唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答的核心意思比较清楚：你喜欢唱歌，因为唱歌能让你开心、减轻压力。但有多处基础语法和用词错误，例如“a passionate”应改为“passionate”，“seeing”应为“singing”，“a long day study”应改为“a long day of studying”，“decrease”应与主语“singing”搭配为“decreases”。最后一句不完整，应明确说明你通常跟着什么音乐唱。建议使用“观点 + 原因 + 具体习惯”的结构，并控制在2—3句。

示例: Yes, I’m passionate about singing because it makes me happy and helps me reduce stress after a long day of studying. I often sing along to my favorite songs when I’m relaxing at home.

建议: 你直接回答了问题，也提供了学习经历，但“a musical classes”应改为“music classes”或“a music class”，“in that classes”应改为“in those classes”。“learnt to sing along and some bass”表达不自然，应该说明你学到了哪些技能，例如基本发声、音准或基础理论。建议用过去时保持一致，并避免把“sing along”和“learn how to sing”混为一谈。

示例: Yes, but only a little. When I was in high school, I took a music class once a week. I learned some basic vocal techniques, including breathing, pitch, and singing in tune.

建议: 回答对象明确，也给出了原因，但“show my sanctuaries”用词错误；这里应表达“表达我的感谢”，可以说“show my gratitude”或“express my appreciation”。“whenever I face difficulties”应根据过去经历改为“whenever I faced difficulties”，句末的“and”造成句子不完整。建议先直接回答，再具体说明父母如何支持你。

示例: I’d like to sing for my parents to show my gratitude. They have always supported and encouraged me whenever I faced difficulties. I think they would feel proud and happy if I performed a song for them.

建议: 你回答直接，并使用了例子来支持观点，这是较好的基本结构。但“singing can expression happiness”应改为“singing can express happiness”或“singing can bring happiness”。“dance to the songs”可以改为更自然的“dance along to the music”。还可以补充唱歌为什么能带来快乐，例如帮助人们放松、增进友谊。

示例: Yes, definitely. Singing can help people express their emotions and relax. For example, when my friends and I are in a good mood, we often sing together and dance along to the music, which brings us closer.

建议: 你使用了“It depends”和“However”来进行对比，逻辑比较清楚，内容也直接。不过“if others are good at singing”可以改为更自然的“if they can sing well”，“listen to their songs”可改为“listen to them sing”。“singing like a broken record”通常表示重复播放同样内容，不适合描述唱歌难听；可以使用“singing off-key”或“out of tune”。建议用更委婉的表达，避免听起来过于直接。

示例: It depends. If someone sings well, I really enjoy listening to them. However, if they sing badly or are frequently out of tune, I may find it difficult to listen for a long time.

建议: 你回答了有参加过课程，但时态不一致：“When I was...”后面应使用过去时“took”，而不是“take”。“in high school and junior high school”可以改为“in junior high and high school”，“basic musical theory”更自然的说法是“basic music theory”。最后一句“how to”不完整，应补充具体技能，例如“how to control my breathing”或“how to sing in tune”。

示例: Yes, I have. I took singing classes once a week when I was in junior high and high school. I learned some basic music theory and how to control my breathing and sing in tune.

× I'm a passionate about seeing because seeing makes me happy after a long day study and really decrease my stress. I often sing to the music which I played on my.

✓ I'm passionate about singing because singing makes me happy after a long day of studying and really decreases my stress. I often sing to the music that I play on my phone.

“Passionate”是形容词，前面不能使用不定冠词“a”，所以应改为“I'm passionate”。“about”后面要接动名词，因此“seeing”应改为“singing”。

× I'm a passionate about seeing because seeing makes me happy after a long day study and really decrease my stress. I often sing to the music which I played on my.

✓ I'm passionate about singing because singing makes me happy after a long day of studying and really decreases my stress. I often sing to the music that I play on my phone.

