鞋子— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more direct and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (umm) and self-corrections, and correct grammar (e.g. brand name and plural forms). Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' smoothly. Aim for 2–3 sentences under the 5-sentence limit.

示例: I buy shoes quite often because I go skateboarding a lot. I usually wear a specific brand of skate shoes which wear out quickly from constant use, so I replace them every few months.

建议: Give a concise direct answer and add one clear reason with a linking word. Fix grammar (singular/plural, brand name spelling) and avoid repetition. Provide a specific detail about when or how often to enrich the answer.

示例: Yes, I often buy shoes online because I stick to a few specific brands and I already know my size in them. For example, I usually order from the brand's official website once every few months.

建议: State the amount clearly then explain the reason with specific details and correct grammar. Avoid hypothetical or unclear phrasing. Use linking words like 'because' and give a time frame or example to support the amount.

示例: I usually spend between $100 and $200 on a pair of skate shoes because they wear out quickly from heavy use. For instance, I might replace a pair every three to six months, so I try not to buy very expensive styles.

建议: Answer directly and then give a specific reason. Use correct grammar and clearer phrasing for health issues (e.g. 'I bruise easily' or 'I often get blisters'). Avoid fillers and awkward constructions. One or two supporting details are enough.

示例: I prefer comfortable shoes because I bruise and get blisters easily when my shoes are tight. For that reason I choose cushioned, supportive sneakers rather than fashionable but stiff shoes.

× I don't know if I like buying shoes, but I often buy them because when I skateboarding I umm, use a lot of sketch shoes 'cause it they is, they always break it really quick.

✓ I don't know if I like buying shoes, but I often buy them because when I go skateboarding I use a lot of skate shoes because they always wear out really quickly.

The phrase 'when I skateboarding' is incorrect because the verb 'skateboard' needs an auxiliary verb 'go' to form 'go skateboarding' or use the gerund with a proper structure. 'Sketch shoes' is likely a misspelling of 'skate shoes'. 'they is' is a subject-verb agreement error and should be 'they' + plural verb. 'break it really quick' is informal and inaccurate; use 'wear out' and the adverb 'quickly'. Suggestion: use 'go skateboarding', correct the noun to 'skate shoes', ensure subject-verb agreement, and use 'wear out quickly' for clarity.

× Yeah, in terms of sketches, I always buy it online because I only, I only buy specific brands, so I know my size and how they fit.

✓ Yes, I always buy them online because I only buy specific brands, so I know my size and how they fit.

The original uses 'sketches' (likely 'skate shoes') and mixes singular pronoun 'it' with plural noun. Use 'them' to refer to shoes (plural). Also 'in terms of' is unnecessary. Suggestion: replace with 'Yes, I always buy them online' and keep plural agreement between noun and pronoun.

× I think just only $100 to $200 'cause I never really buy any shoes for daily use, just for skateboarding, so I wouldn't wanna spend much money to them.

✓ I think just $100 to $200 because I never really buy shoes for daily use, just for skateboarding, so I wouldn't want to spend much money on them.

'Just only' is redundant; use one quantifier. Currency range should be presented without extra markers. 'wanna' is informal; use 'want to'. Preposition after 'spend money' is 'on', not 'to'. 'any shoes' is acceptable but 'shoes' without 'any' is clearer. Suggestion: use 'just $100 to $200', replace 'wanna' with 'want to', and use 'on them'.

× If it could, it could worn out really quick.

✓ They could wear out really quickly.

The original has incorrect modal + passive structure: 'could worn' mixes modal 'could' with past participle without appropriate auxiliary. Use active 'could wear out' or passive 'could be worn out'. Also pronoun 'it' should be 'they' referring to shoes. Use 'quickly' as the adverb. Suggestion: use 'They could wear out really quickly' or 'They could be worn out very quickly'.

× I think I'd like more comfortable shoes 'cause I easily get bruised which affect me to umm, get struggled with walking a lot.

✓ I think I'd prefer more comfortable shoes because I easily get bruised, which makes it difficult for me to walk a lot.

Replace 'like more' with 'prefer' for natural phrasing. 'which affect me to get struggled with walking' is ungrammatical: relative clause needs a verb that fits; use 'which makes it difficult for me to walk a lot' or 'which affects my walking'. 'get struggled' is incorrect; 'struggle' is intransitive here. Suggestion: use 'which makes it difficult for me to walk a lot' or 'which causes me to struggle when walking'.