鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: まず、最初の文で文法ミス（"Is I like shoes?"）があります。質問には直接肯定または否定で答え、トピック文の後に具体的な理由を一つか二つに絞って述べましょう。言い淀み（umm, likeの多用）を減らし、季節ごとの例を具体的に示すと良いです。語順や冠詞の使い方にも注意してください。例えば「I like buying shoes because they help me match seasonal outfits.」のように簡潔に始め、続けて頻度（how often）を明確に答えることを忘れないでください。

示例: Yes, I do. I enjoy buying shoes because they help me match outfits for different seasons. For example, I buy ankle boots for autumn and sandals for summer, so I usually buy shoes two or three times a year.

建议: 回答ははっきりしており理由も述べていますが、文が長くなり論理のつながりが弱いです。接続詞を整理して、肯定・否定と理由を明確に分けて話しましょう。また"interested in"と"haven't bought"の矛盾に注意し、将来の可能性を示す表現を加えると自然です。語彙は十分ですが繰り返し（many many）を避けてください。

示例: No, I haven't bought shoes online yet because I'm not confident about my exact size and prefer trying them on. However, I am interested in online shopping because it offers a wider variety and sometimes better prices, so I might try it if there is a reliable size guide.

建议: 繰り返しが多く結論が曖昧になっています。まず金額を明確に答え、次に理由を簡潔に述べましょう。"shoes which cost more than ¥10,000 have many cute or lovely shoes"は論理的に不自然なので避け、なぜ高価な靴を買わないか（予算、優先順位）を具体的に説明すると良いです。発音や文の流れを滑らかにするために不要なためらい語（umm, uh）を減らしてください。

示例: I usually spend less than ¥10,000 on a pair of shoes because I have a limited budget and prioritize saving money. If I need shoes for a special occasion, I might spend more, but generally I stick to affordable options.

建议: 答えは明確ですが説明が不明瞭で文法ミス（"my my show is hard"など）や語順の誤りがあります。理由を具体的にし、快適さが健康や日常生活に与える影響（長時間歩ける、足が痛くならない等）を述べると説得力が増します。接続語（for example, because, so）を適切に使い、文は2〜3文に収めましょう。

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because ill-fitting shoes make my feet sore and uncomfortable. For example, I choose cushioned sneakers for walking long distances so I can be on my feet all day without pain.

× Is I like shoes?

✓ Do I like shoes?

The student used 'Is' which is a form of 'to be' and incorrect here. English yes/no questions with the verb 'like' require the auxiliary 'do' for the first person: 'Do I like...?'. Use subject 'I' with auxiliary 'do'. Suggestion: Form questions with 'do/does' for present simple: 'Do I like...?', 'Do you like...?'

× That's because umm, by buying shoes we can fit the outfits of umm each season like like autumn, autumn outfit or some outfit.

✓ That's because by buying shoes we can match them to outfits for each season, such as autumn outfits.

The sentence has awkward structure and word choice. 'Fit the outfits' is not natural; 'match them to outfits' is better. Repetition 'like like' and 'autumn outfit or some outfit' is redundant. Suggestion: Use clear noun phrases and examples: 'for each season, such as autumn.' Keep word order: reason + explanation.

× So I like buying shoes.

✓ So I like buying shoes.

This sentence is grammatically correct. It uses present simple correctly for the first person. No change needed.

× No, I haven't.

✓ No, I haven't.

The response 'No, I haven't.' is grammatically acceptable as a short answer to 'Have you ever bought shoes online?'. It uses present perfect correctly. No change needed.

× That is because I don't know the exact size of shoes so I want to try it on in the store and but umm, there are many many kinds of shoes on the Internet so I'm interested in buying shoes on the Internet.

✓ That's because I don't know my exact shoe size, so I want to try them on in a store. But there are many kinds of shoes online, so I'm interested in buying shoes on the Internet.

Multiple issues: 'the exact size of shoes' is better as 'my exact shoe size'. 'Try it on' should be 'try them on' referring to shoes (plural). 'and but' is a conjunction error—use one connector. Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use possessive for sizes ('my shoe size') and correct pronoun number ('try them on'). Avoid combining 'and but'.

× Maybe less than ¥10,000, that is because, umm, shoes which cost more than ¥10,000 have many cute or lovely shoes.

✓ Maybe less than ¥10,000, because shoes that cost more than ¥10,000 are often very cute or lovely.

The original repeats 'shoes' redundantly and uses 'which' awkwardly. Use 'that' for people/things in defining clauses and avoid repeating the noun. Suggestion: Use concise relative clauses: 'shoes that cost more than...' and avoid repeating nouns.

× But umm, I don't have enough money to, uh, to spend much money buying shoes and I cannot afford to. Pay a lot of money, so maybe less than ¥10,000.

✓ But I don't have enough money to spend a lot on shoes, so maybe less than ¥10,000.

The sentence is fragmented and repetitive. 'Afford to.' followed by 'Pay a lot of money' is incorrect split. Combine ideas: 'cannot afford to spend a lot.' Remove unnecessary repetition. Suggestion: Use a single concise clause: 'I cannot afford to spend a lot on shoes.'

× I prefer comfortable shoes.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes.

This sentence is grammatically correct: 'prefer' is correctly used with the first person present simple. No change needed.

× That is because if this size of shoes is not is uh, not correct.

✓ That's because if a shoe's size is not correct,

Awkward phrasing and repetition. 'This size of shoes' is unnatural; use 'a shoe's size' or 'the shoe size'. Remove duplicate 'is'. Suggestion: Use clear conditional structure: 'If the shoe size is not correct,...'.

× I my my show is hard so it upset me.

✓ My shoes are tight, so they upset me.

Multiple errors: 'I my my show' is garbled. 'Show' should be 'shoe' and plural 'shoes' with plural pronoun 'they'. 'Is hard' is unnatural; 'are tight' fits shoes causing discomfort. Suggestion: Use correct noun ('shoe' vs 'shoes'), correct possessive ('my shoes') and match pronouns in number ('they').

× Therefore, I like to wearing comfortable shoes.

✓ Therefore, I like wearing comfortable shoes.

After 'like', use either the gerund 'wearing' alone or the infinitive 'to wear', but not both. 'like to wearing' incorrectly combines forms. Suggestion: Use 'I like wearing...' or 'I like to wear...' depending on nuance.