唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Make the response more grammatical, concise and add a clear topic sentence followed by one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct verb forms and articles.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and confident. For example, my family and friends often praise my voice, which encourages me to practise more. Because of their support, I sing regularly at family gatherings.

建议: Use correct tense and make sentences clearer. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one specific reason or brief example. Avoid vague claims like 'genetic' without brief clarification.

示例: No, I have never had formal singing lessons. However, both my parents are singers, so I grew up around music and picked up techniques by listening to them.

建议: Be concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Provide a clear reason and a brief example or situation where you would sing for them.

示例: I would like to sing for my family because they are very supportive and boost my confidence. For instance, I hope to perform a song at our next family reunion to thank them for their encouragement.

建议: Clarify and simplify the idea, use proper vocabulary and linking words. Explain how singing affects emotions with a specific example rather than unclear phrases like 'feel the relics of the songs.'

示例: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because it expresses emotions and connects listeners to the singer. For example, a cheerful song can lift someone's mood during a difficult day.

建议: This answer is clear but can be improved by adding a specific reason or example of what you admire in their singing. Use one linking phrase for coherence.

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially my mother, who is my first idol. I admire her clear tone and emotional delivery when she performs ballads.

建议: Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating earlier claims. Give a concise structure: direct answer, brief detail about school band experience, and one specific thing you learned.

示例: No, I haven't taken formal singing classes, but I am in my school band where we receive vocal coaching. For example, my teacher helped us learn breath control and harmonizing techniques.

× I enjoy singing because I always been told that I have a very great voice.

✓ I enjoy singing because I have always been told that I have a very good voice.

This sentence omits the auxiliary 'have' for the present perfect tense. Use 'have always been told' to indicate an action that has happened repeatedly up to now. Also 'very great' is unnatural; use 'very good' or 'great.' Suggestion: use 'I have always been told' and prefer 'very good' or 'great.'

× It's make me feel so, so good.

✓ It makes me feel so, so good.

The subject 'It' requires the third-person singular verb form 'makes.' Use 'makes' not 'make.'

× When I heard my friends, my family told me that I was so good at singing.

✓ When my friends and family heard me, they told me that I was very good at singing.

The original word order is confusing and the verbs need clearer subjects. Use past tense consistently: 'heard me' and 'they told me.' Also 'so good' is informal; 'very good' is clearer. Ensure correct subject placement.

× So that's why I keep singing.

✓ So that's why I keep singing.

This sentence is acceptable; 'keep singing' correctly expresses continued action. No change needed. Explanation: 'keep' + verb-ing correctly indicates ongoing habit.

× I never learn how to sing.

✓ I have never learned how to sing.

Use present perfect 'have never learned' to express that up to now the action has not happened. Also use past participle 'learned' (or 'learnt') with 'have.'

× My mom and my father are a singer.

✓ My mom and my father are singers.

When referring to two people with the same role, use the plural noun 'singers.' 'Are a singer' mixes plural subject with singular complement.

× I think it's genetic that I have a great voice.

✓ I think it's genetic that I have a great voice.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable. 'It's genetic that' is informal but understandable. No correction needed.

× I want to sing for my family.

✓ I want to sing for my family.

This sentence is correct: 'want to' + base verb is proper. No change needed.

× They all love my voice and I love my voice.

✓ They all love my voice, and I love singing for them.

Repetition 'I love my voice' is awkward. Revise for naturalness: 'I love singing for them.' Also add comma and conjunction for correct sentence linking.

× They make me confident.

✓ They make me feel confident.

Use the verb phrase 'make someone feel confident' to describe causing an emotion. 'Make me confident' is understandable but 'make me feel confident' is more natural.

× I would like to sing for them one day.

✓ I would like to sing for them one day.

This sentence is correct and appropriately expresses a future desire using 'would like.' No change needed.

× I think singing can bring people happiness 'cause when we sing we need to bring our emotion to sing for everyone to feel the relics of the songs.

✓ I think singing can bring people happiness because when we sing we need to express our emotions so everyone can feel the meaning of the songs.

Several issues: use 'because' instead of informal ''cause.' 'Bring our emotion to sing' is ungrammatical — use 'express our emotions.' 'Relics of the songs' is incorrect word choice; likely meant 'meaning' or 'feelings.' Rephrase for clarity and correct grammar.

× Yes I do, especially my mom.

✓ Yes, I do, especially my mom.

Add a comma after 'Yes' for natural writing. Otherwise sentence is fine and uses present tense appropriately.

× She is a great singer and she is my first idol.

✓ She is a great singer and she is my first idol.

Sentence is grammatically correct; third-person singular 'is' is used properly. No change needed.

× I never take a singing class, but I'm in a band, I'm in the school band and they teach us how to sing properly.

✓ I have never taken a singing class, but I'm in the school band and they teach us how to sing properly.

Use present perfect 'have never taken' to indicate up to now the speaker has not taken a class. 'I'm in a band, I'm in the school band' is repetitive; simplify to 'I'm in the school band.'

× And I also think it's genetic for my family that I have a great voice.

✓ And I also think it's genetic in my family that I have a great voice.

Use 'genetic in my family' or 'runs in my family' for natural phrasing. 'Genetic for my family' is not standard. Suggest 'I think singing runs in my family.'