鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then add a brief reason and frequency with linking words. Avoid unnecessary filler (e.g., “to be honest”) and correct singular/plural and preposition use (e.g., “on my phone,” “an online shop”).

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes, and I usually do it once or twice a month. I often browse online on my phone because it’s convenient, and I save interesting pairs to buy later.

建议: Give a clearer, grammatically correct answer with specific details and linking words. State when or how many times, then explain quality and price with reasons. Correct phrases like “on an online shop,” “fits my feet,” and “cheaper than buying in a shop.”

示例: Yes, I have. I’ve bought shoes online about three times in the past year. The fit was generally good, and I found prices to be lower than in physical stores because online retailers often have discounts.

建议: Provide a clear amount range and correct currency phrasing. Start with a direct statement about your typical spending, then add context such as frequency or types of shoes. Replace vague fillers and clarify the currency and units (e.g., “100–200 thousand Vietnamese dong”).

示例: I usually spend between 100,000 and 200,000 Vietnamese dong on a pair of shoes. I tend to buy cheaper casual shoes and only splurge on more expensive ones a few times a year.

建议: Answer directly and use concise, correct sentences. State your preference, give two clear reasons, and use linking words like “because” and “so.” Correct phrases to “when I try them on,” “for a long time,” and avoid redundancy (don’t repeat “comfortable”).

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they don’t hurt my feet when I wear them and I can use them for a long time without discomfort.

× So I really like buying shoes when I have free times and to be honest when I turn on my phones and I usually go to a online shop to scroll and see the shoes that I love.

✓ So I really like buying shoes when I have free time, and to be honest, when I turn on my phone I usually go to an online shop to scroll and see shoes that I like.

Errors: plural count noun and article issues with 'free times' and 'phones' and 'a online shop'; awkward phrasing 'the shoes that I love'. Reasons and suggestions: 'free time' is an uncountable noun, so use singular; 'phone' is countable singular here, not plural; use 'an' before vowel sound 'online'; prefer 'shoes that I like' or 'that I love' without 'the'. Also combine clauses with commas and remove unnecessary words for natural present tense statements. (ID 6)

× Yes I have. I have bought shoes on online shop about three times and it's quite fit to my legs and it is cheaper than bail on a shop.

✓ Yes, I have. I have bought shoes from an online shop about three times; they fit my feet quite well, and they are cheaper than buying them in a shop.

Errors: incorrect preposition/article 'on online shop' should be 'from an online shop'; 'it's quite fit to my legs' is incorrect: use plural 'they' for 'shoes', verb 'fit', and 'feet' not 'legs'; 'bail on a shop' is incorrect phrase — should be 'buying them in a shop'. Suggestions: use correct prepositions, plural pronouns for plural nouns, and idiomatic expressions ('buying in a shop'). (ID 22)

× So I just scroll and see the arrivals, but I don't buy it. So I just spend about 100 and 200 Vietnam ***** to buy shoes.

✓ I usually just scroll to see new arrivals, but I don't buy them. I spend about 100 to 200 Vietnamese dong on shoes.

Errors: verb forms and pronouns: 'scroll and see the arrivals' is awkward — use 'scroll to see new arrivals'; 'don't buy it' should be 'don't buy them' because 'arrivals' is plural; currency expression incorrect — use '100 to 200 Vietnamese dong' or a similar format. Suggestions: use infinitive 'to see' after 'scroll' when expressing purpose, match pronouns to plural nouns, and use standard currency phrasing. (ID 10)

× So I do prefer comfortable shoes because it will make me feel comfortable when I try on it and I can use it for a long period time that with their feelings hurts at my feet.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they make me feel comfortable when I try them on, and I can wear them for a long time without pain in my feet.

Errors: inconsistent pronoun use: 'it' refers to plural 'shoes' and should be 'them'; 'will make' is unnatural — use present 'make' for general preference; 'period time' should be 'a long time'; phrase 'that with their feelings hurts at my feet' is ungrammatical — use 'without pain in my feet'. Suggestions: ensure pronouns agree in number with nouns, use present tense for general truths, and use clear idiomatic expressions for duration and lack of pain. (ID 12)