鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn, ngắn gọn và mạch lạc. Hãy bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No + frequency), sau đó thêm 1–2 câu chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể (ví dụ: loại giày bạn thích, kênh mua sắm và lý do). Tránh lặp từ và lỗi ngữ pháp, giữ tối đa 4-5 câu. Sử dụng liên từ đơn giản để kết nối ý (for example, because, so).

示例: Yes, I love buying shoes and I shop for them every few weeks. I especially buy white sneakers because they match many outfits. I usually purchase from online platforms like Shopee or Facebook Marketplace because they offer good prices and convenient delivery.

建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và làm rõ nguyên nhân cụ thể khi mua online. Sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, tránh những phần không rõ nghĩa. Đưa ra ví dụ cụ thể về lợi ích (giảm giá, mẫu mã đa dạng, giao hàng tiện lợi) và thứ tự logic bằng liên từ như because hoặc for example.

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I can find discounts that lower the price. For example, I buy when there are seasonal sales and I can compare many styles quickly. I also like online shops because delivery is convenient and returns are usually easy.

建议: Câu trả lời nên đưa con số ước lượng rõ ràng và giải thích ngắn gọn về khoảng giá hoặc loại giày ảnh hưởng đến chi phí. Tránh lỗi từ vựng (ví dụ 'soups','sleepers','high hoe') và dùng từ đúng (slippers, high heels). Giữ câu mạch lạc: nêu con số, sau đó giải thích ngắn vì sao bạn chi nhiều hoặc ít.

示例: I usually spend around $50 to $100 on a pair of shoes, depending on the type. For everyday sneakers I spend about $50, but for formal shoes or high heels I might pay closer to $100 because I want them to be durable and comfortable.

建议: Trả lời trực tiếp nêu sở thích chính, sau đó giải thích với ví dụ cụ thể. Sử dụng liên từ (however, but) để thể hiện sự tương phản. Tránh lặp cấu trúc 'because' nhiều lần; thay vào đó nêu lý do ngắn gọn và rõ ràng trong 1–2 câu phụ.

示例: I usually prefer comfortable shoes for everyday use, especially in bad weather when I need to walk a lot. However, when the weather is nice or I am going out with friends, I choose more fashionable shoes because they make my outfit look more attractive.

× Yes, I am addicted to shoes that I will go out with every single day.

✓ Yes, I am addicted to shoes and I go out in them almost every day.

The original sentence wrongly uses 'will' to indicate habitual action. Use simple present for habits. Also 'go out with' is incorrect collocation; use 'go out in' for wearing shoes. Use 'and' to connect clauses for clarity.

× So I have many white shoes so I buy them a lot mainly from online platforms such as Shoppy, TikTok or Facebook and I think nice to make

✓ I have many white shoes, so I buy them a lot, mainly from online platforms such as Shopee, TikTok, or Facebook, and I think they look nice.

Run-on sentence and missing plural pronoun 'they' for 'shoes'. 'Shoppy' seems misspelled; 'Shopee' is likely intended. 'Think nice to make' is ungrammatical; use 'they look nice' to describe appearance.

× Of course I said earlier I bought them many often because I get some discount to reduce the amount I have to pay for them and I also came out for the new chain and sometimes when I need to suit my clothes through its very best choy.

✓ Of course, as I said earlier, I buy them very often because I get discounts that reduce the amount I have to pay, and I also look for new styles, especially when I need shoes to match my clothes.

Incorrect verb tense and adverb placement: 'bought them many often' should be 'buy them very often' (present habit). 'Get some discount' -> 'get discounts'. Phrase 'came out for the new chain' and 'its very best choy' are unclear; corrected to 'look for new styles' and 'shoes to match my clothes'.

× It's difficult to tell on them because I'd quite a large because I am addicted to many kind of soups from sleepers to the shoes to the high hoe that I go outside with so I need something more expensive and suitable with my suit.

✓ It's difficult to say because I buy a lot; I am addicted to many kinds of shoes, from slippers to high heels, so I sometimes need more expensive shoes that suit my outfits.

Multiple errors: 'I'd quite a large' is ungrammatical—use 'I buy a lot'. 'Many kind of soups' should be 'many kinds of shoes' (singular/plural). 'Sleepers' -> 'slippers'; 'high hoe' -> 'high heels'. 'Suitable with my suit' -> 'suit my outfits' or 'that suit my outfits'.

× It depends on the weather, when it's raining outside, I decide something make me comfortable to go out with, but when the weather is nice, I prefer picking something more charming and attractive because I am an energetic person because I want to stay outside.

✓ It depends on the weather. When it's raining, I choose something that makes me comfortable to go out in, but when the weather is nice, I prefer to pick something more charming and attractive because I am energetic and want to be outside.

Use 'choose' or 'decide on' for selection; 'decide something make me comfortable' is incorrect—use relative clause 'something that makes me comfortable'. Use 'go out in' for wearing shoes. 'Prefer picking' is acceptable, but 'prefer to pick' is clearer. Remove repeated 'because' and correct word order.