鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Answer the question directly with a clear topic sentence, then explain how often you buy shoes and why. Use correct plural forms and subject-verb agreement: say “shoes,” “I often buy them,” and “my friends and I.” Avoid repeating “this is because” and use a linking word such as “because” or “also.” The final idea about improving performance is relevant, but it would be more specific if you explained how new running shoes help, such as by providing better support or cushioning.

示例: Yes, I do. I especially like buying running shoes, and I usually buy a new pair about once a month because my friends and I go running almost every day. New shoes give me better support and cushioning, which helps me run more comfortably and perform better.

建议: Give a direct answer and add one or two specific reasons. Use plural and article forms correctly: “bought shoes online,” “online platforms,” and “physical stores.” Avoid using both “because” and “so that’s why” in the same sentence, as this is redundant. You could also mention a practical advantage, such as comparing prices, reading reviews, or having more choices.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. I prefer online platforms because they often offer better discounts and a wider range of styles than physical stores. I can also compare prices and read customer reviews before making a decision.

建议: State the amount clearly and explain whether you consider it affordable. “Five thousand bucks” may sound too informal or unclear in an IELTS answer, so specify the currency if possible. Replace “per each shoe” with “on each pair of shoes” and avoid the unclear phrase “this lunch price”; you may mean “this price range.” Also, say “the best performance” or explain that the shoes offer good quality and support for the price.

示例: I usually spend around 5,000 baht on a pair of running shoes. I think this price range is reasonable because I can get good-quality shoes with enough support and cushioning. They are not the cheapest option, but they are affordable for me and usually last for a long time.

建议: Clearly state your preference and give a complete explanation. Use the plural form “comfortable shoes,” and replace “helped me to comfort” with “make me feel comfortable.” Maintain parallel grammar by saying “when I walk or run,” and avoid ending with the incomplete phrase “for running to.” A specific detail, such as reduced foot pain or better support, would make the answer more effective.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they make walking and running much easier. They provide good support and reduce foot pain, especially when I exercise for a long time. Although fashionable shoes look attractive, comfort is more important to me because I wear my running shoes frequently.

× Yes I do I love to buy shoe especially running shoes I often buy it once a month this is because I and my friends often go running every day. I think new shoes helped me to improve my performance.

✓ Yes, I do. I love buying shoes, especially running shoes. I often buy them once a month because my friends and I go running every day. I think new shoes help me improve my performance.

The original response contains several run-on sentences. Complete thoughts should be separated with full stops, and the reason can be introduced with because instead of starting another incomplete clause with this is because.

× Yes I do I love to buy shoe especially running shoes I often buy it once a month this is because I and my friends often go running every day. I think new shoes helped me to improve my performance.

✓ Yes, I do. I love buying shoes, especially running shoes. I often buy them once a month because my friends and I go running every day. I think new shoes help me improve my performance.

Shoes are countable and plural when referring to footwear in general, so shoe should be shoes. The plural noun shoes also requires the plural pronoun them, not it.

× Yes I do I love to buy shoe especially running shoes I often buy it once a month this is because I and my friends often go running every day. I think new shoes helped me to improve my performance.

✓ Yes, I do. I love buying shoes, especially running shoes. I often buy them once a month because my friends and I go running every day. I think new shoes help me improve my performance.

Use them to refer to the plural noun shoes. In a compound subject, my friends and I is the natural pronoun order; I should normally come after the other person or people.

× Yes I do I love to buy shoe especially running shoes I often buy it once a month this is because I and my friends often go running every day. I think new shoes helped me to improve my performance.

✓ Yes, I do. I love buying shoes, especially running shoes. I often buy them once a month because my friends and I go running every day. I think new shoes help me improve my performance.

The student is describing a general belief about the current effect of new shoes, so the present-tense verb help is needed instead of the past-tense verb helped.

× Yes, I have bought shoe online.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online.

Shoes are generally referred to in the plural when discussing footwear, so shoe should be changed to shoes.

× This is because online platform often offers discount code more than physical shop, so that's why I love to buy shoes or the online platform.

✓ This is because online platforms often offer more discount codes than physical shops, so I prefer buying shoes on online platforms.

The singular countable nouns platform, code, and shop need articles or should be changed to plural nouns when speaking generally. Here, plural nouns are more natural because the student is discussing online platforms and physical shops in general.

× This is because online platform often offers discount code more than physical shop, so that's why I love to buy shoes or the online platform.

✓ This is because online platforms often offer more discount codes than physical shops, so I prefer buying shoes on online platforms.

The correct preposition for purchasing through a website or service is on, as in buy shoes on an online platform. The phrase buy shoes or the online platform uses the wrong relationship between the verb and the platform.

× This is because online platform often offers discount code more than physical shop, so that's why I love to buy shoes or the online platform.

✓ This is because online platforms often offer more discount codes than physical shops, so I prefer buying shoes on online platforms.

Or presents an alternative, but the student is explaining the place where they buy shoes. Use on instead of or, and avoid using both so and that's why because they unnecessarily repeat the same linking function.

× Actually I normally pay around five thousand bucks per each shoe.

✓ Actually, I normally pay around five thousand bucks for each pair of shoes.

For each pair of shoes is the natural prepositional phrase when stating the price of footwear. Per each is not normally used together in this way.

× This is because this lunch price is very good for me.

✓ This is because this low price is very good for me.

Lunch is a noun and does not describe the price in this context. The adjective low correctly describes a price that is not expensive.

× I can receive a best performance and it's not too expensive for me.

✓ I can get the best performance, and it's not too expensive for me.

Best is a superlative adjective, so it normally requires the definite article the, not the indefinite article a. The phrase the best performance is grammatically correct.

× I prefer comfortable shoe.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes.

The student is expressing a general preference, so the plural countable noun shoes is more appropriate than the singular form shoe.

× This is because it helped me to comfort when I walk or running and it helped to improve my performance for running to

✓ This is because comfortable shoes make me feel comfortable when I walk or run, and they help improve my running performance.

The plural noun shoes must be referred to with they, not it. Also, the pronoun should clearly refer to the shoes rather than to an unspecified singular object.

× This is because it helped me to comfort when I walk or running and it helped to improve my performance for running to

✓ This is because comfortable shoes make me feel comfortable when I walk or run, and they help improve my running performance.

The student is describing the current benefits of comfortable shoes, so the present-tense verbs make and help are required instead of the past-tense verb helped.

× This is because it helped me to comfort when I walk or running and it helped to improve my performance for running to

✓ This is because comfortable shoes make me feel comfortable when I walk or run, and they help improve my running performance.

Comfort is usually a noun or verb, but an adjective is needed after feel. The correct expression is make me feel comfortable.

× This is because it helped me to comfort when I walk or running and it helped to improve my performance for running to

✓ This is because comfortable shoes make me feel comfortable when I walk or run, and they help improve my running performance.

The original sentence ends with the incomplete phrase for running to. It also combines walk and running without a parallel structure. Use walk or run and finish the sentence with a complete expression such as running performance.