表示“学习了一整天之后”时，应使用“a long day of studying”，不能说“a long day study”。“of”用于连接“day”和具体活动。

× I'm a passionate about seeing because seeing makes me happy after a long day study and really decrease my stress. I often sing to the music which I played on my.

✓ I'm passionate about singing because singing makes me happy after a long day of studying and really decreases my stress. I often sing to the music that I play on my phone.

主语“singing”是一个动名词短语，表示单数概念，所以谓语动词要用第三人称单数形式“decreases”，不能用“decrease”。

× I'm a passionate about seeing because seeing makes me happy after a long day study and really decrease my stress. I often sing to the music which I played on my.

✓ I'm passionate about singing because singing makes me happy after a long day of studying and really decreases my stress. I often sing to the music that I play on my phone.

“I often sing”表示经常性的习惯，因此从句也应使用一般现在时“play”，而不是过去式“played”。

× I'm a passionate about seeing because seeing makes me happy after a long day study and really decrease my stress. I often sing to the music which I played on my.

✓ I'm passionate about singing because singing makes me happy after a long day of studying and really decreases my stress. I often sing to the music that I play on my phone.

“on my”后面缺少名词，句子没有完整表达意思。应补充“phone”，组成“play on my phone”。

× Yes, but just a little. When I was in high school I took a musical classes about once per week and in that classes I learnt to sing along and some bass.

✓ Yes, but just a little. When I was in high school, I took a music class about once a week, and in those classes I learned to sing along and play some bass.

“a”后面必须接单数名词，所以“a musical classes”应改为“a music class”。“Those”指代复数的“classes”，因此不能使用单数形式“that”。

× Yes, but just a little. When I was in high school I took a musical classes about once per week and in that classes I learnt to sing along and some bass.

✓ Yes, but just a little. When I was in high school, I took a music class about once a week, and in those classes I learned to sing along and play some bass.

“sing along and some bass”结构不平行。“sing”是动词，而“some bass”是名词，不能直接并列。应改为“sing along and play some bass”，让两个动作保持平行。

× I want to sing for my parents to show my sanctuaries because they really helped me a lot in my life by supporting me and encouraging me whenever I face difficulties and.

✓ I want to sing for my parents to show my sanctuaries because they really helped me a lot in my life by supporting me and encouraging me whenever I face difficulties.

句子末尾多了并列连词“and”，后面却没有连接新的内容，因此句子结构不完整。删除最后的“and”即可。

× Yes, of course singing can expression happiness. For example, when I feel happy, I often sing together with my friends and even dance to the songs.

✓ Yes, of course, singing can express happiness. For example, when I feel happy, I often sing together with my friends and even dance to the songs.

情态动词“can”后面必须接动词原形，所以应使用“express”，不能使用名词“expression”。

× It depends. If others are good at singing, I will be happy to listen to their songs. However, if they are not good at singing and singing like a broken record, I don't like it.

✓ It depends. If others are good at singing, I will be happy to listen to their songs. However, if they are not good at singing or sing like a broken record, I don't like it.

这里是在列举两种不喜欢的情况：“不擅长唱歌”或“唱得像坏掉的唱片”，所以应使用表示选择关系的“or”，不能使用“and”。同时使用“sing”可以和前面的“are”形成正确的条件句结构。

× Yes, of course. When I was in high school and junior high school, I usually take a singing class about once per week. I learnt some basic musical theory and how to.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was in high school and junior high school, I usually took a singing class about once a week. I learned some basic music theory and how to sing.

句子使用“When I was...”描述过去的经历，因此“take”应使用过去式“took”。一般过去时用于讲述已经结束的高中和初中经历。

× Yes, of course. When I was in high school and junior high school, I usually take a singing class about once per week. I learnt some basic musical theory and how to.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was in high school and junior high school, I usually took a singing class about once a week. I learned some basic music theory and how to sing.

“how to”后面缺少动词，意思没有完成。应补充动词原形“sing”，构成“how to sing”。