鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response clearer and more grammatical. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Correct tense and word forms (e.g., 'since I came to Australia in 2022' and 'I am not a fashionista'). Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences).

示例: I don't really enjoy buying shoes. Since I moved to Australia in 2022, I walk a lot, so I tend to buy sneakers for comfort; usually about three or four pairs a year.

建议: Give a clearer, coherent account with correct grammar and logical sequencing. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No), then explain briefly what happened using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Use past simple or present perfect correctly and avoid redundant phrases.

示例: Yes, I have bought shoes online. I first tried them in a local store, but they didn't have my size, so I ordered the same pair from another shop online and had them shipped to me.

建议: Answer with a clear estimate and explain your reason using linking words. Use correct expressions for price (e.g., 'around' or 'about $200 per pair') and clearer cause-and-effect language ('because' or 'so'). Avoid vague fillers.

示例: I usually spend about $200 per pair. I think that's quite expensive, but I prefer higher-quality shoes because they are more comfortable and cause less pain.

建议: Start with a direct statement, then give a concise, specific reason with linking words. Use correct verb forms and time expressions (e.g., 'since I moved to Australia' and 'they make me' -> 'they make my feet hurt'). Keep it within a few sentences.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes. Since I moved to Australia, I walk and work a lot, so fashionable shoes make my feet hurt and I can't wear them for more than an hour.

× No I don't, I'm not like fashionista girl but after I came to Australia scene 2022 here make me walk a lot so I buy a lot of sneakers, shoe like 3 or 4 pairs a year.

✓ No, I don't. I'm not a fashionista, but after I came to Australia in 2022, I have to walk a lot here so I buy a lot of sneakers, about three or four pairs a year.

Problems: incorrect or missing articles ('a fashionista'), incorrect pronoun/subject structure ('here make me walk' should be 'I have to walk a lot here'), missing preposition and year placement ('in 2022'), singular/plural and number formatting ('shoe' -> 'sneakers', '3 or 4' -> 'three or four'). Suggestion: use the article 'a' before countable singular nouns, place time expressions with appropriate prepositions, keep subject consistent, and write numbers in words in speech context. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Yes I have bought shoes always one time because I go to the store and already try them and that store don't have the side that fit to me so I bought from another store and they send me from another.

✓ Yes, I have bought shoes online once because I went to the store and tried them, but that store didn't have the size that fit me, so I bought from another store and they sent them to me.

Problems: tense inconsistency ('have bought' with past narrative should be 'have bought... once' or use past 'I bought'), incorrect adverb placement ('always one time' is wrong), incorrect verb forms ('go' -> 'went', 'already try' -> 'tried'), subject-verb agreement ('store don't' -> 'store didn't'), wrong noun ('side' -> 'size'), pronoun and object errors ('fit to me' -> 'fit me', 'they send me from another' -> 'they sent them to me'). Suggestion: use past simple for finished past events, correct noun 'size', ensure subject-verb agreement and proper pronouns. Grammar problem type ID:12

× Is a raw $200 per shoes? I found that like quite expensive shoe is more high quality and make me less painful.

✓ Is it around $200 per pair of shoes? I find that more expensive shoes are higher quality and cause me less pain.

Problems: missing dummy subject ('Is it around'), wrong word 'raw' -> 'around', incorrect use of 'per shoes' -> 'per pair of shoes', tense/information consistency ('I found' -> 'I find' for general opinion), article and agreement ('expensive shoe is more high quality' -> 'more expensive shoes are higher quality'), adjective form ('more high quality' -> 'higher quality'), verb choice ('make me less painful' -> 'cause me less pain'). Suggestion: use 'around' for approximate amounts, 'pair of shoes' for pricing, use comparative adjective forms and correct verbs for sensations. Grammar problem type ID:22

× I prefer comfortable shoes. After I came to Australia and I have to walk and work a lot, I never bought fashionable shoes anymore because it's make me really painful and I cannot wear more than one hour.

✓ I prefer comfortable shoes. After I came to Australia and had to walk and work a lot, I stopped buying fashionable shoes because they make me very uncomfortable and I cannot wear them for more than an hour.

Problems: tense consistency ('have to' vs past 'came' — use 'had to'), incorrect past action phrasing ('never bought ... anymore' -> 'stopped buying'), third person singular/subject-verb agreement ('it's make' -> 'they make'), wrong adjective/phrase for pain ('really painful' -> 'very uncomfortable'), missing object 'them' after 'wear', time expression ('more than one hour' -> 'more than an hour'). Suggestion: keep past events consistent with past tense, use correct subject-verb agreement for plural 'shoes', use 'stop buying' for cessation, and choose appropriate adjectives for discomfort. Grammar problem type ID:2