爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, use a clear topic sentence and avoid repetition. State your hobby directly, give one or two specific details (what you study, how often, and why), and use linking words to improve coherence.

示例: I don't have many hobbies, but recently studying English for the IAS exam has become one of my main pastimes. For example, I spend about an hour each evening practicing vocabulary and reading sample essays, which helps me improve my score.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add one or two specific vivid details (where, who, frequency). Use linking words to connect ideas and make the memory more engaging.

示例: Yes. As a child I often played soccer and tennis with friends in the park near my house. We usually met every weekend, shared snacks, and chatted for hours, which made those afternoons very memorable.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence then give specific examples of what you read, how often, and how it benefits you. Use linking words to clarify the connection between reading and its advantages.

示例: Yes, I have loved reading since childhood. For instance, I read a lot of history and self‑help books, and I try to read for at least 30 minutes every day, which has helped me gain practical knowledge and useful study tips.

建议: Answer directly, then add a specific example of a shared activity and explain why it appeals to both of you. Use a linking phrase to connect the ideas and avoid grammatical errors (e.g., ‘reading’ not ‘readings’).

示例: Yes, my father and I share a hobby: reading. For example, we often recommend books to each other and discuss them on weekends, which helps us bond and discover new authors.

× No I don't have a single hobby but I usually study English for the IAS exam recently when I have free time so that is becoming my kind of hobby.

✓ No, I don't have a single hobby, but I have recently been studying English for the IAS exam in my free time, so it has become my kind of hobby.

The original sentence mixes present simple and 'recently' causing tense inconsistency and run-on structure. Use present perfect progressive 'have been studying' or present perfect 'have studied' for recent actions that continue to present. Also add commas to separate clauses and 'in my free time' for correct preposition placement. Suggestion: use shorter clauses and consistent tense: 'I have recently been studying English for the IAS exam in my free time.'

× Just study English.

✓ I just study English.

The sentence fragment lacks subject and proper tense continuity. Adding subject 'I' makes it a complete sentence. If referring to a habitual action, present simple 'I just study English' is appropriate. Alternatively, for recent habit change, use 'I just started studying English.'

× When I was a child I really loved going out with my friends and playing soccer, tennis in a park near my house.

✓ When I was a child, I really loved going out with my friends and playing soccer and tennis in a park near my house.

Missing comma after introductory clause and incorrect list punctuation. Include 'and' between 'soccer' and 'tennis' and add comma after the introductory phrase. Also 'in a park near my house' correctly follows the activities. Suggestion: place commas and conjunctions correctly in lists and after introductory clauses.

× We also shared a lot of snacks with my friends and talks a lot, talked a lot.

✓ We also shared a lot of snacks and talked a lot.

The phrase redundantly uses 'with my friends' (already implied by 'we') and mixes nouns and verbs incorrectly ('talks a lot' is present tense third-person). Use past tense 'talked' consistent with 'shared'. Remove redundancy. Suggestion: keep subject consistent and match verb tense: 'We shared snacks and talked a lot.'

× Yes, I have loved reading books since I was a child because it helps me retain deep knowledge and tips for the future.

✓ Yes, I have loved reading books since I was a child because they help me gain deep knowledge and tips for the future.

Pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to plural 'books'; use 'they'. Also 'retain deep knowledge' is awkward — 'gain' or 'acquire' is better. Maintain present tense 'help' to match ongoing effect. Suggestion: match pronoun number to noun and choose appropriate verb collocation.

× Yes, my father and I have same hobbies.

✓ Yes, my father and I have the same hobbies.

Missing definite article 'the' before 'same hobbies'. Also sentence is otherwise fine. Suggestion: include 'the' when using 'same' followed by a plural noun: 'have the same hobbies.'

× We both like readings a lot.

✓ We both like reading a lot.

'Readings' as a noun is incorrect here; the gerund 'reading' is appropriate to express the activity. Use singular gerund form 'reading'. Suggestion: use 'reading' to describe the hobby: 'We both like reading a lot.'