聊天— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and natural: give a clear topic sentence then 1–2 supporting details. Avoid repeated words and awkward phrases. Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly and choose precise vocabulary (e.g. "closer," "stronger").

示例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps us stay close. For example, we share daily experiences and support each other, which strengthens our friendships.

建议: State the main topic clearly, then give specific details and avoid filler words. Use correct grammar for reasons ("because") and referents ("we get a lot assigned"). Reduce repetition.

示例: We usually talk about our schoolwork and assignments because we have heavy workloads. For instance, we compare notes, share study tips, and use social media to coordinate group projects.

建议: Begin with a direct statement (I prefer...). Give one clear reason and a short example. Avoid tentative phrases like "could gravitate"—use confident language.

示例: I prefer chatting with one friend because I value privacy. For example, I feel more comfortable discussing personal matters one-on-one rather than in a group.

建议: Give a direct preference sentence, then one or two clear supporting points. Remove unnecessary words and use precise verbs ("meet," "talk"). Mention a concrete benefit of face-to-face communication.

示例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it allows better understanding through body language. For example, meeting for coffee helps us have deeper conversations and build stronger friendships.

建议: Answer directly (Yes/No), then explain briefly with a clear structure: cause, example, and result. Avoid vague phrases like "milestone for our expansion" and correct grammar ("heated arguments").

示例: Yes, we argue sometimes when problems arise, often online. However, these disagreements usually help us understand each other better and improve our friendships afterwards.

× Yes, personally I really love chatting with my friends because we can discuss like our topics more, close, closer and eventually our friendships will become much connected.

✓ Yes, personally I really love chatting with my friends because we can discuss our topics more closely, and eventually our friendships will become much closer and more connected.

Problems: unnecessary filler 'like' used as a preposition/ filler; 'close, closer' incorrect adjective/adverb forms and order; 'much connected' is non-idiomatic. Corrections: remove 'like', use 'discuss our topics' (no extra preposition), use adverb 'more closely' to modify 'discuss', combine adjectives as 'much closer and more connected'. Suggestion: avoid using 'like' as a filler, choose correct adverb/adjective forms, and use natural collocations ('closer' and 'more connected').

× Normally we discuss our academic performance at school because nowadays we like get a lot on our place as well as like a workload and so that we often often use social media to discuss with each other.

✓ Normally we discuss our academic performance at school because nowadays we get a lot of work at our place and have a heavy workload, so we often use social media to discuss things with each other.

Problems: 'like get' and repeated 'like' are incorrect filler usage; 'get a lot on our place' is ungrammatical preposition and noun choice; 'often often' repetition. Corrections: remove filler 'like', use 'get a lot of work' and 'have a heavy workload', replace 'on our place' with 'at our place' or omit, and use 'discuss things with each other'. Suggestion: avoid filler words, use correct noun phrases ('a lot of work', 'workload'), and remove duplicated words.

× If I could gravitate towards chatting with only one friend because I don't want to have my secrets revealed in front of everyone and I would like it to be kept.

✓ I would prefer to chat with only one friend because I don't want my secrets revealed in front of everyone and I would like them to be kept private.

Problems: incorrect use of 'could gravitate towards' and mixed conditional/modal forms; 'have my secrets revealed' is passive but awkward with 'want to have'. Corrections: use 'would prefer' to express preference, simplify passive to 'I don't want my secrets revealed' and specify 'kept private'. Suggestion: use clear modal expressions for preferences ('I prefer', 'I would prefer') and avoid unnecessary verbs like 'have' before passive constructions.

× Personally I could gravitate towards face to face communications because when we eat, interact directly and personally, we can like know more about each other and eventually our friendships will become much connected and closer.

✓ Personally I prefer face-to-face communication because when we meet and interact directly, we can get to know more about each other and eventually our friendships become closer and more connected.

Problems: 'could gravitate towards' wrong modal; 'face to face communications' should be 'face-to-face communication' (hyphenated adjective, uncountable); 'when we eat, interact' unclear listing; 'can like know' filler 'like'; 'much connected and closer' non-idiomatic order. Corrections: use 'prefer', hyphenate 'face-to-face', use 'meet and interact directly', 'get to know' is natural, and 'closer and more connected' is idiomatic. Suggestion: choose precise verbs ('prefer', 'meet'), remove fillers, and use standard adjective order.

× From time to time, whenever we encounter some problems, we often have a heated arguments via like social medias and after that argument we like know more about each other and we just like it's like a milestone for our expansion.

✓ From time to time, whenever we encounter problems, we often have heated arguments via social media, and after an argument we get to know more about each other; it's like a milestone for our relationship's development.

Problems: 'a heated arguments' mismatch article+plural (article error/number), 'via like social medias' wrong filler and pluralization of 'social media', 'we like know' filler and incorrect verb form, 'milestone for our expansion' awkward collocation. Corrections: remove 'a' and use plural or singular consistently: 'have heated arguments' or 'have a heated argument'; use 'via social media' (uncountable/unchanged), use 'get to know', and replace 'expansion' with 'relationship's development' or 'growth'. Suggestion: watch article-number agreement, avoid filler 'like', use correct count/uncount nouns, and choose natural collocations.