鞋子— Part 1 评分报告
对话
Part 1
考官
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
考生
Yes, I really like buying shoes as a girl, I really like some colorful and and beautiful shoes, but I don't often buy them because I, I, I want to choose some like uh, durable shoes refer to fast.
考官
Have you ever bought shoes online?
考生
Yes I have bought my shoes on online which is a shopping application. I think the price is more is cheaper than in a store. Umm beside that in the shopping application we have more choices and with a with a different prices.
考官
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
考生
I usually spend around 300 Vietnam, 300,000 Vietnam because in that price I have some several choices, uh, I mean diverse choices with affordable price. And yeah, that's my, uh, average spend.
考官
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
考生
I wear comfortable shoes because with me, uh, shoes I eat and I, it, it, it helps me to commute every day. So I need to, uh, I need to feel comfortable when I, when I wear it, umm, and I need to, to do exercises also.
评估
总分
Part 1
Do you like buying shoes? How often?
分数: 68.0建议: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ (ví dụ: "I, I, I"), đồng thời nên có câu chủ đề rõ và một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể về tần suất mua sắm và tiêu chí chọn giày. Sử dụng từ nối để liên kết ý (ví dụ: "However", "because") và hạn chế thừa từ hoặc tiếng ừ ờ.
示例: I enjoy buying shoes, especially colorful and attractive styles. However, I don't buy them very often because I prefer to choose durable pairs that last a long time.
Have you ever bought shoes online?
分数: 72.0建议: Cần diễn đạt mạch lạc, dùng cấu trúc ngữ pháp đúng (ví dụ: "online" không cần giới từ "on" khi nói chung) và tránh lặp từ. Nên thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: loại ứng dụng, ví dụ về mức giá hoặc tính năng như đánh giá) và dùng từ nối để tổ chức ý (ví dụ: "also", "for example").
示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online using a shopping app. Prices are usually cheaper than in stores, and the app offers a wider variety and different price ranges; for example, I can compare reviews and find good deals.
How much money do you usually spend on shoes?
分数: 76.0建议: Câu trả lời nên chính xác và gọn hơn: nêu rõ số tiền với đơn vị đúng, giải thích ngắn gọn vì sao (ví dụ: chất lượng/đa dạng). Tránh lặp và tiếng ừ. Có thể bổ sung phép so sánh hoặc ví dụ để cụ thể hóa lý do chọn mức giá đó.
示例: I usually spend around 300,000 Vietnamese dong on a pair of shoes because that price offers a good balance of quality and variety. For example, at that price I can find several comfortable and durable options.
Which do you prefer, fashionable shoes or comfortable shoes?
分数: 70.0建议: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và rõ ràng, loại bỏ tiếng ừ và lặp. Nên nêu lý do cụ thể (ví dụ: đi lại hàng ngày, tập thể dục) và bổ sung một ví dụ để minh họa. Dùng từ nối để làm câu mạch lạc hơn (ví dụ: "because", "for example").
示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I commute every day and often exercise. For example, I usually choose sneakers that provide good support for walking and running.
语法
× Yes I have bought my shoes on online which is a shopping application.
✓ Yes, I have bought my shoes online using a shopping application.
Use 'online' without 'on' and use 'using' to indicate the means; 'on online' is incorrect preposition usage. Suggestion: say 'bought ... online' or 'bought ... on an app.'
× I think the price is more is cheaper than in a store.
✓ I think the price is cheaper than in a store.
Redundant 'more' with 'cheaper' is incorrect. 'Cheaper' is comparative form so do not add 'more'. Suggestion: use 'cheaper than' or 'more affordable than.'
× Umm beside that in the shopping application we have more choices and with a with a different prices.
✓ Besides that, the shopping application offers more choices at different prices.
Use 'besides' not 'beside' for addition; 'with a with a' is repetition; 'different prices' should be introduced with 'at'. Suggestion: 'Besides that, the app offers more choices at different prices.'
× I usually spend around 300 Vietnam, 300,000 Vietnam because in that price I have some several choices, uh, I mean diverse choices with affordable price.
✓ I usually spend around 300,000 Vietnamese dong because at that price I have several choices, I mean diverse choices at an affordable price.
Currency name: 'Vietnamese dong' or 'VND' is correct; 'in that price' should be 'at that price'; 'some several' is incorrect collocation—use 'several' or 'some'; 'affordable price' needs 'an'. Suggestion: 'I usually spend around 300,000 Vietnamese dong; at that price I have several diverse and affordable options.'
× I wear comfortable shoes because with me, uh, shoes I eat and I, it, it, it helps me to commute every day.
✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me commute every day.
Phrase 'with me, shoes I eat' is ungrammatical and likely mis-said; simplify to subject 'they' referring to shoes and verb 'help' + infinitive. Remove repetitions. Suggestion: 'I prefer comfortable shoes because they help me commute every day.'
× So I need to, uh, I need to feel comfortable when I, when I wear it, umm, and I need to, to do exercises also.
✓ So I need to feel comfortable when I wear them, and I also need them for exercising.
Pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'shoes'; use 'them'. Rephrase to show purpose: 'need them for exercising.' Suggestion: 'I need to feel comfortable when I wear them, and I also need them for exercise.'
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