图书馆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I'd copy then online" and "I get the quietness." To improve, try to use clear and natural expressions, avoid redundancy, and organise your ideas logically. For example, start with a direct answer, then explain why you enjoy going to the library, using linking words to connect your ideas.

示例: Yes, I often go to the library because I enjoy reading books there. Moreover, the quiet environment helps me concentrate and protects my eyesight compared to reading on screens. Therefore, I find visiting the library very relaxing and beneficial.

建议: Your answer lacks clarity and contains incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like "I read at least" and "just keeping on focused ********." To improve, provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details, using linking words to make your answer coherent. Avoid incomplete thoughts and ensure your sentences are grammatically correct.

示例: In the library, I usually read novels and sometimes I manage to finish a whole book in one visit. Additionally, I like to write in my diary there because the quiet atmosphere helps me stay focused.

建议: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I grew in a setting of a community" and "Our parents would always like buy for us the books." To improve, use correct grammar and more natural expressions. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Unfortunately, I did not go to the library as a child because I grew up in a community without easy access to libraries. Instead, my parents often bought books for us, and we would read and share them at home.

建议: Your answer is somewhat vague and contains repetitive and unclear phrases like "in China generally as a country, it has more exposure" and "they can they have access." To improve, try to give a more confident and structured answer, using linking words and specific examples to support your opinion.

示例: I'm not entirely sure, but I believe that many Chinese children do visit libraries. For example, in Chinese schools, students often have access to libraries, as I have seen in some movies and documentaries. Therefore, I think libraries are quite common among Chinese kids.

× Yes, I frequently go to the Rivalry.

✓ Yes, I frequently go to the library.

The word 'Rivalry' is incorrect here; the correct noun is 'library'. This is a vocabulary error rather than a grammar problem, but it affects the meaning and clarity of the sentence.

× I'd copy then online because, you know, trying to keep my eyesight.

✓ I'd copy them online because, you know, I'm trying to keep my eyesight.

The pronoun 'then' is incorrect; it should be 'them' to refer to the books. Also, the phrase 'trying to keep my eyesight' needs a subject and auxiliary verb to be grammatically correct, so 'I'm trying' is appropriate.

× And there's also this peaceful, I get the quietness in the library and I really enjoy going to the library.

✓ And there's also this peacefulness; I get the quietness in the library and I really enjoy going to the library.

The word 'peaceful' is an adjective and does not fit here; the noun 'peacefulness' is needed to correctly express the idea.

× I usually read novels in the library and I read at least.

✓ I usually read novels in the library and I read at least one.

The phrase 'I read at least' is incomplete and requires an object or quantifier to specify what is being read at least once.

× Maybe if I have a go I can finish a whole one novel and sometimes I can just sit there and be writing my diary and just keeping on focused ********.

✓ Maybe if I have a go, I can finish a whole novel, and sometimes I can just sit there and write in my diary and just keep focused.

The phrase 'a whole one novel' is incorrect; it should be 'a whole novel'. Also, 'be writing' and 'just keeping on focused' are awkward and incorrect; the simple present forms 'write' and 'keep focused' are more appropriate here.

× When I was growing up, I grew in a setting of a community, so we didn't have a lot of exposure to libraries, so just read at home.

✓ When I was growing up, I grew up in a community setting, so we didn't have a lot of exposure to libraries, so we just read at home.

The phrase 'grew in a setting of a community' is awkward; 'grew up in a community setting' is the correct expression. Also, the sentence lacks the subject 'we' before 'just read at home'.

× Our parents would always like buy for us the books and then we read and share the books.

✓ Our parents would always buy books for us, and then we read and shared the books.

The phrase 'like buy for us the books' is incorrect; it should be 'would always buy books for us'. Also, 'share' should be in past tense 'shared' to maintain consistency.

× So I didn't really experience the library when I was growing up.

✓ So I didn't really experience libraries when I was growing up.

Using 'the library' implies a specific library, but here it is more appropriate to use the plural 'libraries' to indicate the general concept.

× I'm not really sure, but I believe that in China generally as a country, it has more exposure.

✓ I'm not really sure, but I believe that generally, as a country, China has more exposure.

The phrase 'in China generally as a country' is awkward; reordering to 'generally, as a country, China' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× And from the movies that I've been watching, like the Chinese movie, I see that in the school they can they have access to the library.

✓ And from the movies that I've been watching, like Chinese movies, I see that in schools they have access to libraries.

'The Chinese movie' should be plural 'Chinese movies' to match the context. Also, 'in the school' should be 'in schools' for generalisation, and 'the library' should be 'libraries'.