唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct small errors. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it helps me express my emotions. For example, when I sing along to meaningful lyrics I feel less stressed and more connected to the message, which makes me feel relieved and happier.

建议: Organize into a clear topic sentence and supporting detail. Mention specific skills learned and use a linking word to show contrast if needed. Correct grammar (e.g., 'learned' or 'learnt').

示例: Yes, I took weekly singing lessons from seventh to ninth grade. During those three years we learned basic techniques like breath control and pitch matching; although my voice didn’t improve dramatically, I enjoyed learning with my classmates.

建议: Avoid overly negative language and reduce repetition. Give a brief, natural answer and, if possible, add a positive or humorous remark. Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and be concise.

示例: I usually prefer not to sing for others because I’m self-conscious about my pitch. However, I would sing for close friends as a joke, since we often laugh about imperfect performances.

建议: Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific example and use linking words. Remove fillers like 'Umm' and avoid repeating the same idea.

示例: Yes, singing can make people happy, particularly group singing like choruses or karaoke. For instance, singing a cheerful song with friends can boost everyone’s mood and create a sense of unity.

建议: Provide a clearer, complete supporting detail and avoid vague endings. Mention a specific memory and explain why live singing appealed to you, using linking words.

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially live. When I lived in Korea in 2024 I attended several concerts and I loved how live performances conveyed strong emotions through voice and stage presence.

建议: Be concise and correct vocabulary mistakes (e.g., 'songs' not 'showers') and grammar. Use a linking word to add one specific detail about the skills learned.

示例: Yes, I took weekly one-hour singing classes from seventh to ninth grade. We practiced different songs and learned basic skills such as breathing techniques and pitch control, which helped my musical understanding.

× One of the main reasons I like sing singing is to let out the emotions and in my opinion you can feel the message of the song better if you follow the lyrics and let it out and so it's not trapped inside yourself.

✓ One of the main reasons I like singing is to let out emotions, and in my opinion you can feel the message of the song better if you follow the lyrics and let it out so it is not trapped inside you.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the gerund 'singing' (Grammar Problem Type 8). 'Sing' was duplicated and incorrect. Use 'let out emotions' (no article) and 'it is' instead of the contraction 'it's' when clarifying; 'yourself' is better as 'you' in this context. Suggestion: use gerunds after verbs of preference and keep pronouns consistent.

× Yes, when I started with 7th grade we had weekly singing lessons as a class.

✓ Yes, when I started seventh grade we had weekly singing lessons as a class.

Use the correct past-time expression and form: 'started seventh grade' is the standard phrasing in English (Grammar Problem Type 5). 'With 7th grade' is incorrect preposition/structure. Suggestion: say 'when I started seventh grade' or 'in seventh grade'.

× The singing lessons were for three years and we learned some basic skills.

✓ The singing lessons lasted three years, and we learned some basic skills.

'Were for three years' is understandable but non-idiomatic; use 'lasted three years' to describe duration in past tense (Grammar Problem Type 5). Keep past simple for completed actions. Suggestion: use 'lasted' or 'continued for'.

× However, my singing did not improve, but it was still cool to experience that as a class.

✓ However, my singing did not improve, but it was still cool to have that experience as a class.

Verb tense/modal structure is acceptable but 'to experience that as a class' is awkward; use 'to have that experience' for noun phrase clarity (Grammar Problem Type 6). Suggestion: rephrase to make the object of 'cool' clear.

× Honestly, I don't want to sing to anyone because I don't want the listener to get any ear pain because of my singing.

✓ Honestly, I don't want to sing for anyone because I don't want listeners to have ear pain because of my singing.

Use 'sing for' rather than 'sing to' in this context and plural 'listeners' is more natural (Grammar Problem Type 12). Also 'get any ear pain' is awkward; use 'have ear pain'. Suggestion: prefer 'sing for' and pluralize general groups.

× One of the main reasons is that my singing is bad and it's not meant to be heard by anyone and in addition, the sounds that come from my mouth doesn't sound how the song should be.

✓ One of the main reasons is that my singing is bad and it is not meant to be heard by anyone. In addition, the sounds that come from my mouth do not sound like the way the song should sound.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'the sounds ... doesn't' should be 'do not' because 'sounds' is plural (Grammar Problem Type 27). Also replace 'sound how the song should be' with 'sound like the way the song should sound' for grammatical clarity. Suggestion: match verb number to subject and use 'sound like' for comparisons.

× Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to other people, especially if you sing together as a group and it's a catchy and happy song in my opinion.

✓ Yes, I think singing can bring happiness to other people, especially if you sing together as a group and the song is catchy and cheerful in my opinion.

Awkward coordination and word order: 'it's a catchy and happy song' is acceptable but better to say 'the song is catchy and cheerful' for clarity (Grammar Problem Type 16). Suggestion: keep adjective order natural and avoid extra 'it is' clauses.

× Umm if you sing the lyrics out loud, you feel the emotions and the happiness.

✓ If you sing the lyrics out loud, you feel the emotions and the happiness.

Remove filler 'Umm' and ensure the conditional clause is followed by the main clause; sentence otherwise fine but filler interrupts fluency (Grammar Problem Type 26). Suggestion: avoid fillers in formal responses.

× Yes, I really like hearing other people sing.

✓ Yes, I really like hearing other people sing.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed. Note: keep present tense to express current preference (Grammar Problem Type 26).

× When I lived in Korea in 2024, I attended many concerts and I kind of grew fond of it and the experience of hearing people sing live because the emotions are.

✓ When I lived in Korea in 2024, I attended many concerts and I grew fond of the experience of hearing people sing live because of the emotions.

Problems: 'kind of grew fond of it and the experience' is redundant and awkward; remove 'kind of' for clarity. Use 'fond of the experience' and 'because of the emotions' to show cause (Grammar Problem Type 11). Also avoid sentence fragment 'because the emotions are.' Suggestion: simplify and complete the causal clause.

× I had weekly singing classes between 7th and 9th grade.

✓ I had weekly singing classes between seventh and ninth grade.

Use consistent written form for grade numbers: spell out 'seventh' and 'ninth' (Grammar Problem Type 5). Tense is correct.

× Usually the classes were one hour long and me and my peers we sang different showers and learned basic singing skills and information about singing.

✓ Usually the classes were one hour long, and my peers and I sang different songs and learned basic singing skills and information about singing.

Pronoun order and case: use 'my peers and I' instead of 'me and my peers we' (Grammar Problem Type 12). 'Showers' is a mistake for 'songs'. Also remove redundant subject 'we'. Suggestion: use correct subject order and nouns.

× One of the main reasons I like sing singing is to let out the emotions and in my opinion you can feel the message of the song better if you follow the lyrics and let it out and so it's not trapped inside yourself.

✓ One of the main reasons I like singing is to let out emotions, and in my opinion you can feel the message of the song better if you follow the lyrics and let it out so it is not trapped inside you.

Also note repetitive phrasing and awkward use of 'the emotions' and 'yourself'; prefer 'emotions' and 'you' for natural phrasing (Grammar Problem Type 13). Suggestion: avoid repetition and use natural pronouns.