鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your response is clear and answers the question directly, but contains minor grammatical errors and an unclear reason (“they tend to get warm out quickly” is awkward). Improve by using a concise topic sentence, correct verb forms, and a clearer reason. Use one linking phrase to add a brief supporting detail. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes and I usually buy a new pair every six months. Because I wear shoes to work daily, they wear out over time, so I replace them regularly to stay comfortable.

建议: Good direct answer, but grammar and vocabulary need correction (e.g., “I remember buying,” “didn't suit me”). Make the story more natural by adding a brief reason and using linking words like “however” or “so”. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

示例: Yes, I have. I remember buying a nice pair from an online store, but when they arrived they didn’t suit me, so I returned them.

建议: The answer gives a clear amount but has grammar and word choice errors (“reasonable rise,” “a good quality shoes,” “beside that”). Improve by using correct expressions (e.g., “a reasonable price,” “good-quality shoes,” “fits my budget”) and add a linking phrase to explain why. Keep it concise and natural.

示例: I usually spend about 1,000,000 Vietnamese Dong on a pair of shoes. I think that is a reasonable price for good-quality shoes and it fits my budget.

建议: You answer the question but there are multiple language errors and unclear phrases (“I refer comfortable shoes,” “stay on my 5th all day without band”). Use correct verbs and clearer nouns, add a linking word like “because,” and provide a specific example of what makes them comfortable. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I commute to work every day and need supportive, easy-to-walk-in pairs. For example, shoes with cushioned insoles and good arch support help me stay on my feet all day without pain.

× Yes, I'm a big fan of shopping, especially shoes. I make it a habit of buying new shoes about every six months because I wear them every day for work and they tend to get warm out quickly.

✓ Yes, I'm a big fan of shopping, especially shoes. I make it a habit to buy new shoes about every six months because I wear them every day for work and they tend to wear out quickly.

The phrase 'make it a habit of buying' is awkward; use the infinitive 'make it a habit to buy'. Also 'get warm out quickly' is incorrect meaning; the intended meaning is 'wear out' (become worn). Use present simple 'wear' for habitual actions and the phrasal verb 'wear out' to describe deterioration.

× Yes I have. Once I remembered I bought a pair of beautiful shoes from a shopping platform but unfortunately when they arrived they didn't suitable me so I had to return them.

✓ Yes, I have. Once I remember buying a pair of beautiful shoes from a shopping platform but unfortunately when they arrived they didn't suit me so I had to return them.

The original mixes tenses and uses incorrect verb form 'suitable' (an adjective) instead of the verb 'suit'. Use simple present 'I remember' or simple past 'I remembered' consistently; here 'I remember buying' is natural when recalling. Use 'suit me' to mean 'fit/are suitable for me.' Also add commas for clarity.

× Well, I usually spend about 1,000,000 Vietnam Dong on a pair of shoes. I think that's a reasonable rise for a good quality shoes. Beside that, it's also suitable for my income.

✓ Well, I usually spend about 1,000,000 Vietnam Dong on a pair of shoes. I think that's a reasonable price for good-quality shoes. Besides that, it's also suitable for my income.

Use 'price' not 'rise'. 'Good quality shoes' should be 'good-quality shoes' or 'good quality' without plural mismatch; 'shoes' already plural so hyphenated adjective preferable. 'Beside that' is incorrect; use 'Besides that' to add information. 'Suitable for my income' is acceptable but 'within my income' or 'affordable for my income' may be clearer.

× Well, I refer comfortable shoes. One reason is that I wear them to commute to work every day, so I need pairs that are supportive and easy to walk in. Comfortable shoes help me stay on my 5th all day without band.

✓ Well, I prefer comfortable shoes. One reason is that I wear them to commute to work every day, so I need pairs that are supportive and easy to walk in. Comfortable shoes help me stay on my feet all day without pain.

'Refer' is incorrect; use 'prefer'. 'Stay on my 5th' and 'without band' are unclear and seem to be wrong words: 'stay on my feet' means remain standing or moving, and 'without pain' or 'without discomfort' conveys the intended meaning. Use consistent pluralization and natural collocations.