鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 質問には「好きかどうか」と「頻度」を最初に明確に答えましょう。"I like buying shoes"のように自然に言い、"twice, once a month"のような矛盾する表現は避けて、"once a month"または"twice a year"のどちらかを選びます。また、"go to the school everyday life"は不自然なので、"go to school every day"と言い換えましょう。理由を1つ加え、3文程度で簡潔にまとめると、より自然で効果的です。

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, and I usually buy a new pair once a month. I like having different styles to wear to school every day. It also helps me feel more confident.

建议: 現在完了の質問には、"No, I haven't"と答えます。"buy shoes online"は"bought shoes online"、"both my shoes"は"bought my shoes"が適切です。オンライン購入を避ける理由として、サイズが合わない心配を、"I’m worried that the shoes might not fit"のように自然な文で説明しましょう。短い直接回答の後に理由を1つ加えると、基本構成が明確になります。

示例: No, I haven’t bought shoes online. I’m worried that the size might not fit me properly. I prefer trying shoes on in a shop before I buy them.

建议: 金額への回答は明確で、理由もあり、内容は比較的よく伝わっています。"¥5,000"は英語では"about five thousand yen"と言うと自然です。"It is good price"には冠詞を付けて"It’s a good price"とし、"may broke"は"may break"または"might break easily"に直しましょう。"not too expensive, but not too cheap"はやや繰り返しになるため、品質とのバランスを説明すると、より効果的です。

示例: I usually spend about five thousand yen on a pair of shoes. I think that’s a reasonable price because the shoes are affordable but still good quality. Very cheap shoes might wear out quickly, so I prefer to buy something durable.

建议: 好みを最初に明確に述べている点は良いですが、"my legs are the shape of leg little different"は不自然です。"my feet are slightly different in shape"または"I have slightly unusual-shaped feet"のように言い換えましょう。また、"work and run more comfortable"は"walk and run more comfortably"が正確です。最後の"so I usually"で文が途切れているため、理由と具体例を完結させ、"That’s why I usually choose comfortable sneakers"とまとめましょう。

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because my feet are slightly different in shape from other people’s. Comfortable shoes allow me to walk and run more easily without hurting my feet. That’s why I usually choose comfortable sneakers rather than fashionable ones.

× I buy, I buy shoes, uh, twice, once a month because I want to umm, put on my shoes, uh, different one when I go to the school everyday life.

✓ I buy shoes once a month because I want to wear different shoes when I go to school every day.

Different refers to shoes, which is plural here, so use different shoes rather than different one. Also, once a month and twice a month have different meanings, so choose one. Use every day as an adverbial phrase, not everyday life.

× I buy, I buy shoes, uh, twice, once a month because I want to umm, put on my shoes, uh, different one when I go to the school everyday life.

✓ I buy shoes once a month because I want to wear different shoes when I go to school every day.

The natural preposition is to school when referring to the activity of attending school. The phrase go to the school usually refers to going to a particular school building.

× I buy, I buy shoes, uh, twice, once a month because I want to umm, put on my shoes, uh, different one when I go to the school everyday life.

✓ I buy shoes once a month because I want to wear different shoes when I go to school every day.

School is used without the definite article when referring to the usual activity of attending school. Therefore, say go to school rather than go to the school.

× No I don't have. I didn't have both my shoes online because I I wo worry about the size different size will be the same.

✓ No, I haven't. I have never bought shoes online because I worry that different sizes may not be the same.

The question uses the present perfect, Have you ever bought, so the answer should be No, I haven't. Use bought, not both, because bought is the past participle of buy.

× No I don't have. I didn't have both my shoes online because I I wo worry about the size different size will be the same.

✓ No, I haven't. I have never bought shoes online because I worry that different sizes may not be the same.

Shoes is plural and is being discussed generally, so no article is needed before shoes. Before size, use the plural form sizes because the answer refers to sizes in general.

× A cheap one may may broke easily, so I want to buy good shoes.

✓ A cheap pair may break easily, so I want to buy good shoes.

After the modal verb may, use the base form of the verb: may break, not may broke. Do not repeat may. Pair is suitable because shoes are normally discussed as a pair.

× Uh, it is good price and not too expensive, but not too cheap.

✓ It is a good price and not too expensive, but not too cheap.

The singular countable noun price needs an article. Use a before good price.

× So I want to work and run more comfortable, so I usually.

✓ So I want to walk and run more comfortably, so I usually choose comfortable shoes.

Comfortably is an adverb and describes how someone walks or runs. Comfortable is an adjective and describes a noun such as shoes. The original sentence is also incomplete, so add a main verb after usually.

× My, my leg, uh, legs are the shape of leg little, uh, different, uh, compared to other people.

✓ My legs are shaped a little differently from other people's legs.

Because the subject is my legs, use the plural noun legs. Other people's legs is also plural because the comparison is with the legs of several other people.

× My, my leg, uh, legs are the shape of leg little, uh, different, uh, compared to other people.

✓ My legs are shaped a little differently from other people's legs.

Use the adverb differently to describe how the legs are shaped. The natural expression is are shaped differently, not are the shape of leg little different.