爱好— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, use correct grammar (articles, prepositions), avoid redundancy, and limit to maximum five sentences. Use linking words to list hobbies and explain preference briefly with a specific reason or example.

示例: I enjoy several hobbies, including cooking, painting and dancing. Cooking is my favorite because I like experimenting with new recipes and sharing meals with friends. For example, last weekend I tried a new pasta recipe and it turned out great, which made me very proud.

建议: Give a direct topic sentence and correct tense usage (past simple for childhood). Remove awkward phrases and be specific about what you enjoyed. Use one or two supporting details linked with a connector (e.g., because, so, for example).

示例: Yes, I loved dancing when I was a child. I used to learn simple choreography to pop songs because moving to music made me feel happy and confident. For example, I often practised routines with my friends after school.

建议: Avoid repetitive phrasing and correct article use (“cooking” doesn’t need “a”). Use a concise topic sentence and provide a specific example of how you practice the hobby, mentioning frequency or a notable memory to make the answer richer.

示例: Yes, I have loved cooking since I was a child. I enjoy experimenting with recipes, especially baking, and I try a new dish every month; last month I baked a chocolate cake that my family loved.

建议: Clarify meaning and avoid inappropriate or irrelevant phrases (e.g., “my family is in divorce in nature” is confusing). Answer directly, use correct grammar and sentence structure, and give specific comparisons using linking words (however, although). Limit to two or three sentences.

示例: No, my hobbies are different from most of my family. For instance, my father enjoys reading novels while my mother likes cooking, which I also enjoy; however, dancing is my favourite and that sets me apart from them.

× Yes, I do have many hobbies and such as cooking, painting, dancing and among them cooking is my favorite one and whenever I have a time, I often devote this time on the cooking.

✓ Yes, I have many hobbies, such as cooking, painting, and dancing; among them, cooking is my favorite, and whenever I have time, I often devote it to cooking.

Incorrect use of quantifiers 'many' is acceptable but phrase 'and such as' is redundant. 'A time' is wrong; use 'time' (uncountable). 'Devote this time on the cooking' uses wrong preposition and article; correct is 'devote it to cooking'. Improve by removing redundancy, fixing articles, and using correct preposition 'to'. Grammar problem type ID:14

× Yes, I remember that when I was a child. I have a hobby in which I have to dance on the various songs and I really enjoy to dance on the different lyrics and still I have the same hobby.

✓ Yes, I remember when I was a child. I had a hobby of dancing to various songs, and I really enjoyed dancing to different lyrics; I still have the same hobby.

Tense inconsistency: 'I remember that when I was a child' is awkward but acceptable; main problems: use of present tense 'have a hobby' for past period should be 'had a hobby'. 'Have to dance' incorrectly implies obligation; use 'of dancing'. 'Enjoy to dance' is incorrect collocation; use 'enjoy dancing'. Preposition 'on' should be 'to'. Improve by using past tense for past habit and correct verb forms and prepositions. Grammar problem type ID:5

× Yes, definitely. I have a hobby that I have had since childhood and it is none other than it is a cooking. I often enjoy to experiment with the different recipes and it gives me a lot of pleasure.

✓ Yes, definitely. I have had a hobby since childhood: cooking. I often enjoy experimenting with different recipes, and it gives me a lot of pleasure.

Wordiness and article error: 'it is none other than it is a cooking' is redundant and uses incorrect article; 'cooking' as activity does not need 'a'. 'Enjoy to experiment' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is followed by gerund 'experimenting'. Also 'the different recipes' is better as 'different recipes'. Improve by using gerund after 'enjoy' and removing unnecessary words. Grammar problem type ID:8

× No, my family is in divorce in nature and they have a different hobbies like my father is enjoy to read the books and novels and my mother have a cooking hobby so I I think I have a same kind of hobbies. But yes among them dancing is my favorite one which is uh, different from others.

✓ No, my family is divorced and they have different hobbies: my father enjoys reading books and novels, and my mother enjoys cooking, so I think I have similar hobbies. Among them, dancing is my favorite, which is different from the others.

Multiple errors: 'in divorce in nature' is incorrect; use 'divorced' to describe family status. 'They have a different hobbies' has article/number mismatch—use 'different hobbies'. 'My father is enjoy to read' should be 'my father enjoys reading' (verb form and preposition). 'My mother have a cooking hobby' should be 'my mother enjoys cooking' or 'has a cooking hobby'. 'I I' is repetition. Prepositions 'to read the books' unnecessary article 'the'. 'A same kind of hobbies' is incorrect; use 'similar hobbies' or 'the same kind of hobbies'. Also punctuation and sentence structure need fixing. Improve by using correct adjective 'divorced', subject-verb agreement, gerund after 'enjoy', and correct determiners. Grammar problem type ID:11