot of fun.

✓ For example, last month we spent a day walking in the nearby national park and it was a lot of fun.

Past time marker 'last month' requires past tense 'spent' (not 'spend'). Remove contraction error: 'it's was' is incorrect; use 'it was.' 'National Park' need not be capitalized unless it's the official name; use lowercase 'national park' if generic.