唱歌— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two brief reasons using linking words. Correct verb forms and reduce hesitation words.

示例: No, I don't really like singing. I think my voice sounds poor, and I often feel shy when others listen to me, so I usually sing only when I'm alone.

建议: Answer directly with correct tense and structure, use linking words and give a specific detail or example. Avoid fillers and unclear phrases.

示例: No, I haven't learned to sing formally because I don't think I have that talent. However, I often listen to music to change my mood; for example, I play upbeat songs when I want to feel happier.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence answering the question and give specific situations when you sing. Use linking words for coherence and correct pronouns/tense.

示例: I don't usually sing for anyone in particular. Instead, I sing to myself—for example, when I'm looking in the mirror or doing chores like cooking and cleaning.

建议: Give a clear opinion then explain with specific reasons or examples. Use correct grammar and avoid vague phrases. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example'.

示例: Yes, I think singing can make people happy because it expresses emotions and lifts the mood. For example, people often sing joyful songs to celebrate good news, while others sing energetic music to feel more upbeat.

建议: State your preference clearly and provide a specific reason with an example. Improve sentence structure and vocabulary choice (e.g., 'understand the singer's emotion').

示例: Yes, I prefer listening to others sing because I can understand the singer's emotions and appreciate their technique. For instance, I enjoy watching live performances to feel the atmosphere and learn from the vocal expression.

建议: Use past tense accurately and organize answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Mention a specific memory to make the answer more vivid.

示例: Yes, I took music classes in primary school. I remember our teacher asked us to sing on stage in groups, which was fun but also made some children laugh or feel shy.

× Actually I don't like singing because I think my voice is very bad and sometimes I feel shy when I singing and other listen to me so if I singing only with myself.

✓ Actually I don't like singing because I think my voice is very bad and sometimes I feel shy when I sing and others listen to me, so I only sing by myself.

The sentence uses incorrect verb forms: 'when I singing' and 'if I singing' should use the base form 'sing' after subject and simple present contexts. Also 'other' should be plural 'others'. Use 'by myself' or 'on my own' to express doing something alone. Improve by using correct present tense forms and plural pronoun: 'when I sing', 'others'.

× I didn't learn how to singing, uh, because that was my type or not my talent to sing uh, but I like to listen music umm, because when I want to change my mood, start to playing some music.

✓ I didn't learn how to sing because it was not my type or I didn't have the talent to sing, but I like to listen to music because when I want to change my mood, I start playing some music.

After 'didn't' the base verb form 'sing' is required, not 'singing'. 'Listen music' needs the preposition 'to'. 'Start to playing' is incorrect; say 'start playing' or 'start to play'. Also clarify 'that was my type or not my talent' to 'it was not my type or I didn't have the talent'. Use consistent past tense for the learning part and present simple for habitual likes.

× I didn't think for anyone, uh, while if I thinking also with me, I looked at the mirror and start singing or we'll do something like cooking or cleaning or, uh, do some, uh, do my meals start.

✓ I don't think about singing for anyone. If I do think of singing, I look in the mirror and start singing, or I do something like cooking, cleaning, or preparing my meal.

The original mixes tenses and incorrect pronouns/phrases: 'think for anyone' should be 'think about singing for anyone' or better 'don't sing for anyone'. 'If I thinking also with me' is ungrammatical; use 'If I do think of singing'. 'I looked at the mirror' should match present habitual 'I look in the mirror'. 'we'll do something' is wrong in context; use 'I do something'. 'do my meals start' is ungrammatical—use 'prepare my meal(s)'. Ensure subject pronoun consistency and correct verb forms.

× I believe yes, when people start singing that's mean these people happy or has some good news to do that, umm actually if singing heavy music, uh, some people uh, singing to change their mood.

✓ I believe so. When people start singing, that means they are happy or have some good news. Actually, when singing heavy music, some people sing to change their mood.

Use 'that means' not 'that's mean'. 'These people happy or has' should be 'they are happy or have'. Maintain subject-verb agreement and correct tense. 'If singing heavy music' should be 'when singing heavy music' or 'when they sing heavy music'. Use base verb 'sing' with the subject 'some people'.

× Yes, I prefer listening rather than singing because when I listen I can feel, uh, what the singer uh, need to know or it's good thing when I listen other people.

✓ Yes, I prefer listening rather than singing because when I listen I can feel what the singer needs to express, and it's a good thing when I listen to other people.

'Need to know' is incorrect here; likely meant 'needs to express' or 'wants to convey'. 'Listen other people' requires the preposition 'to': 'listen to other people'. Also use third-person singular 'needs' for 'the singer'. Improve clarity by choosing appropriate verb ('express' or 'convey').

× Yes, when a primary school, we have a course called music. Our teacher is say group by group come to the stage and start singing. That is very fun to do that. Some people laugh, some people shy.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school, we had a course called music. Our teacher would say for groups to come to the stage and start singing. That was very fun. Some people laughed, some people were shy.

Use 'when I was in primary school' to set past time. 'We have' should be past 'we had'. 'Our teacher is say' should be past habitual 'our teacher would say' or 'our teacher said'. 'Some people laugh' and 'some people shy' must be past tense: 'laughed' and 'were shy'. Ensure past tense consistency and include verbs where missing.