爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cách trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngữ pháp và động từ chia thì không chính xác; tránh lặp từ và dùng liên từ để nối câu. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể (thể loại sách, tần suất) và dùng thì phù hợp. Ví dụ cần sửa các lỗi như 'it help' → 'it helps', 'I have a hobby I enjoy reading books' → 'My hobby is reading books'.

示例: My hobby is reading books. I enjoy contemporary fiction because it helps me relax and often gives me new perspectives. For example, I usually read for about 30 minutes each evening before bed.

建议: Câu trả lời có ý tốt nhưng thiếu rõ ràng, nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng không phù hợp ('when I watched a till' không rõ nghĩa) và cấu trúc thì sai. Cần mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề, giải thích ngắn gọn lý do và đưa ví dụ cụ thể về loại sách hoặc tần suất đọc. Sửa lỗi chia thì quá khứ: 'I liked'/'it helped'.

示例: Yes, I enjoyed reading as a child. I liked imaginative stories because they helped me picture other worlds, and I read almost every night before going to bed. For example, I often read picture books about painters and artists.

建议: Trả lời thiếu mạch lạc và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp, từ vựng và cấu trúc thời gian. Cần một câu chủ đề rõ ràng: nêu hobby và thời điểm bắt đầu, dùng thì đúng (present perfect/ past simple), nêu lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh số liệu không cần thiết (6:00) và dùng từ đúng ('gift' thay vì 'grand').

示例: Yes, I've loved drawing since I was a child. I started when I was about six because my mother gave me a set of crayons as a gift, and I enjoyed creating pictures. For example, I often drew cartoons of my family.

建议: Câu trả lời có ý rõ nhưng ngữ pháp và từ sai khiến khó hiểu ('I don't know have actually'). Cần câu chủ đề trực tiếp, so sánh ngắn gọn giữa sở thích gia đình và mình, dùng liên từ để nối ý và chia động từ cho đúng (likes, playing). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể về hoạt động cuối tuần.

示例: Not really — my family members enjoy gardening and cooking, while I prefer reading and playing video games. For instance, on weekends they spend time in the garden, but I usually stay inside and read or play games to relax.

× Well yes, I have a hobby I enjoy reading books.

✓ Well yes, I have a hobby: I enjoy reading books.

The original sentence runs two clauses together without proper punctuation or conjunction, causing a sentence structure error. Use a colon or a conjunction to connect the ideas clearly. Suggestion: insert a colon or use 'and' to separate the noun phrase and the explanation.

× I like it because it help me relax and learn new things and I often read in the evening before bed.

✓ I like it because it helps me relax and learn new things, and I often read in the evening before bed.

The subject 'it' requires the third person singular verb form 'helps'. Also the clause connection needs a comma and conjunction. Suggestion: use 'helps' for third person singular and add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses.

× Well yes, I had a hobby of reading books when I watched a till.

✓ Well yes, I had a hobby of reading books when I was a child.

The phrase 'watched a till' is ungrammatical and likely a wrong word choice; the intended meaning is 'was a child', which requires past tense 'was'. Suggestion: replace with 'was a child' to convey childhood time.

× I like it because it help me imagine a new place and not work.

✓ I liked it because it helped me imagine a new place and forget about work.

When referring to a past hobby, verbs should be in past tense: 'liked' and 'helped'. Also 'not work' is incorrect; use 'forget about work' to express distraction from work. Suggestion: match past tense and use appropriate verbs for meaning.

× For example I often read a painter story before bed and I did almost every night.

✓ For example, I often read a short story before bed and I did so almost every night.

The phrase 'a painter story' is likely incorrect word choice; 'short story' or 'picture book' fits. 'I did almost every night' is missing 'so' for clarity. Suggestion: choose correct noun and include 'so' to refer back to the action.

× Well yes I have loved drawing since I was a till I start when I was about 6:00 because my mother gave me grand and I enjoy making picture and it helped me realize for example I usually I used to draw cartoon of my family.

✓ Well yes, I have loved drawing since I was a child. I started when I was about six because my mother gave me crayons, and I enjoy making pictures. For example, I usually used to draw cartoons of my family.

This run-on sentence contains many errors: incorrect time word 'till', wrong verb forms 'start' instead of 'started', incorrect items 'grand' instead of 'crayons', singular/plural mistakes 'picture' should be 'pictures', and redundant phrasing 'I usually I used to'. Suggestion: break into sentences, use 'child', past tense 'started', correct vocabulary 'crayons', pluralize nouns, and remove redundancy.

× Well, I don't know have actually the same hobby as my family.

✓ Well, I don't actually have the same hobbies as my family.

Word order is incorrect: 'don't have actually' should be 'don't actually have'. Also 'hobby' should be plural 'hobbies' when referring to multiple family members. Suggestion: place adverb 'actually' after auxiliary verb and use plural where appropriate.

× My present like garden and cooking, but I prefer reading a book and play video game because it helps me relax after work.

✓ My parents like gardening and cooking, but I prefer reading books and playing video games because they help me relax after work.

Many word choice and grammar errors: 'present' should be 'parents'; 'garden' as verb form 'gardening'; 'reading a book and play video game' should use parallel gerunds 'reading books and playing video games'; pronoun agreement 'they help' refers to hobbies and needs plural. Suggestion: correct nouns, use gerunds for activities, ensure plural agreement.

× For example on weekend they are in the garden and I usually stay.

✓ For example, on weekends they work in the garden and I usually stay home.

Use plural 'weekends' for habitual actions, and 'stay' needs an object 'home'. Also 'are in the garden' is better as 'work in the garden' for clarity. Suggestion: use plural time expressions for habits and include necessary objects.