唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be clearer and more natural: start with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid confusing phrases and irrelevant words.

示例: Yes, I enjoy singing, especially at home. For example, I often sing in the shower because the acoustics make my voice sound better, so I can practice pitch and breathing. This helps me improve my technique.

建议: Answer directly, use correct verb forms, and give a clear reason. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about what you want to learn.

示例: No, I haven't had formal singing lessons, but I'm interested in taking them because I want to develop my vocal technique. For example, I hope to learn breathing control and pitch so I can perform confidently and cheer people up like my favourite singers.

建议: Be concise and correct: state who you want to sing for or with, and give specific supporting details. Fix grammar and clarify the band/fame reference.

示例: I would like to sing with my sister because our voices blend well. We even perform together in a local band, which has become quite popular in our town, so singing with her feels natural and enjoyable.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and a concise, specific example with correct vocabulary. Avoid awkward phrases like "expensive memory"; use "special" or "memorable".

示例: Yes, I believe singing can make people happy. For example, once I sang to a girl who was crying and after a few songs she started smiling and felt much better; that was a very memorable moment for me.

建议: Be specific about what you learn from singers and use correct vocabulary (e.g., phrasing, breath control, pitch). Keep answers concise and coherent with linking words.

示例: Yes, I enjoy listening to other singers, especially Ariana Grande and Billie Eilish. Their vocal control and phrasing are excellent, and I learn about breath control and pitch by studying their performances.

建议: Respond directly and correct grammar. Explain why you want to take classes and give one or two specific goals. Keep it under five sentences and use linking words.

示例: No, I haven't taken a singing class yet, but I would like to. I hope lessons will improve my breathing, pitch accuracy, and stage confidence, which would help me perform better.

× I always sing especially in my house.

✓ I always sing, especially at home.

Incorrect preposition and phrasing: 'in my house' is grammatical but 'at home' is more natural for habitual actions; this is labelled as present tense/usage issue and preposition choice. Use 'at home' for general location and add a comma before the adverbial phrase.

× For example when I taking a bath I usually sing because the boys period very well and I can hear my own voice.

✓ For example, when I am taking a bath I usually sing because the bathroom has good acoustics and I can hear my own voice.

Missing auxiliary verb for present continuous: 'when I taking a bath' should be 'when I am taking a bath'. Also 'the boys period very well' is unclear; replace with 'the bathroom has good acoustics' to convey meaning. Ensure comma after 'for example'.

× Actually I've never learned to how to sing, but I'm interested in it because I want to include my singing skill.

✓ Actually I've never learned how to sing, but I'm interested in it because I want to develop my singing skills.

Incorrect word order 'to how to sing' should be 'how to sing'. 'Include my singing skill' is awkward; use 'develop my singing skills'. This is a verb form and word choice issue.

× Umm, since the good grades singers cheer everyone up, so I want to be like them and I want my singing.

✓ Since good singers lift everyone's spirits, I want to be like them and improve my singing.

Redundant conjunctions 'since' and 'so' used together and incorrect phrase 'good grades singers'. Also 'I want my singing' is incomplete. Remove redundancy and fix noun phrase to 'good singers' and complete the idea with 'improve my singing'.

× I want to sing with my sister because she her thing is very good at me and her voice matches me when I when we sing and also we have the band so it is famous in my country.

✓ I want to sing with my sister because she is very good and her voice matches mine when we sing; we also have a band that is well known in my country.

Multiple errors: 'she her thing is very good at me' is ungrammatical—use 'she is very good' or 'she is better than me'. 'Her voice matches me' should be 'matches mine'. 'When I when we sing' has duplication. Article and word choice: 'the band so it is famous' -> 'a band that is well known'. This addresses pronoun and sentence structure errors.

× In my experience I try to cheer up some girl who was crying when she heard my singing she began to rapping and look so happy.

✓ In my experience I tried to cheer up a girl who was crying; when she heard my singing she began to smile and looked very happy.

Tense inconsistency: 'I try' should be past 'I tried' to match the rest of the past context. 'Some girl' -> 'a girl'. 'She began to rapping' should be 'she began to rap' or 'she started rapping' but here 'smile' fits better. 'Look so happy' -> 'looked very happy' for past tense agreement.

× It was very expensive memory for me.

✓ It was a very special memory for me.

Wrong adjective: 'expensive' refers to cost; use 'special', 'precious', or 'memorable'. This is an adjective choice error.

× Yes, I do because it uh, especially I would like to listen to the famous singer such as Ariana Grande or Billie Eilish because their songs is very good practice for me and I can learn from their things such as beverage or the pitch.

✓ Yes, I do. I especially like to listen to famous singers such as Ariana Grande or Billie Eilish because their songs are good practice for me and I can learn from their techniques such as breathing and pitch.

Subject-verb agreement: 'their songs is' -> 'their songs are'. Awkward phrasing 'their things such as beverage' should be 'their techniques such as breathing'. 'Famous singer' should be plural 'famous singers' when giving examples. Also split into clearer sentences.

× And I've never taken a singing class and as I said, I've never learned how to sing, but I'm interested in to run it because it's lead, it's my leads improving my singing skills.

✓ I've never taken a singing class, and as I said, I've never learned how to sing, but I'm interested in taking one because it will help improve my singing skills.

Incorrect infinitive phrase 'interested in to run it' should be 'interested in taking one'. 'It's lead, it's my leads improving' is incorrect; use 'it will help improve my singing skills'. Use future 'will' for intended benefit. This fixes verb forms and infinitive usage.

× It will be very good estate for me.

✓ It will be very good experience for me.

Wrong noun 'estate' used instead of 'experience'. Also 'a very good experience' is more natural with the indefinite article. This is an article and word choice error.