鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct and concise: state your preference in one clear sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use verbs and countable nouns correctly) and avoid vague comparisons.

示例: I don't enjoy buying shoes very much; I usually only buy a new pair once a year. For example, I tend to replace worn-out shoes rather than follow fashion trends, so I only shop when I really need to.

建议: Answer directly, use correct verb forms and link reason with a phrase like 'because' or 'so'. Be specific about concerns (fit, return policy) and keep to 2–3 sentences.

示例: No, I usually avoid buying shoes online because I cannot try them on first. As a result, I'm worried about the fit and the hassle of returning items that don't suit me.

建议: Start with a clear amount or range, then explain why with correct grammar and specific vocabulary (price, quality, affordable). Avoid repetition and unclear numbers; use currency if possible.

示例: I usually spend around 3,000 (local currency) on a good pair of shoes because I prefer higher-quality materials. Therefore I see shoes as an investment rather than a cheap purchase.

建议: Give a clear preference and explain with specific reasons; correct collocations (pursue → prefer, a lot of ears → many hours/days). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer a balance between fashion and comfort because I want shoes that look good but are also wearable all day. For instance, I choose stylish sneakers that provide support for long periods of walking.

× Compared with other people, I think I'm not very enjoyable with buying shoes because I usually buy it per year and not more.

✓ Compared with other people, I think I don't enjoy buying shoes very much because I usually buy them once a year or less.

The student used 'enjoyable' (an adjective) where the adverb/verb form is needed. 'I'm not very enjoyable with buying shoes' is incorrect; we should say 'I don't enjoy buying shoes very much.' 'Buy it per year' has pronoun and frequency errors: 'shoes' is plural so use 'them', and 'once a year' or 'once a year or less' correctly expresses frequency. Suggestion: use the verb 'enjoy' and correct plural pronoun and a natural frequency expression.

× Actually I'm not very believe in online shop because I could not try the shoes on my feet and that is very different of every pair of shoes.

✓ Actually I don't really believe in online shopping because I cannot try the shoes on my feet and every pair of shoes is very different.

'I'm not very believe' mixes a participle with incorrect structure; use 'I don't believe' or 'I don't really believe.' 'Online shop' (noun) should be 'online shopping' (activity) or 'online shops' (places). 'Could not' for present general habit should be 'cannot.' 'Different of' is incorrect preposition; use 'different' or 'different from.' Also ensure subject-verb agreement: 'every pair of shoes is.' Suggestion: use negative auxiliary 'do not' + base verb, 'shopping' for activity, 'cannot' for inability, and 'different from' or rephrase to 'every pair is different.'

× Umm, I think shoes is not very cheap to me because if you want something have a a quite good quality you need to pay a more higher a higher price to eat and usually maybe 3 thousands.

✓ Umm, I think shoes are not very cheap for me because if you want something of quite good quality you need to pay a higher price, usually maybe three thousand.

Use plural verb 'are' with plural noun 'shoes.' 'To me' is better as 'for me.' 'Something have' is incorrect; use 'something of quite good quality.' 'A more higher a higher price to eat' is ungrammatical and contains repetition and wrong word 'eat'; it should be 'a higher price.' Use 'three thousand' rather than digit with 'thousands' and avoid redundant words. Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs, use 'of good quality' construction, and remove repetitions and unrelated words.

× For me, I want to get a balance on both of them because I'm not very pursue one of them and I just need a shoes can let me wear a lot of ears.

✓ For me, I want to strike a balance between the two because I'm not keen to pursue just one of them and I just need shoes that I can wear for many years.

'Get a balance on both of them' is awkward; use 'strike a balance between the two.' 'I'm not very pursue one of them' mixes forms; use 'I'm not keen to pursue just one of them' or 'I don't want to focus on only one.' 'A shoes' mixes article and plural; use 'shoes' without 'a.' 'Can let me wear a lot of ears' is incorrect vocabulary; likely meant 'wear for many years.' Also correct tense and modal usage: use 'can' with relative clause 'shoes that I can wear.' Suggestion: use natural collocations like 'strike a balance,' 'between the two,' 'keen to,' and 'wear for many years.'