鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail using linking words. Correct verb forms and avoid redundancy.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes, but I don't do it often. Because my parents taught me to be frugal, I usually keep a pair until it is completely worn out.

建议: Use standard contractions or avoid them, and add a brief reason with a linking word. Improve pronunciation-related wording by using full forms and a clear connector.

示例: No, I haven't bought shoes online. I'm concerned about the quality and because sizes can vary, I prefer to try them on in a shop.

建议: Be specific and use correct currency phrasing; avoid unclear words and awkward phrases. Give a clear topic sentence with a brief explanation using a linking word. Keep to natural vocabulary and fix word choice errors.

示例: I usually spend about two hundred to three hundred dollars on shoes. I prefer sensible, durable pairs because they last longer and represent better value.

建议: Good direct answer—add one specific reason or example with a linking word to enrich the response. Avoid overly simple statements by giving a short supporting detail.

示例: I definitely prefer comfortable shoes because I walk a lot; for example, I choose cushioned sneakers that prevent foot pain during long days.

× So I never buy a pair of new shoes until I worn out.

✓ So I never buy a pair of new shoes until I have worn the old ones out.

The original sentence uses 'worn' (past participle) without an auxiliary, which is incorrect for a perfect action related to the present. Use the present perfect 'have worn' to show the shoes become unusable before buying new ones; also add 'the old ones' for clarity and 'out' after the verb phrase. Suggestions: use 'have worn ... out' for actions completed before now and include the object 'the old ones'.

× No I don't buy shoes online 'cause I'm scared of their quality and the size can vary sometimes.

✓ No, I don't buy shoes online because I'm worried about their quality and sizes can vary sometimes.

Use 'because' instead of informal ''cause' and 'worried' is more natural than 'scared' when referring to concerns. Also 'the size can vary' should be plural 'sizes can vary' to refer to different models or brands. Commas improve punctuation. Suggestions: use 'because' in formal speech, 'worried about' for concerns, and match number with 'sizes'.

× Probably two thousand empty dollars to three thousand empty dollars.

✓ Probably two thousand dollars to three thousand dollars.

The phrase 'empty dollars' is not a correct quantifier in English; simply state the currency amount as 'two thousand dollars to three thousand dollars'. Suggestions: omit extraneous words like 'empty' and use standard currency phrasing.

× I usually don't spend a lot of money on my shoes juice because I think as long as they are durable, it is a good choice for me.

✓ I usually don't spend a lot of money on shoes because I think that as long as they are durable, they are a good choice for me.

'Shoes juice' is incorrect and seems to be a mistranslation; remove 'my' and 'juice' and say 'on shoes'. Add 'that' to introduce the clause smoothly. Change 'it is a good choice' to 'they are a good choice' to agree with plural 'shoes'. Suggestions: refer to items directly ('on shoes'), include 'that' for clarity, and ensure pronoun agreement with plural nouns.

× I don't want my feet to be injured.

✓ I don't want my feet to get injured.

While 'to be injured' is grammatical, 'to get injured' is more natural in spoken English. Use 'get injured' to indicate becoming injured. Suggestions: prefer 'get injured' in conversational responses for naturalness.