唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Speak more clearly and directly answer the question with a topic sentence. Use correct grammar (e.g., “singing,” “my voice doesn’t sound perfect,” “I feel nervous”) and keep it concise (1–3 sentences). Add a brief reason using a linking word like “because.”

示例: No, I don't enjoy singing because I'm self-conscious about my voice. For example, I often feel nervous before singing because I think my voice doesn't sound very good.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you learned singing. Use simple, correct phrasing to describe where and how you learned (e.g., “in school music classes”) and one specific detail about what you learned. Use linking words like “for example” or “such as.”

示例: Yes, I have learned some singing in school music classes. For example, my teacher taught us breathing exercises and basic vocal techniques to improve pitch and tone.

建议: Give a clear topic sentence naming the person and a concise reason with correct vocabulary (“gratitude,” “care”) and grammar. Use a linking word like “because” and one specific example of what you would sing or when.

示例: I would like to sing for my mother because she takes great care of me. For example, I might sing a happy song on her birthday to show my gratitude.

建议: Answer directly and give two clear, specific reasons using linking words (“because,” “and”). Use correct vocabulary (“lift their mood,” “reduce stress”) and avoid vague or incorrect words.

示例: Yes, I think singing can make people happier because it lifts their mood and helps reduce stress. For example, singing along to a cheerful song can quickly improve someone’s emotions.

建议: Respond with a clear topic sentence and give one or two specific reasons. Use appropriate vocabulary (“inspired,” “nostalgia,” “enjoy the atmosphere”) and linking words (“because,” “also”). Keep it concise and natural.

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing because it often inspires me and evokes nostalgia for songs I know. I also like the atmosphere at live performances.

建议: Give a clear yes/no topic sentence and specify when and what you learned. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words like “for example” and one specific detail about a skill you learned.

示例: Yes, I took singing lessons in elementary and junior high school as part of music class. For example, the teacher taught us simple vocal warm-ups and how to sing in tune.

× No, I don't like seeing because I'm afraid of my voice didn't listen to very perfect or even I always will feel nervous about before singing because I not I'm not willing to let others think that my voice terrible.

✓ No, I don't like singing because I'm afraid my voice doesn't sound very good and I always feel nervous before singing since I'm not willing to let others think my voice is terrible.

Errors: incorrect verb 'seeing' instead of 'singing' (word choice), incorrect clause 'didn't listen to very perfect' and wrong tense/mood, double negation and misplaced words. Use present simple to state general likes/dislikes and feelings: 'I don't like singing', 'I'm afraid my voice doesn't sound very good', 'I always feel nervous before singing', and 'I'm not willing to let others think my voice is terrible.' Suggestions: replace 'seeing' with 'singing', use 'doesn't sound' for present evaluation, use 'feel' not 'will feel' for habitual emotion, and include 'is' before 'terrible'.

× Yes, I have learned how to think for the courses that I take, for instance, the music class in schools and the teacher will help us how to sing more perfect and I learn no skills and promote my techniques.

✓ Yes, I have learned some things in the courses I took, for instance music classes at school, and the teacher helped us learn how to sing better, so I learned some skills and improved my technique.

Errors: incorrect use of 'learned how to think', wrong tense consistency and awkward phrases. Use present perfect 'have learned' only if experience is recent or relevant; here mixing 'have learned' and 'take'. Better: 'have learned some things in the courses I took' or use past 'I took'. Keep tense consistency: 'the teacher helped us', 'learned some skills', 'improved my technique'. Suggestions: use 'learned how to sing better' and 'improved my technique'.

× I would say it's my mother because she always take care of me and prepare a lot of things well to me, so I want to express my denseness to her.

✓ I would say my mother, because she always takes care of me and prepares many things for me, so I want to express my gratitude to her.

Errors: subject-verb agreement 'she always take' should be 'takes' (third person singular), wrong preposition 'to me' should be 'for me', incorrect noun 'denseness' used instead of 'gratitude'. Suggestions: use 'takes' and 'prepares', replace 'denseness' with 'gratitude' and 'express my gratitude to her'.

× Yes, this can let people to have a great emotions, also can let them stink up or even decrease their stress. So I think it's a helpful way.

✓ Yes, singing can give people great emotions, uplift them, and even reduce their stress. So I think it's a helpful activity.

Errors: unnecessary 'this' and 'to' after 'let', article mismatch 'a great emotions' (singular article with plural noun), wrong verb 'stink up' (incorrect word), verb choice and form. Use 'give' or 'bring' with 'great emotions', 'uplift' or 'cheer up' for positive effect, and 'reduce their stress'. Suggestions: replace awkward phrases with 'give people great emotions', 'uplift them', 'reduce their stress', and use 'activity' or 'way' consistently.

× Yes, I like to listen to other singing. This can let me feel very interesting and have some renaissance about the songs. Oh. Also can enjoy the atmosphere during that time.

✓ Yes, I like listening to others sing. It makes me feel very interested and brings back memories of the songs. I also enjoy the atmosphere at that time.

Errors: 'to listen to other singing' should be 'listening to others sing' or 'listening to other people sing' (gerund structure and plural). 'Feel very interesting' should be 'feel very interested' (adjective/adverb misuse). 'Have some renaissance' is incorrect word choice; 'bring back memories' conveys intended meaning. Sentence fragments: 'Also can enjoy...' needs subject 'I'. Suggestions: use 'listening to others sing', 'feel interested', 'bring back memories', and include subject in sentences.

× Yes, I have taken a single class, for instance, uh, in elementary school or even junior high school, the music class that teacher will hope students can sing a song. So I learn some skills wrong, that kind of thing in class.

✓ Yes, I took a single class, for instance in elementary or junior high school, where the music teacher wanted students to sing a song. So I learned some skills there, including some that I learned incorrectly.

Errors: inconsistent tense 'have taken' then mixing present 'will hope' and 'learn'. Use simple past 'took' and 'wanted' for past events. 'The teacher will hope students can sing' should be 'the teacher wanted students to sing'. 'I learn some skills wrong' should be 'I learned some skills incorrectly'. Suggestions: maintain past tense for completed schooling experiences and use correct adverb 'incorrectly'.