爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, use correct grammar and sentence structure, and keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences). Use linking words to connect ideas and give a specific example of a hobby. Avoid redundancy and incorrect pronouns/verb forms.

示例: Yes, I have several hobbies. In my free time I usually read books to learn new vocabulary, which helps me prepare for English tests. For example, I read short stories and note down useful words and phrases.

建议: Begin with a direct answer, use past tense consistently for childhood activities, and give a clear reason why you enjoyed it with one brief supporting detail. Avoid filler phrases and unclear statements.

示例: Yes, I did. When I was about ten years old, I often played football with my friends in the neighborhood. I enjoyed it because it was fun and good exercise, and it helped me make friends.

建议: Answer clearly if the hobby has continued since childhood and use consistent tense. Give a concise reason and one specific detail (frequency or routine). Use natural phrasing and avoid repetition of words.

示例: Yes, I have continued a hobby from my childhood: jogging. I go jogging every evening to reduce stress and keep fit, and I usually run for about 30 minutes around my neighborhood.

建议: Start with a direct yes/no and specify which family member. Use correct pronouns and clearer sentences to explain the shared hobby and how your interests match or differ, with one specific example of what you draw.

示例: Yes. My sister and I both enjoy drawing. She likes designing clothes, while I often draw cars on paper, so we share an interest in creating artwork even though our subjects are different.

× Of course they have many hobby I do in my free time.

✓ Of course I have many hobbies I do in my free time.

The student used 'they' instead of 'I' and 'hobby' singular instead of the plural 'hobbies'. Use the first-person pronoun to refer to oneself and pluralize countable nouns when appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'I' for personal statements and add -s for plural countable nouns.

× Actually when I have a free time I do I read book for.

✓ Actually when I have free time I read books.

'Have a free time' is nonstandard; use 'have free time'. 'I do I read book for' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use simple present 'I read' for habitual actions and plural 'books' for general reading. Suggestion: Say 'when I have free time, I read books.'

× Practice new vocabulary.

✓ I practice new vocabulary.

The original is a sentence fragment missing a subject and verb form. Add subject 'I' and present-tense verb 'practice' to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: Use full sentences: 'I practice new vocabulary.'

× I can get new vocabulary for test IL.

✓ I can learn new vocabulary for the IELTS test.

'Get' is informal and unclear; 'learn' is better. 'for test IL' has word order and naming errors; the test is 'IELTS'. Use correct name and order. Suggestion: Say 'I can learn new vocabulary for the IELTS test.'

× Absolutely yes, when I were a child, I have hobby is uh, playing football with my friend when I was about 10 year old.

✓ Absolutely yes. When I was a child, my hobby was playing football with my friends when I was about 10 years old.

Use past tense 'was' not 'were' for singular subject 'I'. 'I have hobby is' is ungrammatical; use 'my hobby was'. 'friend' should be plural 'friends' and '10 year old' needs plural 'years' and hyphenation isn't required in speech. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense and correct noun forms: 'When I was a child, my hobby was playing football with my friends when I was about 10 years old.'

× So I really enjoy because I don't think everything.

✓ So I really enjoyed it because I didn't worry about anything.

The original mixes tenses and has an unclear clause 'I don't think everything.' The intended meaning is likely 'I didn't worry about anything' when playing as a child. Use past tense and clear vocabulary. Suggestion: Replace vague phrases with precise verbs: 'I didn't worry about anything.'

× Yes, I have, uh, enjoy to exciting excite exercise.

✓ Yes, I enjoy exercising because it's exciting.

'I have' is unnecessary, 'enjoy to exciting excite exercise' is grammatically wrong. Use 'enjoy' followed by gerund 'exercising' and an adjective 'exciting'. Suggestion: Say 'I enjoy exercising because it's exciting.'

× I'm jogging in the evening every day.

✓ I jog in the evening every day.

Present continuous 'I'm jogging' can be used but for habitual actions simple present 'I jog' is more natural. Either is acceptable; here simple present fits question about habits. Suggestion: Use 'I jog in the evening every day.' for habitual routine.

× So uh, I spend time for uh, jogging to reduce stress to stay body healthy.

✓ So I spend time jogging to reduce stress and to keep my body healthy.

Use 'spend time jogging' rather than 'spend time for jogging'. 'Stay body healthy' is ungrammatical; use 'keep my body healthy'. Also add conjunction 'and' to connect purposes. Suggestion: 'I spend time jogging to reduce stress and to keep my body healthy.'

× Yes, I have the same hobby with my sister.

✓ Yes, I have the same hobby as my sister.

Use 'the same ... as' to compare; 'with' is incorrect in this structure. Suggestion: Use 'the same hobby as my sister.'

× They like to uh, drawing the clothes.

✓ She likes drawing clothes.

'They' is inconsistent for 'sister' (singular); use 'she' or 'my sister'. 'Like to drawing' mixes infinitive and gerund; use 'likes drawing' or 'likes to draw'. Also 'the clothes' is unnecessary; use 'clothes'. Suggestion: 'My sister likes drawing clothes.'

× So I, I think my hobby uh, the same like me is uh, I like uh create.

✓ So I think my hobby is the same as hers: I like creating things.

Original is disfluent and uses incorrect comparison 'the same like me'. Use 'the same as hers' and 'creating things' to express interest in making things. Suggestion: 'My hobby is the same as hers: I like creating things.'

× I like the drawing the car in the paper.

✓ I like drawing cars on paper.

'The drawing the car in the paper' has extra articles and wrong preposition. Use gerund 'drawing cars' and preposition 'on paper'. Suggestion: 'I like drawing cars on paper.'

× So that's why I have uh, the same hobby.

✓ So that's why we have the same hobby.

Use 'we' to refer to both speaker and sister sharing the hobby. 'I have the same hobby' is possible but 'we have the same hobby' clarifies shared interest. Suggestion: 'So that's why we have the same hobby.'