鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question more directly and use accurate grammar. Say “I don’t buy” instead of “I not buy,” and avoid repeating “buy shoes.” The phrase “shoes that I just like yearly” is unclear; explain that you buy shoes only when you need them or find a style you like. Use a linking word such as “because” to introduce a specific reason, and keep the answer to two or three concise sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, but I don’t do it very often. I usually buy a new pair once a year or every two years because I prefer to save money and replace my shoes only when they are worn out. When I do go shopping, I sometimes buy two or three pairs at once.

建议: Give a clear answer at the beginning, such as “No, I haven’t.” Correct the grammar and word forms: use “a traditional person,” “a traditional mindset,” “trying on the shoes,” and “those shoes.” Avoid repeating “I like” and “physically.” Add a specific reason why visiting a physical shop gives you more confidence, such as checking the size, comfort, or quality.

示例: No, I haven’t bought shoes online because I’m quite traditional. I prefer going to a physical shop, where I can try them on and check whether they fit properly. This gives me more confidence than choosing a size from a website.

建议: The answer is incomplete, so state an approximate usual amount first. Use “It depends on the brand and purpose” rather than “It depends the brand of it.” Give a clear comparison between expensive sports shoes and ordinary shoes, and avoid repeating numbers or hesitating. For example, mention a typical price range and explain why basketball shoes cost more.

示例: I usually spend around 50 to 60 pounds on a pair of everyday shoes. However, I’m willing to pay about 100 pounds for basketball shoes because they need to provide good support and cushioning. The price mainly depends on the brand and the shoes’ purpose.

建议: State your preference clearly and support it with a logical personal reason. Replace “for designing buying a shoes” with “when I buy shoes,” and avoid making a broad or unclear comparison between men and women. The word “fractions” is incorrect in this context; use “fashion” or “appearance.” Explain that comfortable shoes are more practical for daily use, while still acknowledging that appearance matters.

示例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I wear them for long periods every day. Although I care about their appearance, comfort is more important to me because uncomfortable shoes can cause pain and make walking difficult. I usually choose a simple design that is both practical and reasonably fashionable.

× I like buying shoes, however I not buy shoes every week or every month.

✓ I like buying shoes; however, I do not buy shoes every week or every month.

The negative present simple requires the auxiliary verb do before not. Use do not or don't with I, you, we, and they.

× I like to buy shoes that I just like yearly or every two years because I not'm spending so much money on buying shoes just whenever I buy shoes, I will buy three pairs or five pairs.

✓ I like to buy shoes that I like once a year or every two years because I do not spend much money on shoes. Whenever I buy shoes, I buy three or five pairs.

The phrase not'm is not grammatically possible. For a negative habitual action, use do not spend. The present simple is also appropriate for a repeated action introduced by whenever.

× I would say I am traditional man.

✓ I would say I am a traditional man.

A singular countable noun such as man normally requires an article. Use a before traditional man because this is a general description.

× I have a traditional minds.

✓ I have a traditional mind.

The article a must be followed by a singular countable noun. Therefore, minds must be changed to the singular form mind.

× I like I like going to a physical shop to choose and then physically trying that shoes first and then I have confidence to buy that shoes.

✓ I like going to a physical shop to choose shoes and then try them physically before buying them.

The verb like is unnecessarily repeated, creating an incorrect sentence structure. The sentence is clearer when the coordinated actions use choose and try. The pronoun them avoids repeating the noun shoes.

× I like I like going to a physical shop to choose and then physically trying that shoes first and then I have confidence to buy that shoes.

✓ I like going to a physical shop to choose and then physically try those shoes before buying them.

Shoes is plural, so it cannot be modified by singular that. Use those shoes or the plural pronoun them.

× It depends the brand of it and then the function.

✓ It depends on the brand and its function.

The verb depend is followed by the preposition on. The phrase brand of it is also unnecessarily awkward; use the possessive pronoun its to refer to the shoes.

× I note that basketball shoes is quite expensive.

✓ I note that basketball shoes are quite expensive.

Basketball shoes is a plural subject, so it requires the plural verb are, not the singular verb is.

× I would say its function is very important for designing buying a shoes.

✓ I would say their function is very important when choosing shoes.

Shoes is a plural noun, so it cannot be preceded by the singular article a. Use shoes without an article when speaking generally. The phrase when choosing shoes also provides a grammatically complete structure.

× I would say its function is very important for designing buying a shoes.

✓ I would say their function is very important when choosing shoes.

The pronoun must agree with the plural noun shoes. Use their rather than its when referring to the function of multiple shoes.

× I'm just as a man, I don't think it is a completely different woman.

✓ As a man, I do not think men and women are completely different.

As a man is an introductory phrase and should be followed by a complete clause. The original clause also uses it and a woman incorrectly for a general comparison between men and women.

× Woman would be focused on the fractions and the design.

✓ Women would focus on fashion and design.

When referring to women in general, use the plural noun women rather than the singular form woman. The plural subject also requires a plural meaning in the sentence.

× So for men it would be the function.

✓ So, for men, function would be more important.

The original sentence uses the definite article the without referring to a previously specified function. When discussing function in general, no article is needed.