爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organized. Start with a clear topic sentence naming a few main hobbies, then give one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward phrases (e.g. “about sport” or listing similar items twice).

示例: I have several hobbies, including playing the piano, drawing, and programming. In addition, I enjoy team sports such as soccer and volleyball because they keep me fit and help me relax after studying.

建议: Correct grammar and be specific. Use a clear topic sentence (I loved drawing), then add specific details and a linking phrase. Avoid tense and article mistakes (e.g. “I was love” → “I loved”, “plain” likely “planes” or “plains”).

示例: I loved drawing when I was a child, especially pictures of trees and flowers. For example, I often drew roses and lilies and practiced shading to make the petals look realistic.

建议: Respond directly and cleanly: state the hobby clearly and give a specific, coherent example. Fix pronouns and vocabulary (e.g. “our hobby” unclear, “plane” likely “plant” or “plain”). Use linking words to connect idea and example.

示例: Yes, I have continued drawing since childhood. For example, I sketch one tree or flower each day to improve my technique, focusing on details like leaves and petals.

建议: Be polite and expand slightly with reasons. Start with a clear topic sentence (My hobbies are different), then explain briefly why and give an example of a family member’s hobby. Avoid negative or dismissive language about family hobbies.

示例: My hobbies are different from my family’s. For instance, my father prefers reading newspapers, whereas I prefer creative activities like drawing because they help me express my ideas.

× I have many hobbies from piano to art to programming, even about sport with some kind of sport like soccer, football, volleyball, even badminton.

✓ I have many hobbies, from piano and art to programming and sports such as soccer, football, volleyball, and badminton.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and articles (e.g. 'about sport' and 'with some kind of sport'). Use 'from... to...' to list a range and 'such as' to give examples. Make 'sports' plural when referring to multiple activities and separate items with commas for clarity.

× I have so many hobbies.

✓ I have so many hobbies.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed. It uses first person 'I' with the correct verb form 'have'.

× When I was a child I was love to draw.

✓ When I was a child I loved to draw.

The original uses 'was love', which mixes past 'was' with the base verb 'love'. Use the simple past 'loved' to express a past habitual action.

× I was love to draw at about plain and trees and it's still my hobby to nowadays.

✓ I loved to draw plains and trees, and it's still my hobby nowadays.

Correct the verb to simple past 'loved', remove incorrect prepositions 'at about', use the plural 'plains' if referring to landscapes, and move 'nowadays' to the end for natural word order. Also change 'it's still my hobby to nowadays' to 'it's still my hobby nowadays'.

× I remember that when I was a child I thought a lot about rose and maybe Lily flowers.

✓ I remember that when I was a child I thought a lot about roses and maybe lilies.

Use plural nouns for general references ('roses', 'lilies') and do not capitalize common nouns like 'lily' unless it's a name. 'About' is unnecessary before the nouns; simply list them.

× Yes, as I say, I still have the our hobby I inherited from my childhood and I still love to draw about trees and flower lights like I was before.

✓ Yes, as I said, I still have the hobby I inherited from my childhood, and I still love drawing trees and flowers like I did before.

Fix tense and pronoun errors: 'as I say' -> past 'as I said'; remove redundant 'the our'; use 'the hobby' or 'my hobby'; use 'drawing' (gerund) after 'love'; 'flower lights' is unclear, likely 'flowers'; 'like I was before' -> 'like I did before' to match past action.

× For example, I draw one plane every day and sketch it and.

✓ For example, I draw one plane every day and sketch it.

Remove the trailing 'and' which creates an incomplete sentence. The structure 'draw ... and sketch it' is correct; no extra connector is needed.

× Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

✓ Do you have the same hobbies as your family members?

This question is correct as written; 'the' is not required before 'same hobbies' and the sentence is natural. No change needed.

× I think my hobby quite unique so I don't have the same hobby with my family like my dad love to read newspaper but I think newspaper is quite boring.

✓ I think my hobby is quite unique, so I don't have the same hobbies as my family. For example, my dad loves to read newspapers, but I find newspapers quite boring.

Add the verb 'is' for the adjective 'unique'. Use plural 'hobbies' and 'newspapers' for general references. Use 'as' in the comparison 'the same hobbies as my family'. 'My dad love' should be 'my dad loves' (third person singular). Split into two sentences for clarity and use 'I find' to express opinion.