鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve grammar and clarity: start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two brief supporting details. Use correct verbs and plural/singular forms, avoid filler words (uh) and incorrect words (cashew → casual). For frequency, give a simple time expression (e.g. once a month).

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes. I usually buy casual and sports shoes, such as sneakers and running shoes, because they are comfortable and make me look youthful. I buy new shoes about once every two months.

建议: Work on verb forms and sentence structure: use correct verb patterns (tend to shop), include linking words to make reason clear (because, so), and provide a specific example or frequency. Avoid missing articles and awkward word order.

示例: Yes, I have. I usually shop for shoes online because there are many discount coupons, so prices are lower than in physical stores. For example, I bought a pair of running shoes online last month at a 30% discount.

建议: Give a direct, specific answer with clear currency and correct grammar. Use a topic sentence stating the typical amount, then a brief reason or example. If the number is large, clarify the currency (e.g. dollars, rupees) and use simple quantifiers (about, around).

示例: I usually spend about $50 to $80 on a pair of shoes, depending on the brand. I try not to spend too much unless the shoes are high quality or on sale.

建议: Answer directly and give a concise reason with one specific supporting detail. Use correct plural forms and avoid repetition of the same adjective. Add a short example or contrast to strengthen the answer.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because they are easier to walk in and better for my feet. For instance, I choose cushioned sneakers over high heels for everyday wear because they reduce pain and fatigue.

× Not lonely, I usually buying standard shoe uh, for example sneaker, running shoe and cashew.

✓ Not lonely, I usually buy standard shoes, for example sneakers, running shoes, and casual shoes.

The student used incorrect pronouns and singular/plural forms. 'Not lonely' is likely incorrect word choice; if meaning 'Not only' use that instead. 'I usually buying' is ungrammatical; use base verb 'buy' after 'usually'. 'Standard shoe' should be plural 'shoes' because it refers generally; specific types also need plural forms: 'sneakers, running shoes, and casual shoes'. Also 'cashew' is the wrong word; 'casual' was intended. Suggestion: use 'Not only' if contrasting, and use 'I usually buy' + plural nouns for general statements.

× I usually buying standard shoe uh, for example sneaker, running shoe and cashew.

✓ I usually buy standard shoes, for example sneakers, running shoes, and casual shoes.

Using the -ing form after 'usually' is incorrect here. Adverbs of frequency like 'usually' are followed by the base form for simple present: 'I usually buy'. Replace 'buying' with 'buy' and correct plural nouns. Practice: 'I usually buy...' followed by plural items for general habits.

× for example sneaker, running shoe and cashew.

✓ for example sneakers, running shoes, and casual shoes.

Nouns referring to types of shoes as general categories should be plural. Also 'cashew' is a wrong word; the correct adjective is 'casual'. Use plural forms when speaking generally: 'sneakers, running shoes, and casual shoes.'

× Yes I have, I tend to shopping online because it a lot of coupons for discount the price is cheaper than by in the shop.

✓ Yes, I have. I tend to shop online because there are a lot of coupons and the price is cheaper than buying in the shop.

Several tense and structure errors: 'I tend to shopping' should be 'I tend to shop' (verb after 'to'). 'It a lot of coupons' should be 'there are a lot of coupons' (existential 'there be' and plural agreement). 'for discount' is awkward; use 'and' or 'for discounts'. 'cheaper than by in the shop' should be 'cheaper than buying in the shop.' Use simple present for habits and correct verb forms.

× it a lot of coupons for discount the price is cheaper than by in the shop.

✓ there are a lot of coupons for discounts, and the price is cheaper than buying in the shop.

The sentence lacks the existential 'there' and the verb 'are' to indicate existence: 'there are a lot of coupons.' Also 'for discount' should be 'for discounts' or 'many discounts.' Combine clauses with 'and' and use 'buying' for the comparison.

× Well, I quite not spend more spend money more on show. I think it's about 11000 for shoe it's very.

✓ Well, I don't spend much more money on shoes. I think it's about 11,000 for a pair of shoes.

The student mixed tense and incorrect word order. 'I quite not spend more spend money more on show' is ungrammatical; for habitual present negative use 'I don't spend much more money on shoes.' Use 'shoes' plural and add 'a pair of shoes' when giving a price. '11000' should be formatted and 'it's very' is incomplete; remove or complete ('it's very expensive').

× I think it's about 11000 for shoe it's very.

✓ I think it's about 11,000 for a pair of shoes; it's very expensive.

The sentence is missing the article 'a' before 'pair of shoes' and lacks a complete adjective at the end. Use 'a pair of shoes' to indicate one purchase and add 'expensive' to complete the idea. Also format numbers with commas for clarity.

× I prefer comfortable shoe because it's very comfortable and easy to walk and you.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they're very comfortable and easy to walk in.

Use plural 'shoes' for general preference. Also pronoun and verb agreement: 'they're' matches plural 'shoes'. The phrase 'easy to walk and you' is incorrect; use 'easy to walk in.' Remove the extra 'you'.

× I prefer comfortable shoe because it's very comfortable and easy to walk and you.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes because they're very comfortable and easy to walk in.

Subject-verb agreement: singular verb 'it's' does not agree with plural noun 'shoes'. Use plural pronoun 'they're' to agree with 'shoes'. Also correct the prepositional phrase 'walk in.'