爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the answer more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetition, and combine reasons with a linking word. Give one specific example of what you read or where you swim to add detail.

示例: Yes — my main hobbies are reading and swimming. I usually read historical fiction in the evenings and swim at a community pool twice a week because both activities relax me and help me sleep better.

建议: Use correct grammar for past habits and avoid mixing tenses. Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific details and a linking word to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I did. I used to play volleyball with my friends after school, and I often rode my bike to and from school, which kept me active and helped me socialize.

建议: Improve grammar and organization: begin with a clear statement, use past simple for childhood and present simple for now, and avoid unclear phrases. Add a specific detail about how long you swim or where to make it more concrete.

示例: Yes — swimming has been my hobby since childhood. I learned to swim at age six and still swim three times a week at the local pool because I enjoy the exercise and sense of calm it gives me.

建议: Answer directly and correct wording: start with a clear topic sentence (No, we don't), avoid confusion and filler, and give a brief comparison with a specific example of family hobbies.

示例: No, we don't share the same hobbies. For example, my sister and brother prefer running and outdoor sports, while I prefer swimming and reading, so we usually pursue different activities in our free time.

× Yes I do I I enjoy reading and swimming and I find myself doing them when I have free time because both of them make me relax and help me to sleep well.

✓ Yes, I do. I enjoy reading and swimming, and I do them when I have free time because they help me relax and sleep well.

Run-on and redundancy: replace 'find myself doing them' with 'do them' for clarity and remove duplicate 'I'. Use 'they help me relax' instead of 'make me relax' and 'help me to sleep well' -> 'sleep well' for natural phrasing. Add necessary commas and periods.

× Because I have a problem with sleep.

✓ I have a problem with sleeping.

Sentence fragment and word choice: the original is a fragment starting with 'Because'. Make it a full sentence by removing 'Because' and use 'sleeping' (gerund) after 'problem with'. Alternatively integrate with previous sentence.

× Yes, I did. When I was a child I used to play a volleyball with my friend after school and also I prefer to cycling to school and to come back home.

✓ Yes, I did. When I was a child I used to play volleyball with my friend after school, and I preferred cycling to school and back home.

Incorrect article and verb forms: 'play a volleyball' should be 'play volleyball' (no article). 'Prefer' should be past 'preferred' to match 'used to'; 'to cycling' should be 'cycling' (no 'to' before gerund). 'to come back home' -> 'back home' for natural phrasing.

× Yes I do it is a swimming. I used to swim when I was a child and also do it right now because I love swimming.

✓ Yes, I do. It is swimming. I used to swim when I was a child, and I still swim now because I love it.

Article and pronoun use: 'a swimming' is incorrect; use 'swimming' without article. 'Do it right now' is awkward—use 'I still swim now' or 'I swim now'. Replace repeated 'swimming' with pronoun 'it' to avoid repetition.

× It is my hobby when for a sense when I was a child.

✓ It has been my hobby since I was a child.

Awkward and incorrect phrasing: 'when for a sense' is ungrammatical. Use 'has been' or 'was' and 'since I was a child' to express continuation from childhood to present.

× Actually you are not, because my sister and my brother, they enjoy our running instead of swimming and reading.

✓ Actually, no. My sister and brother enjoy running instead of swimming and reading.

Pronoun and subject issues: 'you are not' is wrong response; better 'no'. Redundant subject 'my sister and my brother, they' — remove 'they'. 'Our running' is incorrect; use 'running'.

× Uh, so we don't have the same hobbies?

✓ So, we don't have the same hobbies.

Using a question tag with rising intonation is acceptable in speech, but as an answer a declarative sentence is clearer. Remove the question mark if stating a fact; otherwise keep as 'Don't we have the same hobbies?' for a genuine question. Remove filler 'Uh' for clarity.