爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện lỗi ngữ pháp và trôi chảy: tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “usually” hai lần) và dùng thì chính xác. Nên mở đầu trực tiếp, tối đa 4 câu, dùng liên từ để nối ý, và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tần suất, thể loại sách).

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy playing badminton and reading novels. I play badminton with a close friend almost every morning for about an hour, and in the evenings I read contemporary fiction to relax and reduce stress.

建议: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và diễn đạt rõ ràng: dùng thì quá khứ (had, watched), tránh cụm từ mơ hồ (“very into”) và dùng một câu chủ đề + 1-2 câu chi tiết. Thêm ví dụ cụ thể về hoạt động để tăng tính logic.

示例: Yes, I did. As a child I watched cartoons with a close friend and played board games with my father every evening. Those moments made me feel happy because we laughed a lot and it brought our family closer.

建议: Sửa cấu trúc câu và thì: tránh lộn kính ngữ (‘I yes, I when...’), dùng thì hoàn chỉnh (I have liked drawing since childhood / I liked drawing when I was a child). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (thể loại tranh, chủ đề) và giữ 2–3 câu súc tích.

示例: Yes, I have. I have liked drawing since I was a child because my parents gave me crayons. I used to draw landscapes and cartoons every afternoon after school to relax and express myself.

建议: Cải thiện tính mạch lạc và loại bỏ tiếng ậm ừ: tránh lặp “uh” và sửa ngữ pháp (they → he, I think it have → it’s different). Trả lời trực tiếp: nói rõ có/không, so sánh ngắn gọn, cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể về sở thích của gia đình.

示例: Not really. I prefer reading novels and playing badminton with a friend, while my father enjoys playing football and listening to music in the evenings. So our hobbies are quite different, although we sometimes spend time together listening to songs.

× You know, it helps me relax and reduce stress also.

✓ You know, it helps me relax and reduces my stress as well.

Usage of 'also' at the end is awkward; use 'as well' and adjust noun phrase 'my stress'. Also maintain subject-verb agreement with 'helps' + verb infinitive 'relax' and use 'reduces' for parallel structure.

× When I was a child I have several hobbies like watching cartoons on TV with my close friend and playing games with my father every evening.

✓ When I was a child I had several hobbies like watching cartoons on TV with my close friend and playing games with my father every evening.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was a child'), so the verb should be in past tense. 'Have' should be changed to 'had' to match the time reference.

× You know it make me feel happy and fun and also is very into.

✓ You know it made me feel happy and amused and I was very into it.

Mixed tenses and subject-verb agreement errors: 'make' should be past 'made' to match past context; 'fun' is a noun so use 'amused' or 'happy' as adjective; 'is very into' is ungrammatical—express interest with 'I was very into it' in past.

× I yes, I when I was a child I like draw drawing because my parent gives me crayons and it helps me relax and express my personality.

✓ Yes; when I was a child I liked drawing because my parents gave me crayons and it helped me relax and express my personality.

Multiple issues: word order and filler words removed; 'like draw drawing' is incorrect—use 'liked drawing' (past tense + gerund). 'Parent' should be plural 'parents' if referring generally, and 'gives' should be past 'gave' to match past context. 'Helps' should be past 'helped'.

× For example, I used to draw every afternoon after school.

✓ For example, I used to draw every afternoon after school.

This sentence is already correct; 'used to draw' correctly expresses past habitual action and matches subject. No correction needed.

× Uh, I think it depends on uh, for me, I like uh, uh, reading novels and not playing badminton with my close friend.

✓ Uh, I think it depends. For me, I like reading novels and I do not play badminton with my close friend.

Awkward phrasing and fillers removed; 'not playing badminton with my close friend' lacks a clear auxiliary—use 'I do not play' to form negative. Pronoun and sentence clarity improved.

× As my family, especially my father, they usually like playing football or uh, listening to music every evening and I think it have different.

✓ In my family, especially my father, they usually like playing football or listening to music every evening, and I think it is different for me.

Use 'In my family' not 'As my family'. Subject 'they' is acceptable but keep clarity; 'have different' is ungrammatical—use 'is different for me'. Also 'listening to music' is fine; streamline fillers.