鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cải thiện: Tránh bắt đầu bằng cụm từ lặp lại như “Let me think for a second”. Trả lời trực tiếp ngay với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng (ví dụ: Yes, I do/I don’t), sau đó đưa 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất và nơi mua. Dùng liên từ để nối ý và tránh lặp từ. Ví dụ cụ thể: nói rõ tần suất (every month, once in a while) và địa điểm (a shop near my house) để nội dung rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra chú ý phát âm từ riêng (ví dụ: “local”) và cấu trúc câu đơn giản, ngắn gọn, không quá dài.

示例: Yes, I do. I buy shoes occasionally, usually once every two or three months. I often shop with my mother or brother at a small shoe store near my house, which sells comfortable casual styles. When I need something special I prefer to go with them so I can get advice.

建议: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp (Yes/No) rồi giải thích lý do rõ ràng bằng 1–2 câu bổ trợ. Tránh nói vòng vo và sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản (sử dụng quá khứ/hiện tại hoàn thành: "have bought"/"have never bought"). Nên nêu ví dụ cụ thể về vấn đề bạn lo ngại (ví dụ: kích cỡ không chính xác, chất lượng khác so với hình) và đề xuất điều bạn sẽ làm trong tương lai (ví dụ: kiểm tra chính sách đổi trả).

示例: No, I have never bought shoes online because I’m worried that the size won’t fit and the colour may look different from the pictures. If I ever try it, I will check the return policy and read customer reviews first.

建议: Cải thiện: Bắt đầu bằng một câu rõ ràng nêu khoảng giá (ví dụ: I usually spend around $20–$40). Tránh lỗi số và từ không chính xác. Sau đó giải thích lý do chọn mức giá (ví dụ: vì chất lượng, độ bền, thoải mái) và đưa ví dụ cụ thể (kể giá một đôi gần đây). Giữ câu ngắn gọn, tối đa 4–5 câu và dùng từ vựng phù hợp (comfortable, durable, affordable).

示例: I usually spend around $30 to $50 on a pair of shoes because I value comfort and durability. For example, last year I bought a pair of sneakers for $45 and they are still comfortable after many months.

建议: Cải thiện: Trả lời trực tiếp (I prefer...) và giải thích bằng 1–2 câu với tình huống cụ thể (when/where you wear each type). Dùng liên từ (but, however, when) để nối ý. Tránh từ sai (ví dụ: "fashion naval", "composer") và sử dụng từ chính xác như fashionable, comfortable, sneakers. Giữ câu ngắn, rõ ràng và nêu ví dụ cụ thể về hoàn cảnh (with friends, at school, for exercise).

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes for everyday activities, but I also like fashionable shoes for social events. For example, I wear sneakers to school and the gym because they are practical, but I choose stylish shoes when I go out with friends.

× Let me think for a second. Sometimes I like buying shoes and sometimes I go buying so with my mom and with my brother in Elmo near my house in local my house in locals and sometimes I and my mum buy for me I think it's a

✓ Let me think for a second. Sometimes I like buying shoes, and sometimes I go shopping with my mom and my brother at a mall near my house. Sometimes my mum and I buy shoes for me.

The original contains multiple sentence structure problems, word order issues and incorrect word choices (for example 'go buying so', 'Elmo', 'in local my house in locals'). Improve by splitting into clear clauses, using the correct verb phrase 'go shopping', correct preposition 'at a mall', and a clear subject order 'my mum and I'. Keep sentences concise and coherent. Suggestions: replace informal or incorrect phrases with standard expressions, separate ideas into sentences, and maintain consistent subject-verb structure.

× Let me think for a second I have never buy shoes online because they can make notes very good and and I think this size it shows is not good for me and it made the size show made I

✓ Let me think for a second. I have never bought shoes online because the photos can be misleading, and I think the size shown is often not right for me.

The original uses incorrect verb form 'have never buy' instead of present perfect 'have never bought'. Also unclear phrases like 'make notes very good' and repetition 'and and' cause confusion. Use 'photos can be misleading' and 'the size shown' to convey the intended meaning. Ensure correct past participle after 'have never'. Suggestions: use present perfect with past participle for experience (have never bought), choose clearer nouns (photos) and concise clauses.

× When I usually spend about four to two dollars on shoe, I prefer my drinks because they are comfortable and last longer so it was pie in a bit more for example last year I pour a pair of sneakers for fortified dollars and I still

✓ I usually spend about twenty to forty dollars on shoes. I prefer shoes that are comfortable and durable, so I pay a bit more. For example, last year I bought a pair of sneakers for forty-four dollars and I still wear them.

This sentence has number order errors ('four to two dollars'), wrong nouns ('drinks' instead of 'shoes'), incorrect verbs ('pour' instead of 'purchased/bought'), and fragmented structure. Correct by providing realistic number order, correct noun choices, and past tense 'bought' for a completed action. Break into several sentences for clarity. Suggestions: check number order and words, use consistent tense for past actions, and separate ideas.

× Let me tell you this question is very harsh because I prefer fashion naval shoes and composer shoes because I go like with my friend I can wear the fashion snacerable shoe but I go to school I can conform a table suit and go exercise I can weigh

✓ Let me tell you, this question is difficult because I like both fashionable shoes and comfortable shoes. If I go out with my friends I can wear fashionable shoes, but when I go to school or exercise I prefer comfortable shoes.

Multiple issues: unclear adjective forms ('naval', 'composer', 'snacerable'), word choice errors, and run-on sentences. Fix by using correct adjectives 'fashionable' and 'comfortable', clarify contexts ('go out with my friends', 'go to school or exercise'), and use parallel sentence structure. Keep contrasting ideas clear with 'but' and maintain consistent verb forms. Suggestions: use correct adjective forms, avoid unnecessary words, and structure contrasts in separate clauses.