鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and organize your answer: give a clear topic sentence stating whether you like buying shoes and how often, then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Reduce fillers like “uh” and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "heel lining" or "cushioned heel").

示例: Yes, I enjoy buying shoes; I usually buy new pairs three or four times a year. I focus on comfort because I walk a lot, so I prefer shoes with a cushioned heel and good arch support. Therefore I choose brands known for comfort rather than fashion alone.

建议: Clarify the meaning and use clearer grammar. Start with a direct answer, then explain the process and one detail about how you ensure a correct fit. Avoid vague phrases like “too many times for not to put myself in any trouble.”

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online several times. To avoid mistakes I always provide my foot measurements in centimeters, and I check the seller’s size chart so I usually receive the correct and comfortable size.

建议: Give a clear personal range and explain your strategy. Use correct number formats and linking words. Avoid awkward phrasing like “115 till $200.” Be specific about where you shop and why you choose sales.

示例: I typically spend between $100 and $200 on a durable, comfortable pair of shoes, though I think that can be expensive. Therefore I usually wait for special offers or sales and try to buy good-quality shoes for around $100.

建议: Structure your answer: state your preference, then give two clear reasons and a short example. Fix grammar (e.g., "comfortable shoes are" not "is") and avoid confusing sentences. Use linking words like "however" and "for example" correctly.

示例: I prefer a balance of both, but if I had to choose I would pick comfortable shoes because I am an athlete and need proper support. However, for formal events I sometimes choose fashionable shoes for appearance; for example, I might wear Gucci loafers for a party even though my Nike trainers are more comfortable.

× Yes, I do, uh, three or four times in a year, I believe, Uh.

✓ Yes, I do. I buy shoes three or four times a year, I believe.

The original sentence uses an awkward tense and structure for frequency. Use simple present 'I buy' for habitual actions and omit unnecessary filler words. Place time expression 'three or four times a year' after the verb phrase for natural word order.

× Shoes should be comfortable and have soft heel so it's so important what kind of shoes you will buy.

✓ Shoes should be comfortable and have soft heels, so it's very important which shoes you buy.

Errors: 'soft heel' needs plural 'heels' to match general noun, and 'what kind of shoes you will buy' is unnatural. Use 'which shoes you buy' and simple present 'buy' for general statements. Replace 'so it's so important' with 'so it's very important' for correct adverb use.

× Yes, too many times for not to put myself in any trouble.

✓ Yes, many times; I haven't had any trouble.

The original mixes incorrect structure and tense. 'Too many times for not to put myself in any trouble' is ungrammatical. Use present perfect 'I haven't had' to indicate up-to-now experience and a clear phrase 'many times'.

× I will send the size by centimeters, so by the result they will send the right and 4th comfortable size to me.

✓ I will send the size in centimeters, so they will send the right and comfortable size to me.

Use 'in centimeters' not 'by centimeters'. 'By the result' is incorrect; omit it. 'Right and 4th comfortable size' is unclear—use 'right and comfortable size'. Use simple future or present tense consistently.

× For a durable and comfortable pair of shoes in Amazon you should pay a 115 till $200 and it's I believe it's expensive.

✓ For a durable and comfortable pair of shoes on Amazon you should pay $115 to $200, which I believe is expensive.

Use 'on Amazon' (preposition), correct number format '$115 to $200', and combine clauses correctly: 'which I believe is expensive.' Remove extra 'it's' and fix word order.

× I will buy an special offer and sale about $100.

✓ I will buy a pair on special offer or on sale for about $100.

Use 'a' before consonant sound ('special'), and clarify meaning: 'a pair on special offer' or 'on sale'. Use 'for about $100' for price.

× I prefer both. However as an athlete I believe comfortable shoes is even important on your clothes.

✓ I prefer both. However, as an athlete, I believe comfortable shoes are more important than clothes.

Subject-verb agreement: 'comfortable shoes' plural requires 'are' not 'is'. The original 'important on your clothes' is incorrect comparison; use 'more important than clothes' to express priority.

× But in you couldn't wear sports shoe in for every style.

✓ But you can't wear sports shoes for every style.

Remove extra prepositions 'in' and 'for'. Use contraction 'can't' or 'cannot' for negative, plural 'sports shoes', and correct word order.

× Sometimes you should put over your Nike and wear your Gucci shoe.

✓ Sometimes you should put your Nike shoes on and wear your Gucci shoes.

Use correct verb-preposition combination 'put on' not 'put over'. Use plural 'shoes' consistently and possessive 'your'. Maintain parallel structure 'put on... and wear...'.