爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 発音と文法の修正に注意し、より自然で簡潔な表現を使ってください。例えば「supporting for I favorite idol」は不自然で、冠詞や語順、動詞の使い方を直す必要があります。また、同じ意味を繰り返す冗長な表現（"enjoy, enjoy life"）は避け、具体的な頻度や活動内容を示すと効果的です。回答は最大5文にまとめ、接続詞を使って流れを良くしましょう。

示例: I support my favourite idol and usually go to concerts on weekends. I also follow their updates online and sometimes buy merchandise. Because I enjoy the atmosphere and meeting other fans, going to concerts makes my weekends special.

建议: 過去形の一貫性と語順、細部の明確化を改善してください。現在形と過去形が混在しているので過去形で統一し、友達の数やどんなゲームかなど具体例を加えるとよいでしょう。また前置詞の使い方（"in home"→"at home"）を直してください。回答は簡潔に1〜3文でまとめ、接続詞でつなぐと自然です。

示例: When I was a child, I enjoyed playing handheld games like the Nintendo 3DS and consoles such as the Wii. I often played with my friends at home, and we liked racing and adventure games the most.

建议: 否定から始めるのは構いませんが、文法（時制、語の形）と自然な接続表現を直してください。例えば"my hobby change gradually changed"は冗長で誤りがあります。代わりに、"My hobbies have changed over time"などの表現を使い、なぜ変わったか具体的な理由（興味や経験）を付け加えると良いです。

示例: No, I don't. My hobbies have changed over time; as a child I liked video games, but now I prefer social activities. For example, I enjoy meeting people and chatting because it helps me build friendships and confidence.

建议: 文法（冠詞・複数形・前置詞）と語順を修正してください。"rarely talk with my friend with my family"は意味が不明瞭なので、誰と話すか明確にし、家族の趣味が何か簡単に述べると説得力が増します。また"have"は三人称単数に合わせ"has"にする必要があります。短く明確に答え、理由を一つ添えてください。

示例: No, my family and I have different hobbies. We rarely discuss hobbies at home because each person prefers their own activities; for instance, my mother likes gardening while I enjoy going to concerts.

× My hobby is supporting for I favorite idol.

✓ My hobby is supporting my favorite idol.

The preposition 'for' is unnecessary after 'supporting' when indicating the object of support; use the direct object 'my favorite idol'. Also 'I' should be 'my' to show possession: 'my favorite idol'. Suggestion: Say 'supporting my favorite idol.'

× On weekend I usually go to the concert.

✓ On weekends I usually go to concerts.

Use the plural 'weekends' to indicate repeated occurrences and plural 'concerts' for regular events. Alternatively, 'On the weekend' could be used for a single weekend. Also include a comma after the adverbial phrase if desired: 'On weekends, I usually go to concerts.' Suggestion: Use 'on weekends' for habitual actions and plural nouns for repeated events.

× And you enjoy, enjoy life.

✓ And I enjoy life.

The original has misplaced pronoun and redundant repetition. The question asks about the student's hobbies; the student should say 'I enjoy life.' If addressing the examiner, 'Do you enjoy life?' would be a question. Suggestion: Use the correct subject 'I' and avoid unnecessary repetition.

× When I was a child my hobby was games like 3DS and Wii.

✓ When I was a child, my hobbies were games like those on the 3DS and Wii.

Subject and verb should agree: 'hobbies were' (plural). Also specify 'those on the 3DS and Wii' or 'games on the 3DS and Wii' for clarity. Comma after the time clause improves readability. Suggestion: Use plural forms and precise phrasing: 'my hobbies were games on the 3DS and Wii.'

× I usually play games with my friend in home.

✓ I usually play games with my friend at home.

Use 'at home' not 'in home' for location. If playing with more than one friend, use 'friends'. The present tense 'play' is fine for habitual actions. Suggestion: Say 'I usually play games with my friend at home.' or '...with my friends at home.'

× No, I don't because my hobby change gradually changed.

✓ No, I don't because my hobby gradually changed.

Use past tense 'changed' without repeating 'change' and place 'gradually' before the verb. The phrase 'I don't' refers to present; better: 'No, I don't have one because my hobbies gradually changed.' Suggestion: Use consistent tense: 'my hobbies gradually changed.'

× When I was a child my hobby was game, but now I prefer communicating with some people.

✓ When I was a child, my hobby was games, but now I prefer communicating with people.

Use plural 'games' rather than 'game'. 'Some people' is odd here; 'people' is more natural. Comma after the time clause improves flow. 'Prefer communicating with people' is clearer. Suggestion: 'my hobby was playing games, but now I prefer communicating with people.'

× No, I don't. To be honest, in my home I rarely talk with my friend with my family about my hobby because my family have their own hobby.

✓ No, I don't. To be honest, at home I rarely talk with my family about my hobby because my family have their own hobbies.

Use 'at home' not 'in my home' for this context. 'Talk with my friend with my family' is confusing; likely intended 'talk with my family'. Use 'have their own hobbies' (plural) to match 'family' members. Also 'my family have' is acceptable in British English, but 'my family has' is common in American English; ensure subject-verb agreement: 'my family has their own hobbies' or 'my family members have their own hobbies.' Suggestion: 'At home, I rarely talk with my family about my hobby because they have their own hobbies.'