爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời nên trực tiếp và tự nhiên hơn; giảm tiếng ấp úng và rút gọn câu. Nên bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó đưa thêm 1-2 chi tiết liên quan (thể loại nhạc, tần suất) dùng từ liên kết nếu cần.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing in my free time. I usually practice for about an hour every evening and I mainly sing pop songs because I like their catchy melodies.

建议: Cần sửa ngữ pháp và trật tự câu, loại bỏ lặp từ, và trình bày ý rõ ràng. Bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề (Yes/No + hobby), sau đó cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (đi đâu, khi nào, với ai) dùng liên từ để nối ý.

示例: Yes, when I was a child I often rode my bike to the park at weekends with my family or friends. It was a healthy activity that helped me stay active and enjoy the outdoors.

建议: Câu trả lời thiếu mạch lạc và có nhiều ngập ngừng; cần ghép ý thành câu hoàn chỉnh. Nên nói rõ khi nào bắt đầu sở thích, lý do thích và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về nội dung truyện.

示例: Yes, besides singing, I've been reading comics since I was a child. I especially liked Detective Conan because I enjoyed the mysteries and clever plots, and I often read a few chapters every weekend.

建议: Cần tránh lặp từ và ngập ngừng; trình bày ngắn gọn: xác nhận giống/hông giống, nêu ai cùng sở thích và chi tiết so sánh (thể loại yêu thích, tần suất). Dùng câu liên kết để mạch lạc.

示例: Yes, I share a hobby with my sister — we both love singing. We often listen to and sing pop songs together in our free time, which is a fun way to bond.

× My hobby is, uh, singing when I when I'm free.

✓ My hobby is singing when I'm free.

Use of verb + -ing as a noun (gerund) is correct here. Remove the repeated word 'when' to fix redundancy and ensure fluency. Suggestion: say 'My hobby is singing when I'm free.'

× When I watch I usually I usually rode my bike, rode my bike to the park to with my with my friend or family at weekends.

✓ When I was a child I usually rode my bike to the park with my friends or family on weekends.

Mixed tenses and repetitions cause confusion. The question asks about childhood, so past tense 'was' and 'rode' are appropriate. 'Usually' should appear once. Use 'friends' plural for generalization and 'on weekends' is the correct prepositional phrase. Suggestion: 'When I was a child I usually rode my bike to the park with my friends or family on weekends.'

× I think this this is a hel helpful activity.

✓ I think this is a helpful activity.

Duplicate word 'this' and misspelled 'hel helpful'. Remove repetition and correct spelling. Use 'a helpful activity' to describe the noun. Suggestion: 'I think this is a helpful activity.'

× Of course. Umm, apart from singing. I uh, had. I had a keen on reading the comics when I was free.

✓ Of course. Apart from singing, I was keen on reading comics when I was free.

'Had a keen on' is incorrect. Use 'was keen on' to express interest in the past. Also combine fragments into one sentence and remove the article 'the' before 'comics' when speaking generally. Suggestion: 'Apart from singing, I was keen on reading comics when I was free.'

× The comics I I read is Detective Conan.

✓ The comic I read was Detective Conan.

Subject-verb agreement and article use: 'comics' (plural) with singular 'is' is mismatched. If referring to a specific series or comic, use singular 'comic' and past tense 'was' because it's about childhood. Remove duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: 'The comic I read was Detective Conan.'

× Honestly, uh, I have a, I have the same hobby, uh, as my, uh, sister.

✓ Honestly, I have the same hobby as my sister.

Remove filler words and extra commas for clarity. The phrase 'the same hobby as my sister' is correct but redundant punctuation interrupts flow. Suggestion: 'Honestly, I have the same hobby as my sister.'

× My sister, my sister really loves singing when she's has free time and she's like pop music like me too.

✓ My sister really loves singing when she has free time, and she likes pop music like me.

Incorrect combination 'she's has' mixes contraction and verb; use 'she has'. 'She likes' (not 'she's like') is required. Remove repeated 'my sister' and trailing 'too' for cleaner sentence. Suggestion: 'My sister really loves singing when she has free time, and she likes pop music like me.'