鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 先直接回答是否喜欢，再说明购买频率。原回答中时态和句子结构混乱，例如“I'm buying shoes”“was broken”“I will buy”需要改为一般现在时或条件句。还可以补充一个具体原因，使答案更自然、完整。注意使用复数 shoes，并避免重复表达。

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I do not buy them very often. I usually buy a new pair once or twice a year, when my old ones are worn out or damaged.

建议: 回答“Yes”后应使用清晰的过去时说明时间和经历。原回答中“bought chosen my phone top of last year”表达不清，应改为“bought a pair of shoes online on my phone at the beginning of last year”。同时注意名词单复数：many choices；避免重复“I can”。可以补充网购鞋子的具体优点，如价格低、款式多。

示例: Yes, I have. I bought a pair of shoes online on my phone at the beginning of last year because they were cheaper than the ones in local shops. There were also many styles to choose from.

建议: 先明确金额和货币单位，再解释原因。原回答中的“shoes is”“the costume quickly”和“the normal is the better”不符合英语表达，可能想表达“鞋子很快会磨损”以及“普通价位更适合我”。应使用“a pair of shoes costs...”和“reasonably priced shoes are better for me”等自然表达，并删除“I think”的重复。

示例: I usually spend about 200 yuan on a pair of shoes. I do not think shoes need to be very expensive because they can wear out quite quickly. For me, reasonably priced shoes are good enough.

建议: 观点表达比较明确，但后半句没有完成，且存在冠词、复数和词汇错误。“a comfortable shoes”应改为“comfortable shoes”，“feeds”应为“feet”，“fashionable shows”应为“fashionable shoes”。建议使用“because”连接理由，并补充舒适鞋对日常工作的具体帮助。

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I walk and work a lot every day. They protect my feet and help me avoid pain. Although fashionable shoes look attractive, comfort is more important to me.

× I'm buying shoes and I when my old shoes was broken I will buy a new one

✓ I buy shoes, and when my old shoes are broken, I will buy new ones.

这里是在描述通常的购买习惯，所以使用一般现在时“I buy”，而不是现在进行时“I'm buying”。一般现在时可以表达经常性行为。

× I'm buying shoes and I when my old shoes was broken I will buy a new one

✓ I buy shoes, and when my old shoes are broken, I will buy new ones.

“shoes”是复数，不能使用单数形式“one”来指代，应改为复数“ones”。“old shoes”也是复数，所以后面应使用“are”，而不是“was”。

× I'm buying shoes and I when my old shoes was broken I will buy a new one

✓ I buy shoes, and when my old shoes are broken, I will buy new ones.

主语“my old shoes”是复数，因此谓语动词应使用“are”，不能使用单数形式“was”。

× Yes I have I bought chosen my phone top of last year because it was cheaper and there are many choice for me I can I can choose many different shoes.

✓ Yes, I have. I bought shoes online at the beginning of last year because they were cheaper, and there were many choices. I could choose from many different shoes.

原句把多个完整句子连接在一起，缺少句号和适当的连接词，并且“I can I can”重复。应拆分句子，使每个句子结构完整、清晰。

× Yes I have I bought chosen my phone top of last year because it was cheaper and there are many choice for me I can I can choose many different shoes.

✓ Yes, I have. I bought shoes online at the beginning of last year because they were cheaper, and there were many choices. I could choose from many different shoes.

“bought chosen”不能连续放在一起使用。这里需要一般过去时“bought”表达过去购买的动作，不需要再加过去分词“chosen”。

× Yes I have I bought chosen my phone top of last year because it was cheaper and there are many choice for me I can I can choose many different shoes.

✓ Yes, I have. I bought shoes online at the beginning of last year because they were cheaper, and there were many choices. I could choose from many different shoes.

“many”后面必须接可数名词复数，因此“many choice”应改为“many choices”。

× Yes I have I bought chosen my phone top of last year because it was cheaper and there are many choice for me I can I can choose many different shoes.

✓ Yes, I have. I bought shoes online at the beginning of last year because they were cheaper, and there were many choices. I could choose from many different shoes.

“shoes”是复数，所以代词应使用“they”，不能使用单数代词“it”。

× Yes I have I bought chosen my phone top of last year because it was cheaper and there are many choice for me I can I can choose many different shoes.

✓ Yes, I have. I bought shoes online at the beginning of last year because they were cheaper, and there were many choices. I could choose from many different shoes.

表达“在年初”时，应使用固定搭配“at the beginning of last year”，不能说“top of last year”。

× about two hundred yen because I think shoes is the costume quickly and I don't need very expensive shoes. I think I think the normal is the better.

✓ About two hundred yen, because I think shoes wear out quickly, and I don't need very expensive shoes. I think normal shoes are better.

“shoes”是复数，后面的谓语应使用复数形式“are”。另外，“normal shoes”表示一类鞋，通常使用复数形式。

× about two hundred yen because I think shoes is the costume quickly and I don't need very expensive shoes. I think I think the normal is the better.

✓ About two hundred yen, because I think shoes wear out quickly, and I don't need very expensive shoes. I think normal shoes are better.

主语“shoes”是复数，因此不能搭配“is”。在“normal shoes are better”中，复数主语“shoes”与“are”保持一致。

× about two hundred yen because I think shoes is the costume quickly and I don't need very expensive shoes. I think I think the normal is the better.

✓ About two hundred yen, because I think shoes wear out quickly, and I don't need very expensive shoes. I think normal shoes are better.

这里是在比较普通鞋和昂贵鞋，不是在表示“最好的”事物，所以应使用比较级“better”，并且说“normal shoes are better”，不能说“the normal is the better”。

× I prefer the comfortable shoes because every day I work a lot and I need a comfortable shoes to protect my feeds and part of the fashion fashionable shows should

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I work a lot every day, and I need comfortable shoes to protect my feet. Fashionable shoes should also be comfortable.

“shoes”是复数名词，不能使用不定冠词“a”。表示一类舒适的鞋时，应说“comfortable shoes”，而不是“a comfortable shoes”。这里也不需要在“comfortable shoes”前使用“the”。

× I prefer the comfortable shoes because every day I work a lot and I need a comfortable shoes to protect my feeds and part of the fashion fashionable shows should

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I work a lot every day, and I need comfortable shoes to protect my feet. Fashionable shoes should also be comfortable.

这里是在泛指舒适的鞋，而不是特定的某几双鞋，所以不应使用定冠词“the”。应直接说“comfortable shoes”。

× I prefer the comfortable shoes because every day I work a lot and I need a comfortable shoes to protect my feeds and part of the fashion fashionable shows should

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I work a lot every day, and I need comfortable shoes to protect my feet. Fashionable shoes should also be comfortable.

“every day”放在句末更自然，表达“我每天工作很多”。“I work a lot every day”比“every day I work a lot”更适合这个回答。

× I prefer the comfortable shoes because every day I work a lot and I need a comfortable shoes to protect my feeds and part of the fashion fashionable shows should

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because I work a lot every day, and I need comfortable shoes to protect my feet. Fashionable shoes should also be comfortable.

原句最后的“part of the fashion fashionable shows should”没有完整的谓语结构，意思没有表达完。补充“should also be comfortable”后，句子才有完整的主语、情态动词和表语。