唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more natural and accurate: correct vocabulary, reduce hesitations, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with linking words. Aim for 2–3 concise sentences and specific reasons (e.g. emotional comfort, social connection).

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing because it makes me feel happy and relaxed. For example, when I sing a popular song I connect with the lyrics and it helps me forget stress.

建议: Use clear verbs and specific details. Start with a direct answer, then add one or two concrete details (when, who taught you, what you learned). Avoid unclear words and filler. Keep sentences short and coherent with linking words.

示例: Yes. When I was in elementary school my music teacher taught me basic singing techniques, and I joined a school choir where I learned harmony and stage presence.

建议: Good clear idea but refine wording and reduce repetition. Begin with a topic sentence, then add a specific reason using linking words. Replace fillers with precise vocabulary (e.g. ‘to relax’, ‘comfort myself’).

示例: I usually sing for myself rather than for anyone specific because it helps me relax after a busy day and lift my mood.

建议: Answer directly, then give a clear example with details and linking words. Correct vocabulary and grammar (singing, happier → more happiness). Explain how singing helped in your example (e.g. residents smiled, joined in).

示例: Yes, I believe singing brings happiness because it creates a lively atmosphere. For example, during nursing school we led a singing activity at a nursing home and many residents smiled and sang along, which lifted everyone’s spirits.

建议: Be concise and correct pronouns and tense. Start with a direct answer, then give a specific supporting detail (who, what kind of songs, why you enjoy it). Remove hesitation and repetitions.

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to others sing, especially my mother because she knows many Taiwanese popular songs and her singing feels comforting and nostalgic.

建议: Provide a clearer timeline and specific skills you learned. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid vague phrases. Keep it to two sentences: direct answer and specific supporting detail.

示例: Yes, I took singing lessons in elementary school as part of music class. The teacher taught us breathing techniques, pitch control, and how to sing with expression.

× I like seeing because it made me feel happy.

✓ I like singing because it makes me feel happy.

The student used 'seeing' incorrectly; the correct gerund for the activity is 'singing' (verb + -ing). Also the clause uses mixed tenses: 'made' (past) conflicts with general preference, so use present simple 'makes' to express a habitual feeling. Suggestion: use the correct gerund and keep present tense for general statements.

× When I sing a popular song, I uh, feel umm, enjoyable, uh, with the lyrics and reason, so I feel happy.

✓ When I sing a popular song, I feel happy because of the lyrics and the meaning.

'Feel enjoyable' is incorrect; 'enjoyable' is an adjective that describes things, not the person's feeling. Use 'feel happy' or 'enjoy' followed by an object. 'Reason' is unclear; 'meaning' or 'message' fits better. Suggestion: use 'feel' + adjective (feel happy) or 'enjoy' + noun, and replace vague words with precise nouns.

× Yes, when I was a child in elementary school, my teacher taught me how to send a show and I joined a group that is saying goop.

✓ Yes, when I was a child in elementary school, my teacher taught me how to perform in a show and I joined a singing group.

'Send a show' is incorrect collocation; the correct verb is 'perform' or 'take part in' a show. 'Is saying goop' is unintelligible; likely intended 'singing group'. Use past tense consistently for past events ('taught', 'joined'). Suggestion: choose correct verbs and nouns for intended activities and keep past tense for past experiences.

× Actually, I don't have a specific person I want to sing for him or her.

✓ Actually, I don't have a specific person I want to sing for.

The phrase 'for him or her' is redundant and incorrectly placed after 'for'. In English, 'sing for' can be followed by an object ('someone'), but when saying 'I don't have a specific person', the verb phrase 'to sing for' should not repeat pronouns. Suggestion: omit redundant pronouns and use concise phrasing.

× I sing a song just for myself. I just want to, uh, comfort myself in my daily life and busy life.

✓ I sing songs just for myself. I just want to comfort myself in my busy daily life.

'I sing a song just for myself' is grammatical but plural 'songs' sounds more natural for a habit. 'Daily life and busy life' is repetitive; combine as 'busy daily life'. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations and avoid repetition.

× I just want to get relax.

✓ I just want to relax.

'Get relax' is incorrect because 'relax' is a verb and does not require 'get' in this context. Use 'get relaxed' (passive/adjective) or simply 'relax'. Suggestion: use 'relax' for the action: 'I want to relax.'

× Of course, I believe seeing can make the atmosphere more happier.

✓ Of course, I believe singing can make the atmosphere happier.

'Seeing' should be 'singing' (wrong verb form). 'More happier' is a double comparative; use either 'more happy' or 'happier' (prefer 'happier'). Suggestion: use correct activity word and avoid double comparatives.

× Uh, for example, when I started nursing school, uh, we needed to go to a nursing home to uh, uh, to hold an activity for old people.

✓ For example, when I started nursing school, we had to go to a nursing home to hold an activity for elderly people.

'Needed to' is acceptable but 'had to' is more natural. 'Old people' is less polite; use 'elderly people' or 'residents'. Keep past tense 'started' and 'had to'. Suggestion: use appropriate polite nouns and natural past-tense verbs.

× Definitely of course I'd like to umm, listen to my mom sing a song and she knows a lot of Taiwanese popular songs and in her free time he lo and she she like to sing a song for.

✓ Definitely. Of course I'd like to listen to my mom sing. She knows many Taiwanese popular songs, and in her free time she likes to sing.

The original has mixed and incorrect pronouns ('he lo', duplicate 'she she') and awkward phrasing. Use 'she' consistently for the mother, 'many' instead of 'a lot of' is fine, and simplify 'like to sing a song for' to 'likes to sing'. Suggestion: remove filler words, fix pronoun errors, and use clear concise clauses.

× Yes, of course. When I was in elementary school, we often had a musical lessons and the teacher taught us how to sing a song and I learned a lot of techniques.

✓ Yes, of course. When I was in elementary school, we often had musical lessons, and the teacher taught us how to sing songs and I learned a lot of techniques.

'A musical lessons' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' or make singular. 'Sing a song' is okay but plural 'sing songs' matches 'lessons' and repeated activities. Suggestion: ensure article matches noun number and keep plural/singular consistent.