鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Cevap net bir konu cümlesi içeriyor fakat dilbilgisi hataları, tekrarlar ve akıcılık eksikliği var. Cümleleri daha kısa ve düzenli yap; gereksiz tekrarları çıkar; zaman ve kelime seçimine dikkat et. Bağlaçlarla iki fikir arasında düzgün geçiş yap (ör. “for example”, “when”). Ayrıca “too much shoes” yerine “too many shoes” gibi doğru ifade kullanımı önemli.

示例: Yes, I like buying shoes and I have many different pairs. For example, I wear trainers for the gym, but I prefer heels when I want to look chic. Therefore I often buy shoes for specific occasions.

建议: Cevap kısa ve kafa karışıklığı olan ifadeler içeriyor (ör. “prefer to both shoes online”). Tek bir net cümleyle başlayıp nedenini bir bağlaçla açıklayın. Gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın ve basit, doğru yapıya odaklanın.

示例: Yes, I usually buy shoes online because it is more convenient and there is a wider selection. Also, I can compare prices and read reviews before I buy.

建议: Cevap belirsiz ve dilbilgisi yanlışları içeriyor. Miktarı tam hesaplayamıyorsanız örnek ortalama aralık verin ve neden değiştiğini açıklayın. Doğru prepozisyon ve fiil yapıları kullanın (ör. “depends on what I’m buying”).

示例: I can't give an exact amount because it depends on the type of shoes. Usually I spend between $30 and $100: cheaper trainers for daily use and more for formal or branded shoes.

建议: Duygu ve neden belirtilmiş ancak ifade hatalı ve biraz kaba görünüyor. ‘Obsessed’ yerine daha uygun bir ifade kullanın ve nedeninizi bağlaçla açıklayın. Cümleleri sadeleştirip bir destekleyici örnek ekleyin.

示例: I prefer fashionable shoes because I care about my appearance and like to make a good impression. For example, I often choose stylish shoes for social events, although I sometimes pick comfortable ones for long walks.

× For example, if I go to the gym, I would like to traini training shoes as if I go somewhere to be chic, I would like to get there with my heels so I have too much shoes.

✓ For example, if I go to the gym, I would like to wear training shoes; if I go somewhere to be chic, I would like to arrive in my heels, so I have too many shoes.

The sentence had incorrect use of verb + -ing and some word forms. 'Traini' is a misspelling; the correct verb collocation is 'wear training shoes' (verb + -ing is not needed after 'like to'). Use 'arrive in my heels' rather than 'get there with my heels.' 'Too much shoes' is incorrect: 'much' with countable nouns should be 'many.' Suggestion: use 'wear' after 'would like to,' correct spelling, and use 'many' for countable plural nouns.

× Mostly I prefer to both shoes online because it's it's a way that's more easier.

✓ Mostly I prefer to buy shoes online because it is an easier way.

The sentence misused 'prefer to both' and had modal/infinitive structure errors. 'Prefer to buy' is the correct infinitive form. 'It's it's' is redundant and should be a single 'it is.' 'More easier' is a comparative error (see explanation for quantifiers/adjectives) — 'easier' alone is correct. Suggestion: use 'prefer to' + base verb, remove repetition, and use the correct comparative adjective.

× Actually I can't calculate how much it's cost because it depends to do what I'm taking.

✓ Actually I can't calculate how much it costs because it depends on what I am doing.

Several tense and verb form issues: use present simple 'it costs' for habitual facts, not 'it's cost.' 'Depends' should be followed by the preposition 'on' (depends on). The gerund/verb phrase 'what I'm doing' correctly expresses the activity. Suggestion: use 'how much it costs' and 'depends on what I am doing.'

× I like the fashionable shoes because I obsessed with looking good and I'm checking for the persons how their shoes looking and that's my obsession.

✓ I like fashionable shoes because I am obsessed with looking good and I check how other people's shoes look; it's my obsession.

Multiple issues: 'the fashionable shoes' is unnecessary definite article — use 'fashionable shoes' in general. 'I obsessed' is missing the auxiliary 'am' for the adjective 'obsessed.' 'I'm checking for the persons how their shoes looking' is ungrammatical: use 'I check how other people's shoes look.' Possessive form needed ('other people's') and correct verb form 'look.' Suggestion: include the correct auxiliary 'am,' remove unnecessary articles, and use correct word order and possessive forms.